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Jorsh — Cheshire Pseudo

Published: 2004-07-07 06:41:19 +0000 UTC; Views: 274; Favourites: 4; Downloads: 15
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Description Her hands lifted from my vision
Her awaiting present shows
Seeing what she’s done before me
Knowing this is what I chose
Let her take control within me
Let her do what I could not
Allow my darling me to blossom
And leave social fruit to rot

Crying out at what’s before me
No perception of what’s done
Some war torn battlefield before me
Upon my knees, curse heavens son

And there she smiles, still behind me
Hands on shoulders, gentle strokes
'I did this all for you, my darling
All they did was purely hoax
Twisting smoke of your abandon
See the fruits of their demise
Over-ripened without purpose
So I plucked them from the skies'

"It’s for your benefit, my child
You can’t see now, but soon you'll see
Your life will grow from these new trimmings
You’ll be more than you could be"
And as I turn to face the giver
The one who took the reins to guide
I see her dissipate and shimmer
And flow back in me, again to hide
But though her presence, and her body
Now conveyed into my core
Her grin still floating, always floating
Like her affect on me, that whore

Released tensions separated
Cheshire pseudo's smile stays
So now although the person, far departed
Lingering mood in heaven sways



'It’s for your benefit, my child
You can’t see now, but soon you'll see
Your life will grow from these new trimmings
You’ll be more than you could be'
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Comments: 8

wu-xia [2006-04-18 00:31:34 +0000 UTC]

Yeah.

I never read this before.

It seems a cop out to say now how much I love it because you told me about it already, but I do really like it. Sometimes your words are a little clumsy, sometimes theyre perfect and they ring.
In its entirety it strikes a chord in me.
As your words so often do.

I really like it.

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Jorsh In reply to wu-xia [2006-04-18 08:13:01 +0000 UTC]

Thanks.
I know its.. still kinda messy.
But i.. can't.. do much more to it.

nor do i feel i should. just because.. editing it now would be like.. changing.. something.
something.. i dunno.
anyway. yeah. i'm glad you like it.

just because. ya know. its just important that you don't.. hate it.
or something.

iiiiii dunno

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hopeless-dreaming [2005-09-30 14:27:18 +0000 UTC]

this is amazing, the whole concept and the way you carried it out.
love it

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Jorsh In reply to hopeless-dreaming [2005-09-30 14:31:40 +0000 UTC]

thanks, i totally appreciate that..

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Simply-Volatile [2004-08-05 16:47:43 +0000 UTC]

GREAT writing... you are a brilliant artist and poet... keep it up.

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sp-az [2004-07-08 04:12:56 +0000 UTC]

wow... this is so amazing. it flows perfectly, it means so much..it's just generally awesome

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cow-a-socky [2004-07-07 17:20:37 +0000 UTC]

i like this ..its a very strong peice... i like all your work....you have a beutiful gallery

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Jorsh In reply to cow-a-socky [2004-07-08 03:02:17 +0000 UTC]

oh, thankyou...

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