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IsThisWorthIt15 — Four Letter Lie
Published: 2012-01-19 20:47:12 +0000 UTC; Views: 482; Favourites: 16; Downloads: 10
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Mushy, you told me my feelings have changedI don't know if its been since you came back, or the mindgames/arguments but something has changed
And I'm not sure if it's me or you...I tried to talk about it but you shut it out.
Atleast I'm tying....
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I love the one-in-a-million theme here. However, the background does not have much to do with love or gender, as your caption does. I would interpret the theme as being one of loneliness, or an equivalent emotion. This could be extrapolated to include 'broken hearts,' but perhaps you could approach the subject a little differently.
I do, however, like your use of the word "I" as opposed to "you," or "one," especially since the photo emphasizes the concept of the self.
Your last sentence, I feel, could be changed slightly in order to truly capture the tone of the photo as well as the meaning you are trying to make. Perhaps try something like "As I become smothered by doubt, You seem to be drifting away," which would certainly play upon the theme of being lost in a crowd. It is metaphorical, but uses "you," instead of "him," which is slightly more opaque a meaning, and should work well with your piece.
One other thing; I had a hard time reading the words, since there were so many black spots behind them. If you used a sort of tape effect, making the background seem more white and foggy immediately behind your type, they should stand out a little better.
I hope my critique helped!
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Mushy, we arguing. Always have, probably always will
but your drilling into me the past is the past, and you've gone back to being my mushy so its fine (:
Love you still so dont worry :L
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Im good :3
You..
Maybe need help?
I can always listen or something ._.
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