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IsolationRow — Liar Liar
Published: 2011-03-18 13:13:10 +0000 UTC; Views: 172; Favourites: 4; Downloads: 5
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Description She lies about her pain
For she has suffered none
Her eyes reflect her name
Her freedom is not fun

Her distrust is but a lie
She lies about her pain
Happiness passed by
Her heart is vain

Her lies are insulting
To those that suffer still
Every syllable a sting
For this pain is not a thrill

She lies about her pain
To make herself interesting
Every time I feel more strain
Every word is crushing

She lies about her pain
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Comments: 10

creaking-door [2011-03-19 09:55:18 +0000 UTC]

Some good lines in a prickly poem that reflects both false and true. But even if false, there is still an underlying problem.

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silvercrow13 [2011-03-19 04:42:36 +0000 UTC]

I like it I have a friend sort of like that. She annoys me so much...
Well done!!!!

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IsolationRow In reply to silvercrow13 [2011-03-19 07:52:19 +0000 UTC]

I couldn't put up with having a friend like that >.<

Thankyou

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silvercrow13 In reply to IsolationRow [2011-03-20 02:26:59 +0000 UTC]

I can barely put up with her. But she's still a good person besides those things...

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DragonsChest [2011-03-19 02:06:21 +0000 UTC]

Can go back and refine it when you are sober...

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IsolationRow In reply to DragonsChest [2011-03-19 07:52:34 +0000 UTC]

Yeah.. I might

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THE-EGO [2011-03-18 22:48:43 +0000 UTC]

great work... also considering you were drunk ha ha love it

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IsolationRow In reply to THE-EGO [2011-03-19 07:52:41 +0000 UTC]

Hahaha thanks

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Loratina [2011-03-18 19:37:11 +0000 UTC]

It's a good basis for a start x) obviously needs some punctuation adding in but i like it x) **thumbs up**

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IsolationRow In reply to Loratina [2011-03-19 07:53:07 +0000 UTC]

<3 Thanks, I may return to it one day and see if it's worth fixing

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