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havent-slept [2011-02-20 21:38:15 +0000 UTC]
I like the sequence, it makes her look like she's 'pulling' herself out of the puddle
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Scarouselle [2011-02-20 20:08:30 +0000 UTC]
I have my own idea of how a slimegirl rising from a "puddle form" should look like, and it is alot slower. That being said, I shouldn't let that affect my judgement, so here goes - it doesn't fit. First she's a serene puddle, then suddenly she almost violently pries out her form from herself in what can only be described as a action sequence, and then she yawns. It just doesn't make sense. Now, had she for example been awoken by her phone ringing, telling her she was late to a appointment of some sort, and then had she kept running it would've looked alot better. So in conclusion - the "story" needs improvement, but the rising was very talented. Tell your friend to keep practicing that and he'll go places.
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Scarouselle In reply to Nyakuro [2011-02-20 22:05:52 +0000 UTC]
It took some time but yes, I noticed the flip before you told me. It's possible it would've worked better if you showed it from the side, but since all panels seem to be drawn from the same angle it would perhaps cause confusion?
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Nyakuro In reply to Scarouselle [2011-02-20 22:24:13 +0000 UTC]
yeah, well, what would have come handy was to have done an additional panel between 5 and 6, showing how she was lifting her up "pulling" out her legs and in the 6th one show her standing on her hands completely perpendicular to the floor, but since we talk about 7 panels more or less and i'm lazy xD! i wanted to rush out things. So i've tried to do it in a 3/4 perspective, my first though though was a more action approach showing it with a 3 point perspective, but at the end it came out like this , on a comic i won't have this problem since i can use whatever angle shot i want xD. But in a sequence, i'm a little bit bound. But well, you have to try make the watcher feel what is supposed to feel despite the angle shot you are using xD! some are easier or fit better, others are harder but i are always fun to do
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Kai-Chronaius In reply to Scarouselle [2011-02-20 20:29:29 +0000 UTC]
To be honest, this is actually part one of the sequence. There's a second page to this, but eh, I guess. I still like it :3
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