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JaystarNOW — Lets Watch the City Burn
Published: 2012-12-22 22:55:23 +0000 UTC; Views: 866; Favourites: 7; Downloads: 10
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This is a pic I made on MS paint and no tablet so be kind this took me 2 hours cuz Paint is FIRETRUCKING stupid!Related content
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Alright- This is my first critique, so I'm sorry if I'm too harsh, or don't make sense or something.
Vision- First, the cat. I suggest studying some anatomy, as the legs, both back and front, look thin and unproportioned. The tail seems oddly connected and is in an awkward position. Next- the fire. Most fire is not composed of three solid layers of red, yellow, and orange. I would say that you should blend the three together better, perhaps by using intermediate colors between.
Originality- In general, a fire sence is not that original, but the reason I gave it 3 stars out of 5 was because the idea of a cat watching a city burn to the ground was intriguiging to me.
Technique- The unshaded and slightly scribbly lineart of this piece works, unfortunatly, agaist you. If you have straightined and smoothed the lines more, and added shading caused by the light of the roaring fire. Also, the awkward lines caused by the fill-bucketing tool take away from the overall piece as well.
Impact- Eh- the impact greatly suffers due to factors mentioned above, but the bright colors of the fire in contrast to the grey cat and dark buildings add to the ferociousness of the fire.
Overall- A nice idea, but it could have been implemented better. Study anatomy and shading a bit more, and this piece could be amazing!
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well the fire dosent look right at all! and his face is varry long. his nose isent where i should be. and it looks like its raining confedy!windows dont look like that on sky scrapers i do believe that there would be more bildings. the paws look like there almost about to brake and you should try to finde a new way to draw back legs. the tail should be slightly curlyer unless this is one pecific cat that has a scinny wolf tail. im sorry for all the crittisism but i still like it!!!! i love the "lets wach the city burn" thing that is cool! ^^
i hope this helps ^^
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I agree with the person below , you are being too harsh . For me too , I would be furious if you gave critique like this on my artwork .
It's good how you said something nice about it at the end , but your spelling errors and bad manner of expressing your opinion blurs it out .
I don't know how jaystar can think this critique is fair , and for that point I respect her .
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i know im a bad speller X3 i dident mean to be harsh tho. i was trying to give her pointers. but i respect that you feel as if it was mean. at first i dident know if i should have sent it im sorry if you think i sound mean
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no affence but this is a little harsh, like really harsh. I would be verybmad if you said this to me.
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oh...well i said sorry / : (
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Pros:
The tail is nice. The face is good as well. And so is the tail. From what I see you have the main jist of drawing cats! It just needs a bit tweaking~
Cons:
Body-For the legs, the haunch isn't there. and the arms also has a bump in the front of it. ((If that makes sense xD))
There are no 'fingers' for the paws. The hail looks like its attached to the ears, when its usually supposed to be on its head.
For the coloring I would suggest using the pencil tool (for the outline) instead of the paint tool, then when you use the fill button you won't get those unattractive dots popping up. I waould also put the words in last, so the dots wont appear.
Sorry its a lot, but lets call it constructive critisizum!
I also give out a couple of free art lessons if you or a friend is interested! e.deviantart.net/emoticons/s/s… " width="15" height="15" alt="
Have a good day!
~Star
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I'm going to make a small reply on the fact you stated "you seem to have the jist of drawing cats" you stated in the pros.
In all seriousness, I would not say they have the "jist" of doing so. I think they need to slow down and pull out a bunch of reference pictures and learn the basic cat anatomy. Although it looks like a cat, it has absolutely no bone structure in it, and looks vaguely correct in terms of drawing cats.
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The body is far to skinny to begin with. The fire seems to look like water. The city back round needs work, unless you know buildings with windows that big you can see from a distance (speaking of, you need to work on perception in general). The hair on the cat is unnecessary, it just makes it look pitiful. The back legs are just bad, you'll have to erase the extra line there and make the hindquarters less chunky. It has no neck, the paws are too small, and the tail looks like a squirrels. Make the tail smoother, like a cats, a feathery tail isn't something beginners like you can pull off. It's missing claws as well.
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This was a good idea and turned out nice. c: It's very difficult to draw in Paint with a mouse, and I think you did a good job. There are some things you could work on, though. Some easy things to fix would be coloring over those colored rings around the things you filled with the paint bucket, it might take a little while but it will make your artwork look neater and more finished. Also, the anatomy on the cat could be improved. I'm not an expert on feline anatomy, but some things that stood out are the proportions of the back legs and the lack of a neck. (this guide should help you [link] ) Other than that, I can tell you tried and the result ended up cute. Keep up the good work. e.deviantart.net/emoticons/b/b… " width="15" height="15" alt="
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if you find it fun, then draw, it does not matter how it comes out as long as you enjoyed doing it. theres a lot of negative comments on this, and some are NOT called for. true, its not the best but unless you have a fair critique and actually want to HELP the person, then don't comment at all. just take a few tutorials, study the bone structures and how to draw fire and just try to improve the best you can
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no problem ;3
prove them wrong
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Honestly I like the face and though the background could have been spruced up a little more I like it. I noticed this is the NEW Ms Paint, and i recommend downloading the older version that I grew up with. Search around for the 2007 or 2008 version of Ms Paint, it's free, and a whole lot better than the junky new version. There are many tutorials on this site for cat anatomy, and red-lines. [link]
That's one of the many red lining groups and they help to try and correct your drawings so you can draw whatever it is better the next time ^_^
I'm sorry for the bad comments you've been getting.
