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Iscariot-Priest In reply to ??? [2009-02-02 06:39:58 +0000 UTC]
Thanks. I haven't looked at this in ages.
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utqtbry In reply to Iscariot-Priest [2007-10-09 21:22:11 +0000 UTC]
Awesome, I'm glad I understood it then! Usually I enjoy it, but don't always get the intended meaning.
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TheChamele0n [2007-08-22 17:53:34 +0000 UTC]
What is a "villanelle"?
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Iscariot-Priest In reply to TheChamele0n [2007-08-23 16:31:16 +0000 UTC]
It's an old poetry style, where certain lines are repeated through out the poem.
This makes it more restricted, forcing the poet to draw more meaning out of fewer words.
I think the wiki link is pretty comprehensive for villanelles
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Renee85 [2007-04-27 17:44:27 +0000 UTC]
i really liked this. the vocab is simple but the form is skillyfully arranged. makes it nice to listen to and also pleasing to look at. way to gooo!! reminded me of a spring time crush
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FeralFlames [2007-04-14 03:17:49 +0000 UTC]
Awe! That's really sweet!!! I love it!
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Iscariot-Priest In reply to whateverwinnie [2007-04-09 15:47:06 +0000 UTC]
Thanks. I think I'll just keep the new one on. After all if anyone wants the original, I can always note them a copy.
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desperatelyseeking [2007-04-07 23:24:03 +0000 UTC]
Again, I have no advanced critque for you but I do have this:
Lovely. Very likeable and easy to read. The rhymes and repititions make me smile and the clever use of lines is really lovely.
Overall, I enjoyed reading this a lot.
I realise I barely comment on your stuff nowadays, I've just been very busy and I rarely have any true constructive criticism anyway.
x
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Iscariot-Priest In reply to desperatelyseeking [2007-04-08 00:04:23 +0000 UTC]
Eh, don't worry 'bout it. As long as you enjoyed reading it, it's good enough.
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ninjaweed [2007-04-07 21:47:46 +0000 UTC]
it's all... rhymey and stuff. wow. um, I don't know, it's just a very likeable poem.
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Iscariot-Priest In reply to ninjaweed [2007-04-08 00:03:10 +0000 UTC]
Thanks. It's a villanelle, so it kinda has to be rhymey.
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InklessQuill [2007-04-07 02:04:25 +0000 UTC]
Brilliant.
Very cute.
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Tyrobia [2007-04-06 19:19:05 +0000 UTC]
I agree with most of the comments. This poem was a cute one. It's one of those poems that you can actually see playing itself out...and while that's not what a lot of older poets would say what a poem is about...I'd have to say that there is an art in literal poetry, and you do a nice job.
Kudos.
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Tyrobia In reply to Iscariot-Priest [2007-04-07 07:09:18 +0000 UTC]
Sweet! Love to see the mind wander and evolve! Let me know when it's revised.
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Tyrobia In reply to Iscariot-Priest [2007-04-07 17:19:03 +0000 UTC]
I just noticed that right before I put that up. Would you mind sending me the original so I could compare?
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SunshineLightBright In reply to Iscariot-Priest [2006-12-15 11:02:15 +0000 UTC]
most welcome...for some reason I'm unable to add U to my friends List...Do U know why?
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Iscariot-Priest In reply to l0stwhispers [2006-10-22 09:38:44 +0000 UTC]
Take your time, the key is the first and third lines of the first stanza. Figure-out how you can reuse them and your half way there.
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