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jeremyjosh — The Maestro
Published: 2010-01-07 03:21:39 +0000 UTC; Views: 710; Favourites: 5; Downloads: 20
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As the Maestro enters the cathedral of oldThe creaking door is solemnly greeted by crows
Like children of his shadow they encamp all around
Ravenously awaiting the banquet of sound
His cloak dances round his feet like children behind him
He sits, grey eyes commanding glacial silence
As skeletal hands touch the porcelain keys
The organ awakens and commences to speak
With a boisterous voice the ornate silence is shattered
Like a gossiping crowd the crows also chatter
With delight they revel in its terrible tales
Of gallows and death and malevolent gales
The chords reverberate as a clock on the hour
The ghoulish chorus wails like a psychotic choir
Notes tempestuously roar in a torrent of rain
And fingers crackle and dance enjoying the pain
In the midst of the maelstrom, the crows cease to chat
The Maestro convulses with laughter, his wrinkles relax
As he reopens his eyes lips crack open to say....
"What a nice little melody. Enough happiness for today."
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Comments: 30
I kept picturing the Grim Reaper for some reason. heh. I enjoyed envisioning the various metaphors and analogies you made. 
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Wow ol' Grimmy didn't cross my mind, lol. Thanks
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You're welcome. That's just what I imagined but you're the writer, so maybe you had another vision.
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It's always good to hear other people's interpretations 
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Thanks for always reading mine!
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As long as you post em I'll read em 
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The mood and the language is really superb! I can't wait to see it illustrated!
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I think this is very well written, except for the grammatical structure. It seems like one very long run-on sentence and the lack of any periods and hardly any commas means that you lose a lot of the rhythmic effect of the poem.
Apart from that it is very good.
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Thanks janie 
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most certainly, that response twas my grand pleasure indeed.
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This is so good! You conjour great images, i cant wait to see the illustration!
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Thanks so much
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let me know when you do! Actually, i might watch you, that okay?
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Of course it is! I'll watch you too ^^
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Oh my goodness. I was captured throughout the piece. The rhyme scheme wasn't tiresome at all, lovely cadence and beautiful images.
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Thank you so much! I was worrying a lot about the rhyming to be honest. Thanks for your kind words
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Illustration? Really?! That'd be really cool.
I did get some awesome pictures in my mind as I was reading about this individual. I actually kind of like him, as a person, and I'm not entirely sure why. Maybe it's because I can relate to him. He goes somewhere that seems secluded to create something that only nature is a witness to. And it makes him happy.
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It will be I promise!
Thanks a lot
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