Some people don't realize there are others who may have just started drawing, with a mouse
I remember back in 2008 i started drawing and posting my artwork that i did with a mouse and...well it wasn't the best ever. Taking time however, and trying to improve anatomy throughout almost five years up to today proved to be the best decision. You'll get better, that is if you even want to. Just draw for fun!
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Hmm, there are too many negative comments on this, seriously people, there's no need to be nasty, okay, maybe you personally don't think this is very good, but art is subjective so others may disagree, and regardless, you don't have to be rude, if you have nothing constructive to say then go look at something else.
Lol, this is probably better than I could do with a mouse X3 Although I agree with the other people who have posted sensible critique comments, there are obvious anatomical flaws etc but I won't restate them as others have already pointed them out, so I'll leave some positive observation - the expression on the face is good and I like the idea. Keep practicing and remember to use reference images when possible and you'll improve greatly in no time ^^
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i'll just save time for you ..
2 words pal , QUIT DRAWING .
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IMA KILL YOU BITCH NO ONE HURTS MY CYBER-BEST FRIEND
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You realize that they're actually looking for advice on how to improve, rather than shooting down every bit they get, right?
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Ok, I know there has been a LOT of bad comments on this, I must say some might be a little harsh, but in some scene right... You can improve but it isn't a massive fail, everyone fails in the start~ hell my art in the beginning I could stab myself with a pen X3 [Here's it to make you feel better and to prove it [link] , I think it was with a mouse? ]
But maybe look up some reference pics/Tutorials, I know how hard it can be to draw on paint, believe me, look at :devt0x1catedv1rus: [Yes My other account]
But you can do really well on it if you keep practicing! :33 Not all mouse work turns out bad! *hug*
Sorry If I offended you, I didn't mean to if I did :C
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no u did not XD thanks for the suggestions
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Your welcome, just try to ignore the mean, in the end they only want improvment C:
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No problemo, hope to see improvment!
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Could I ask a wild question, but what took in MSpaint makes those little lines when fill-tooling things?
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just the pen tool and the fill bucket XD
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Mspaint, ma mouse AND your a beginner?
it that case, you have potential my friend
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Thanks but no I was at my grandmas house and I have a tab;et at home and Photoshop but thank you XD
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paint isnt stupid its awesome >w< its easy and with good experience can look nice. just keep practicing and you'll get better
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this is just bad and you have no tablet, well neither do i
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okay, well that's just stupid. We ALL sucked when we began. She's getting better. So, let's say the kindergarten sayings. Treat someone the way you want to be treated and if you DON'T have something NICE to say, don't SAY it. I'm really disappointed that a fellow deviant wouldn't try to help someone improve their art, even when it doesn't need to be improved. This is awesome. and people just can't see that she has potential. We all do. I hope you'll think twice before you say something like that again.
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I'm sorry, but I can't say this is "awesome"
Her art does need to be improved, mostly -- I feel -- by starting back with the basics of learning cat anatomy.
Loko did not put it nicely, that's for sure, but it doesn't mean they're automatically wrong.
Jaystar cannot blame MS / a mouse for the art not being good as they wanted. MS is a brilliant program, just take a gander at *Agoraphobic-Blue for example.
A mouse may be harder, but not make things worse. I personally cannot draw with a mouse anymore, even if I used to be able too; however I know plenty of artists who make wonderful mouse-work.
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I know. pretty much everyone's art needs to be improved- I know I do. I began looking at cat anatomy, but decided not to look at a cat structure every time I draw a cat. She definitely did NOT put it nicely at all, but Jaystar took it fine. I admire her for that. If someone had said the same thing to me, I would just ignore them. And I do watch Agoraphobic-Blue. I just watched her recently. I know she can;t blame a mouse or MS paint for the decency of a drawing; nobody can, unless their computer is old and messed up. I'm getting better at mouse-work, but I prefer my tablet. I LOVE MS paint, by the way, so I hope you don't think that I don't like the program. In fact, I still do all my work on it. I just want to justify my point. She has potential. 
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I say keep on practicing & one day your mouse work will look like this [link] I used Gimp too on it but it was completely drawn with the mouse from beginning to end if you wish to try Gimp it's free to download [link]
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LOL thanks for the suggestions XD
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what i mean is you cant blame not haveing a tablet and the program, i have a tablet but i choose not to use it, and i use MSpaint and m good, and yours sucks really bad
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IMA KILL YOU BITCH NO ONE HURTS MY CYBER-BEST FRIEND
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Your not that good... -_-
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i know, but still better than them
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you know hoe you hate arrogant people? well your one of them.
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