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ixchel — Velveteen rabbit
Published: 2003-09-23 19:34:33 +0000 UTC; Views: 231; Favourites: 5; Downloads: 29
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Red velveteen kisses,little rabbit,
i want to make you real-
i want you to feel.
The primal beat
of your temples
ripples through my breast-
your silken face clutched to my open heart.
The radiating heat
from your lips
to my chest
warms my goose-pimpled skin.
I dig in
to your supple shoulders
with french nails-
I want inside you.
You can cringe lightly,
but you must embrace me
while i rip through your layers,
to uncover lost treasure.
I'm here to see the darkness
of your putrid shame,
and to ingite
a forgotten conscience.
But my determined fingers
sift aimlessly through cloudy veils
of doubt and anger-
you choose to elude me.
Red velveteen kisses,
Little rabbit,
I want to make you real-
But only you can choose to feel.
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Comments: 6
wow. not bad indeed. im not actually used to reading poetry in such a short verse, but damn, it sounds good.
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now that i know you're a chick, i'm starting to notice it in all your writing *still feels like a simpleton*
this composition is beautiful. very basic and primal in the message, but the ideals behind it are extrememly deep which i find fantastic. the mix of the two makes this very easy to follow and attach yourself to, but very unsettling, which is sorta what you said. i don't know if that was in the design of this poem but hey! you still created a work of awesomiety.
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the velveteen rabbit concept is clever. i like it.
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the whole poem flows nicely ..
i don't think anything is wrong with the last line.
i like the velveteen rabbit ..
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"But only you can choose to feel" maybe...
I like it. Good poem.
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