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Kawa-V In reply to TheTubich [2019-03-02 10:48:12 +0000 UTC]

Thanks

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TheTubich In reply to Kawa-V [2019-03-02 10:56:58 +0000 UTC]

Welcome

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Kawa-V In reply to Snowdog-zic [2019-03-02 10:48:06 +0000 UTC]

Thanks

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Snowdog-zic In reply to Kawa-V [2019-03-02 14:21:38 +0000 UTC]

Your welcome

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Kawa-V In reply to FarFront [2019-03-02 10:47:56 +0000 UTC]

The main streets are safe, but the secondary roads... It is better not to go alone.

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Kawa-V In reply to goatink [2019-03-02 10:45:38 +0000 UTC]

Gracias, voy a justificarme un poco. Éste capítulo es la presentación del héroe, el clásico "personaje fuerte salva a personaje débil"... es un tópico, pero es efectivo. 

Un par de ejemplos: En Berserk, Gatsu salva a Puck de unos matones en una taberna que abusaban del pequeño hada; y en Goblin Slayer, el protagonista salva a la Sacerdotisa mientras los goblins masacran a su grupo.

En ambos casos, el lector sabe que el protagonista va a aparecer y va salvar la situación. Porque es un cliché, es lo típico.

En mi caso... no quería que el lector se quedara con esa simple sensación, no quería que pensara "va, ahora aparece el héroe y la salva, fin". Debía hacer algo más, así que he hecho que el lector quiera que aparezca el héroe y salve la situación.

Esa es la diferencia, no es lo mismo que el lector sepa lo que va a pasar, a que quiera que pase.

No sé si me he explicado :/

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goatink In reply to Kawa-V [2019-03-02 14:08:45 +0000 UTC]

Muy buena explicacion, y has logrado muy bien lo que querias, esa sensacion era exacto lo que queria, esperaba con ansias que ya llegara Kazan a salvar el dia, se nota que tienes mucha experiencia escribiendo historias, no solo por usar muy bien el topico de damicela en apuro, pero tambien de entender el por que e tan efectivo.

Muy buen trabajo y espero con ansias nuevos capitulos

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Kawa-V In reply to Evodolka [2019-03-02 10:57:37 +0000 UTC]

Thanks, I'll justify myself a little. This chapter is the presentation of the hero, the classic "strong character saves a weak character"... it is a topic, but it is effective.

For example: In Berserk, Gatsu saves Puck from some guys in a tavern who abused the little fairy; and in Goblin Slayer, the main character saves the Priestess while the goblins massacre their group.

In both cases, the reader knows that the protagonist will appear and save the situation. Because it's a cliché, it's typical.

In my case... I did not want the reader to stay with that simple feeling, I did not want him to think "ok, now the hero appears and saves her, end". I had to do something more, so I've made the reader want the hero to appear and save the situation.

That is the difference, it is not the same as the reader knows what is going to happen, to want it to happen.

I do not know if I explained myself :/

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Evodolka In reply to Kawa-V [2019-03-02 12:05:37 +0000 UTC]

your welcome
oh without a doubt it's effective, some of my favorite scenes in stories are when things get dark, it is both shocking and some times shows just how much i care about the characters, and it also shows how some of the world is, not everyone is a good guy and some people are just awful people
this i like, seems realistic

yeah exactly, it is a fun and dramatic way to introduce badasses and it's satisfying to see the assholes behind the beating get their shit kicked in

cliche yes, but that's the thing with cliches they are popular for a reason, it just works
think there are some cases were the hero shows up too late or only at the aftermath, not sure where though but i feel like that has to have happened at least once in a story

and you did that to great effect, well done
always good to add your own take on scenarios like that, it makes things interesting and a tad unique

you explained it perfectly

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