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JHurlburt — Batman Pg1
Published: 2012-07-03 23:25:51 +0000 UTC; Views: 560; Favourites: 14; Downloads: 5
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Heres the link for the script.[link]batman is copyright of DC Comics
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Beautiful work as always! I love your pencils! I like how each panel gets smaller, helping it feel like you're zooming in on the action.
Your angle for panel one is superb, I love the perspective. Just remember to watch your proportions e.deviantart.net/emoticons/s/s… " width="15" height="15" alt="
Panel 2: Youve got some great backgrounds here. Unfortunately things look out of proportion. Your building are a bit too small and squat, your roads too narrow. The car the family is in looks a little large. But I love the poses of each person you've drawn, I can feel the action happening.
Panel 3: Nice angle, but the car is way too wide e.deviantart.net/emoticons/s/s… " width="15" height="15" alt="
Be careful with drawing other people's scripts. From what I gather in reading the script, you've not followed the angles they've asked for. It's a minor thing, as I do like your angles, but when applying for a company such as Marvel or DC, it probably pays to follow the script exactly e.deviantart.net/emoticons/s/s… " width="15" height="15" alt="
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You're pencils are very nice and clean. Your architecture looks very good, which is where many artists (myself included) are weak. The pacing is fine too. The one down mark I would have to give you is to either draw what you know or use references. This is applicable to the vehicles mainly. You vehicles are acceptable, but the are more a representation of the idea of a car rather than what an actual car looks like. For example, the front seats are clearly seats, but they look more like lounge chairs than the bucket seats found in most cars. This is case where reference would have made ton of difference. Another example is in the first panel, again the idea of vehicle, but not what vehicles actually look like. I understand that the boxy angles are easier to draw and visualize mentally but cars and trucks are smooth and curvy.
All that said. It's much better than I could do drawing without references.
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Hey thanks for your time.
Thats the kind of stuff the pros also pointed out at the con. Consistant critiques,so I Defiantly know what i got to work on.
Thanks again.
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At least you're making a very solid effort and I'd say you're very nearly there. Most of us give up at some point. Look forward to seeing where you go with it.
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Thanks for the kind words. One of the editors from spacegoat productions told me im about 90% of the way there, made me feel pretty good.
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