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Kamden โ OIAI Ch. 2-1
Published: 2008-03-11 03:41:41 +0000 UTC; Views: 8941; Favourites: 128; Downloads: 83
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Read right to left, like a Japanese mangaPrevious: Ch 2 Title Page
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Beginning: Cover
As I said in a previous journal, I'm trying a new technique for the doujinshi pages. This page was done in ink on marker paper, with the gray and the text done on Photoshop. I got some French Curves to help me with the action lines, and I think it looks more professional this time. Well, except for the 5th panel, which failed.
Deidara is eight now, and he is a genin. He is training with his jounin instructor, Hidoi-sensei.
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Wow this looks much better and cleaner, it looks so proffesional o_o AWESOME
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He DEFINETALLY does not looks 8. Or maybe I'm too familiar with my interpretation of 8-year-old Deidara.
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Yeap,I have to say that this page looks a little much more better!
ฮฮฑฮปฮฎ ฮดฮฟฯ
ฮปฮตฮนฮฌ!
And Deidara now looks a lot more,his original older!(sorry for my bad english)
You have got quite better!
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Like the fifth panel!
Just deis nose looks a lillbit thickโฆ I think .___.
Mnot sureโฆ
But I like the way his pose came out^^
And concerning hidoi, I think his faceโs perspective is the prob and not the whole pose. In my opinion it looks like seeing the body overhead and the head from the front.
But the rest is nicely done!!
Cant wait for more!!
*clicks on the next page*
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I actually really like the movement lines of the fifth panel. Deidara's pose turned out better than you might think, too 
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Oh, I'm fine with Deidara's pose. It's Hidoi's that turned out looking awkward.
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yes..i can't wait for the next pages >.< i wonder if he still thinks abt the promise his mom made him..
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Hmm. . . maaaybe. . . you might find that out later in this chapter. . . XD
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w00t. This looks almost like you got from real manga! Excelent.<3
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Your welcome, as you completely deserve it.
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Thanks! The sketch for the next page is almost complete.
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WOO~!!! Can't wait to read/see it!
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Ok just finished it^^
I do like that, seems to be the first Doujin I read which has a plot in it^^
Good done, and I like your drawing style, looks nearly like the Kishimoto style, vry good. I look forward to see the next chapters. Especially the part why he says "un" after every sentence^^
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Yeah, I've grown tired of all of the romance/hentai doujinshi. 
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I really like your action shots, you did a good job with them! I think you did great on the one with Deidara leaping away.
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Thanks! I did like Deidara's pose, but Hidoi's pose looks too awkward.
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holy cow! loving it so far!! can't wait for da nxt page
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Really? I thought that Hidoi's pose look a bit awkward.
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Everyone looks awkward when you are fighting!
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Unless the artist is good and the fighters are skilled. Then it looks awesome.
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It's always awkward. Ever freeze a frame of a film? People look ridiculous sometimes!
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Ah, don't feel bad about the panel, EVERYTHING that I draw comes out wrong! Dx
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That's awesome!
He's definitely grown. x]
And his hair is getting there!
Haha
Can't wait till the next one!!
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I don't understand but that's just because I'm me. and yes I'm reading the opposite to American's but I just don't see how you get from "we are leaving you!" to people fighting....
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It's a new chapter, and there has been a time jump. Deidara is now 8 and has been training for 3 years as a ninja.
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How the heck am I supposed to figure that out?
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Well, I did say it in my description for this page and for the previous two, but I can go back and edit it so it's less confusing.
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Yes, but if this was printed and bound in a book and sold on the streets, how would people know this stuff?
(in other words, I have never read any of the descriptions for your OIAI stuff, because I thought it was supposed to be self explanatory, like you oculd print it out and make a book and read it without need to read anything else to understand it)
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Of course, I would need to explain more then, because I write the doujinshi assuming the reader has read Naruto (sorry Gibby 
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Oh....
Why don't you draw out some of the scenes in the Bible? Maybe then I'd understand some of it....
Or maybe some Catch 22? I'd love to see Yossarian fighting with Orr! And Clevinger! And maybe you could have Major Major Major Major fighting with the Chaplain!
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Hmm, a doujinshi based on the Bible. . . that's an interesting idea.
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Yeah, you could totally have fun with it too! Like....I don't know, but watching Jacob fight with that angel, that'd be awesome!
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If I were to do it, it won't be until after the Deidara doujinshi is finished.
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Excellent work!
I didn't notice anything wrong until you mentioned that line problem in the 5th scene.
GO DEIDARA!!!!!!!!!!!!
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