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Published: 2006-02-13 11:11:52 +0000 UTC; Views: 1743; Favourites: 45; Downloads: 287
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Description L’éclair Comme Souvenir
oilgraph with text on canvas
16x20

Je l'ai abandonnée à Montmarte
Diseuses de bonne-aventure et la Vierge au mur
"Deux enfants pour vous" disait la Dame
"sur une période de quatre ans"
déposant une pierre dans ma main comme protection
même si je n'avais rien demandé

Oppressé par les fantômes des jours non écrits
J'ai marché pour me défaire de ces choses entrevues

Des enfants sans noms
d'une femme qui refuse son existence
Le ciel s'effondre en larmes
sur les Champs Élisées

Dans mon sac, un petit appareil photo d'amateur

Elle porte le nom d'un amie décédée
qui est venue a moi comme un cadeau dans le désert

Je n'avais pas réalisé jusqu'à maintenant
que demain
deux ans jour pour jour
serait l'anniversaire de son passage

En traversant la Passerelle Solferino
un éclair a déchiré les cieux
et sur la Place de la Concorde
s'est ajouté un second petit éclair
comme souvenir

et pour instant
le jour était rempli d'anges..."

French translation by =jmonzani
Thank you, Jean!

Original text

I left her in Montmarte
Fortune tellers and mother Mary on the walls
'Two children for you' the Madame said
’in four years time’
and pressed a stone into my hand for protection
though none of it I asked for

Burdened with ghosts of unwritten days
I walked to dispossess myself of things half seen

children without names
from a woman who refuses to exist
and the sky crumbled to weeping
over the Champs Elysee

From my bag a tiny amateur camera...

It bore the name of a dead friend
that came to me as a gift in the desert

I didn't realize till then
but tomorrow
two years to the day
would mark the anniversary

So as I crossed the Passerelle Solferino
and the lightning tore the clouds
over the Place de la Concorde
to it was added a tiny little flash
for remembering

and for a moment
the day was filled with angels...
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Comments: 11

pillibebekk [2007-04-12 15:48:04 +0000 UTC]

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myriam [2006-02-14 10:30:43 +0000 UTC]

i really love the image and the poem, but am slightly distracted by the second referrence to a parision place (Place de la Concorde). i think this piece could have done without the name-dropping geography tour. But I don't mean to be harsh with this, it's just an observation, and I like the whole package very much indeed.

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kevissimo In reply to myriam [2006-02-17 09:31:29 +0000 UTC]

Thank you....and point taken. I actually wrote it down so as to remember it. I'm terrible with names...but mainly when I was writing I found no other way than to name the place....but I can see your point.

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myriam In reply to kevissimo [2006-02-17 09:41:21 +0000 UTC]

i should have also mentioned that i compared this poem to others that you have written and i KNOW you can write better than this! (that was meant as a compliment).

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cleo-boo [2006-02-14 09:11:18 +0000 UTC]

Oppressé par les fantômes des jours non écrits
J'ai marché pour me défaire de ces choses entrevues



Its beautiful and meaningful

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DougBaltz [2006-02-13 20:16:59 +0000 UTC]

Very nicely done!

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NeverEndingNightmare [2006-02-13 17:07:26 +0000 UTC]

aww... such a beautiful poem with such a beautiful painting... it is a wonderful piece ^.^

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jsmonzani [2006-02-13 14:41:45 +0000 UTC]

I really like this piece, my friend

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cogwurx [2006-02-13 14:34:10 +0000 UTC]

I love it. I like the sense that it's an old photo with a lot of memories to it.

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NEOkeitaro [2006-02-13 12:11:29 +0000 UTC]

awesome ! maybe too small

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artistm0nk [2006-02-13 11:54:31 +0000 UTC]

Oh how lovely! The narrative is beautiful and it goes well with the dark feel of the image. Great work!

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