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Iris-Zeible — SDL :: Yan Qian VS Hanabi 9
Published: 2008-04-12 08:57:36 +0000 UTC; Views: 6554; Favourites: 75; Downloads: 82
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Redball tournament :
Dueling with
The last page <3
Comment and Critiques are welcomed!
Except the toning is unclean, weak backgrounds, too much close ups and crappy grammar... I understand those weaknesses of mine. ;;
I might proofread it later. xD Ha-ha-ha-ha-ha... it hurts my head to compose all the dialogs. @_@;; I hope my english sounds better compare to the last comic I did. .__.;;
Last panel is one of my favourite. >DDDDDD MWA-HAHAHAHA-- The twisted side of Dembe.
Yes, he hate it when he "sense" that some guys are trying to get close to Qian.
Thanks to all who allowed me to use your precious characters in the story, I hope you... enjoy seeing them in my stlyle. xDDD
For those who i can't manage to ask before I draw... (Rex, Ree, Pinoko, Kurori..) I apologoze... x__x
Karasu was different though, I have ~dymaraway 's full permission to draw him anytime.
Please ask--if you have any question about the comic. (like you dont understand any part of the story)
And again, feel free to include Yan Qian or Dembe in your story/entries!
Its fun to have more friends in their little journey of SDL.
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Comments: 94
That was great. I always wondered how it would be to fight Hanabi cuz she's so cute and little ^_^
You did it well.
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I was looking for a comic to read here on diviantart and this was what I was looking for
great work!
I loved reading it!
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UWAH!! SO CUTE!!! >w<
That was a great Deal!!! xD The expressions are so Kawaii!!! OwO
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Possibly my favourite battle in all SDL so far. :3 You are right, the character interaction soo sells it...Two thumbs up! Not many other people can handle drawing others' characters well apparently...
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WOW!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!~~~
that is really good!!!~~~
the lines,,, the lay out....EVERYTHING!!!~~
it's like a real manga!!~~ are you planning on publishing it??~~
it's really good!!!~~~~
awesome!!!~~~i wish i could draw like you~
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Yes, he's a wise ass. xDDDDDDD
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Aww, I LOVED this comic!
Omg, I think that was the first time that I saw Propagandist XIX not chibi, and that surprised me! For a moment I didn't notice who he was, hehe! But, anyways, the important thing is that I loved everything of this HQ, I think you already know ('cause I commented in all the pages XD ~ omg) but I want to say now everything again, since I finished to read it. Your work on this comic was wonderful. You really improved a lot! The other stories were also beautiful, but on this one you showed a brilliant wonderful and awesome work! Really, the distribution of the panels was amazing, it made the reading not tedious. On the contrary it really made me want to enter on the story. Another thing that surprised me was the interaction of the characters. As always, Yan Qian and Dembe were very cute and adorable! I really love them! And you drew the other characters so beautifully and with such a presence of their personalities, that you created a beautiful and exciting story. The expressions, movements, and sceneries and also the fighting scenes were just WONDERFUL. I must apologize again about my bad english (you must be tired with that XD), but I just want you to know what I felt about your story and art!
Congratulations! Can't wait to see more stories about Yan Qian and Dembeee ! ~
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Awesome! <3 I loved it! xD It was very cute and full of action!
I really think your comics are really cool. :>
I'm not so great at offering critiques, so I won't but I did enjoy it. <3
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aw p.p I wish they woulda let you slide on the lateness -_- This is snuggly p.p and I'm slowly getting used to not being able to completely understand your english ^-^
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Lol... you make me wanna cry more. TTATT
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if i ever put my charaters in SDL do u think.... well yan qian and dembe can be friends with mine?
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I didn't mean to make you cry.... :0 *has cloth ready to wipe tears*
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Without a shadow of a doubt, this is your best SDL entry yet! You just get better every time Iris.
The aesthetics might not be as beautiful as they were in round 1, but the storyline here is one of the best I've seen in a duel! It had underlying plot, a smart resolution and had loads of cameo appearances! It's everything that an SDL entry should be and a whole lot more.
Round 2 also saw you trying out lots of interesting techniques, particularly ones dealing with perspective. It made thing really dynamic, something you probably needed in a entry with so many characters in it.
This was very enjoyable to read. You'd better win this round, because even though its a tough thing to say, I don't think that *ShikakuSuika 's entry has anywhere near as much going for it as yours does.
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Man, million thanks for the sweet comment, Zidane! I don't mean you are acting sweet, but this comment made me goes flying in the cloud lol!! XDDDDD
The mood of the entries each time is all depends on the opponent I had. The first opponent Hiroshi is somewhat a cooler + Psycho person... So I made the entries somewhat darker... xD;;
And VSing Hanabi might be the most enjoyable out of all! Might because of-- I plainly love my clan 
Hurry and join GG!! D: *demands*
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wow so cool
=3
it's kinda weird reading skikakutsuika's then yours... because...
in her's she wins and in yours u win.. and .... confuse confuse! T_T
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Oh, this is an Original Character League, which means: -
When we are dueling, both of us draw a comic and tell a story of how our OC win the battle.
So we both draw ourselves win.
And the judgers will decide whose comic is better, and that will be the winner.
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ah i see..
makes more sense
=3
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awesome comic! It made me lol. xD I love your style. I really liked the fighting scenes! Good work!
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Awww thanks a lot!!
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Nicely done I liked how the stroy evolved^^
Keep it on
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LOL, great job, I hope I'll do well in my first duel (God knows WHEN!!!) anyway, I enjoyed it! I just have a question, how do you settle who wins/loses?
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Good luck, and thanks.
Only the judgers from will decide the win and lost base on your entry.
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O[]O||| that's how they do it?
You mean, as in entry like you SDL profile entry? that sucks...
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No lol! They decide the winning base on your entry (your duel comic/ animation).
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so for example, IF we duel, they say you'll win because you draw better than me or something like that? (don't worry I dont think I'm ready to duel just yet and I admit I still have some mistakes in drawing 
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18 A4 pages... + greyscaling... in 3 weeks... I am speechless...
You skills are not something to be questioned anyway, but it still amazes me every time I see it. Yan Quian & Hanabi are so well depicted and so cute. As well as Vuuk and all the other cameos.
Flawless. You rock.
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how do you know it was 18 A4 papers...? XD;; Did I mention that anywhere? *lol*
Thank you Chibi-sama! To be honest, i'm really looking forward to meet Luna in the battle... its gonna be a grand finale! (if that happens.)
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i love your comic style. it looks professional ^^ i also love how you incorporated so many characters into this. good luck!
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Thanks. i still have lots to learn though.
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np ^^ you never stop learning as an artist i think.
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that was the best thing i could've read before i went to sleep.
great work, for certain.
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ahaha! Thank you so much!
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me want moar also! (hello again!
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lolz, must we always meet like this? XD
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i added yew in my freinds list so there! >:]
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:3 reeeeeallly? LOL, thanks!
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Thanks! Ayyattousai! ^__^ Good luck in your own duel too!
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