Comments: 23
Jadite In reply to MazWeaver [2012-08-18 03:52:02 +0000 UTC]
i am very glad you enjoyed this. (: thank you so much for your kind words.
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scribblingnooly [2012-08-13 13:05:27 +0000 UTC]
A poignant, beautiful and wonderfully structured piece.
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arabesque-o [2012-07-27 01:10:07 +0000 UTC]
i'va fallen for the last 3 lines of this<3
(does it seem creepy that i could help but whisper this out loud, because something this good shouldn't just populate my dusty monitor?)
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Jadite In reply to arabesque-o [2012-07-28 04:56:47 +0000 UTC]
thank youuu. <3
(nope. not at all. xD)
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Postmorteum [2012-07-21 07:59:45 +0000 UTC]
Wow I absolutely love:
"only second-hand dust, only
things i could not get rid of,"
and
"i just turned them into the skeletons in my closet,
the skeletons i wear inside of my body.)"
A very thoughtful and creative piece.
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Jadite In reply to Postmorteum [2012-07-21 14:04:07 +0000 UTC]
aw, thank you. i appreciate your kind comment. <3
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DestinyChick [2012-07-16 19:17:59 +0000 UTC]
my favorite stanza is about the cage...and I second what Liz said...morbid turned elegant : D
and the concept of the skeletons being inside the body instead of in the closet is neat and innovative ^^
good job!
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Jadite In reply to DestinyChick [2012-07-17 13:11:02 +0000 UTC]
aw, thank you. <3
i guess i was hoping you'd hear the way my skeleton rattled my fear that you'd leave me too.
^ line from an old poem. yeeeah. -snuggles against-
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Sigma-Echo-Seven [2012-07-16 05:47:40 +0000 UTC]
Great anatomical poem! Loved the way you described each part.
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OhSententia [2012-07-16 03:54:55 +0000 UTC]
you have a lovely way of making something so morbid sound very elegant.
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Jadite In reply to OhSententia [2012-07-16 03:59:29 +0000 UTC]
why thank you. c: it was supposed to be even more morbid. i'm not quite sure it worked.
but that's what rewrites are for, i suppose.
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OhSententia In reply to Jadite [2012-07-16 04:01:52 +0000 UTC]
it is, i think. xD
i still find it very surreal and like... pretty though. maybe im just weird. |D
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Jadite In reply to OhSententia [2012-07-16 04:08:00 +0000 UTC]
oh goodie. c:
nah, i tried for surreal and kind of for pretty.
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OhSententia In reply to Jadite [2012-07-16 04:19:58 +0000 UTC]
good, good. C': im glad it came off how you intended then.
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