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Firel-Wolf-88 [2019-12-17 10:48:38 +0000 UTC]
Great work buddy👍👍👍👍
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rideatiger [2018-01-17 00:38:53 +0000 UTC]
I'm rather hampered from making a deeper critique of this series by the fact that I really don't know the property at all - it's entirely new to me.
That said, I enjoyed reading it, mostly because of the strong sense of bubbling enthusiasm which stands out from every chapter and the effervescent life of the momentum which it generates. And those attributes derive wholly from the author's ability to create narrative movement which never really flags.
Personally I would edit a few of the less direct elements to lend the lead narrative yet more force - and some closer attention to consistent quality of English never goes amiss, either (!) but, overall, I think this stands up well as a specifically focused storyline.
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jazz316 In reply to rideatiger [2018-01-17 00:41:50 +0000 UTC]
Thank you very much! I greatly appreciate your comment about the story in general. Im glad you enjoyed it despite not knowing the series I do appreciate your telling of what I need to fix up and what to look out for. I still have so much to learn but I always appreciate when people can tell me what I need to work on and be careful of
Again thank you so much for reading this story It really makes me so happy to have such a great person like yourself to read it over.
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rideatiger In reply to jazz316 [2018-01-17 00:46:23 +0000 UTC]
Oh, you're very welcome! I did enjoy it - though it's somewhat outside of my usual range of interests. Still, never a bad thing to see what motivates others. And you really do create a powerful sense of activity and movement which you (mostly) sustain across the chapters.
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jazz316 In reply to rideatiger [2018-01-17 00:50:58 +0000 UTC]
I see. Well as you said its never a bad thing to see what others like and see what was their inspiration too
Thank you again. I certainly tried to make it a decent story based on the cartoon in general.
speaking of that would you like the Wiki of what the cartoon is?
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rideatiger In reply to jazz316 [2018-01-18 21:41:21 +0000 UTC]
I think you pulled it off well.
I did actually read up swiftly before beginning your story series. I was unaware of it before, you see, so needed some background. Wiki is helpful for summaries.
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jazz316 In reply to rideatiger [2018-01-18 21:44:27 +0000 UTC]
Thank you very much
I see, Awesome! To me it was the best Cartoon Ever! It is one of the few that actually lasted a good long time and even ended with an incredible film that most cartoon films fail miserable at. I can go on and on about lol. But the Characters, The Misadventures, and how the cartoon evolved over seasons and its specials gave it a great sense of unpredictablilty since sometimes the show catches you by surprise on what would happen
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rideatiger In reply to jazz316 [2018-01-21 19:40:23 +0000 UTC]
It plainly meant a lot to a great many people - and your tribute is eloquent testimony to that.
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Bendorah [2017-09-11 17:15:31 +0000 UTC]
Thank god, they prevented a terrible diaster in their world!
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