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Nee (c) =NeKoChAnK
Katrina (c) =NeKoChAnK
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Please Respect my gallery
if you don't like it ... don't look at!
Constructive critics are welcome
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hey!! ya volviste! XD yupi, llegue tarde despues de que lei tu correo, tu amiga ya habia borrado evidencia
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O_O jajajja no mija, creo te ekivocaste de persona lol no soy DK, soy Tabe-chan xD
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Normalmente no critico el arte de las personas a quienes considero amigos, pero creo que este dibujo merece algo de atención.
Primero que todo, me encanta la atención que le pusiste a los detalles – la lluvia quedó tremenda, y el paisaje se ve bien (hace su trabajo sin distraer de la situación). La espuma que pusiste en la sombrilla y en Nee le dan a la lluvia un toque realístico (los rastros de agua en la sombrilla también ayudan), y los brillos en la piel y ropa de Nee hacen que se vea mojada de verdad.
Ahora, sí veo unos cuantos problemas en el dibujo: Primero, en el brazo derecho de Nee, la sección desde el hombro hasta el codo es demasiado pequeño. Al ver la pose, puedo entender lo que tratabas de hacer, pero desde esta perspectiva no se ve natural. Una sugerencia para arreglarlo sería subir la posición del hombro y del seno derecho, pero también se vería bien si bajas la posición del codo y del brazo y la mano izquierda (aunque no daría el mismo efecto). Otro problema viene de la pose en general: No se si se nota tanto, pero la pose de Nee no se ve tan balanceada (se ve como si se fuera a caer en cualquier momento hacia su derecha). Una forma de arreglarlo sería moviendo la cadera a su derecha un poco – daría el mismo efecto, pero a la misma vez le da más balance a la pose.
Todo lo demás se ve excelente. De verdad me enamoré de los colores (ojalay yo pudiese colorear tan realísticamente), y la situación como tal no es algo que ves tan frecuentemente en los dibujos de ahora. Hasta ahora es mi dibujo favorito de los tuyos. e.deviantart.com/emoticons/s/s… " width="15" height="15" alt="
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I love how you've made this one so lifelike. You can see the blush on teir faces, the curves on their bodies, the the water all over the one on the left and the soaked clothes.
I love how you gave the one with the umbrella that look as if she was saying "What the heck are you doing?" The irony that the one warmly dressed gets to stay under the unbrella, as if she knew this would happen to the other girl but didnt care. The splashing affects of the rain look so realistic, your art continues to amaze me.
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This is very lovely and cute and I really love the coloring style you used on this piece. Honestly, this is actually one of my favorite pieces from you.
Now for the critique.
The lines (lineart) of Kat(girl on the left) seem to stand out more then Nee's. While Nee's lines don't seem to show as much, which gives her a more of a 3D and realistic look. The thing I would do is try to make Kat's lines a little blurred out so she'll look a little more realistic as Nee.:]
Now also, Nee's hand that's going down to her hip seems a little smaller then the hand gripping to her arm. I know how hard it is to make hands the same size. Or hell, I have a personal problem with hands too. xDx But yes, all I have to advise is try to work on your hands a little bit. Hell if you want help, I'm more then happy too. :3
All in all, I love this and you should make more pieces like this.
This is honestly my first critique I've ever given so I hope this was helpful!e.deviantart.com/emoticons/h/h… " width="15" height="13" alt="
Ringy
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Well, I can see here something different from whay I'm used to see from you, which it's really great, I like the overall feeling in this piece, both of her expressions are great,and the atmosphere helps to put more attention on those expressions, as well as focus on the two girls, I like that e.deviantart.com/emoticons/s/s… " width="15" height="15" alt="
But now let's move into the real crits, since you know I'm not the kind of person who likes just to say "zomg I love it +fav" (thou I actually think that about this one xDU...)... but yeah...
first of all, I've seen some problems in your drawings since a while ago... but I been kinda dead at dA.. and I'm gonna fix it xD (already done I guess o,o)
You need to take care about the anatomy, and also the textures, not overuse the textures at photoshop, but make them yourself with brushstrokes, I've seen you've done that in the past, so I know you can e.deviantart.com/emoticons/s/s… " width="15" height="15" alt="
The main troubles I see here, are the shape of the face, the hands, and the legs, I dunno what happen, but you started distorting the way you draw the body, I remember your works from a couple of years ago, and you didn't had that trouble before, so I really recomend you to take a look at that o,o (lol no se como decir esto en ingles xd.. en la cara, se me hace que las haces algo chuecas, y necesitas corregir eso, porque se ven muy inclinadas D=.. luego que te vea en el msn te digo bien eso xD.. .volvamos al ingles u.u)
The wet look in nee shirt, isn't working well, cuz it looks more like latex than a wet shirt (dunno if that was your intent), i needs to look more like actual fabric, that will look even better, and sexier (not that latex isn't.. but oh well xD)
Also.. the hands D=!... you need to work them better, they are a great expressive part of the body e.deviantart.com/emoticons/s/s… " width="15" height="15" alt="
Well, I hope the crit helps, you know I tell you this with all the love of my heart e.deviantart.com/emoticons/h/h… " width="15" height="13" alt="
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Te kero mucho nekooow! luego hablamos en el msn, aemas del kian te haré otra sorpresita, numás tenme paciencia xD... shh u.u.. no te enojes porque te escribi una biblia de 500 palabras ok xD? weno 450 ?) xD.. en fin, nos vemus, y me gusto muuucho este dibujo *-*!
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Ayyy comentale en español!! XD
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no pk los demas no entienden xDU...aunque hay cosas que no se decir en ingles y-y
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jajaja, ps es la critica para la artista, no para los demás criatura XD
En fin, en parte entiendo tu punto
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I've been thinking for a while now that when you shade the abdomens on your characters, the shadows seem too dark, to the point where they seem to be indents into the skin rather than just shadows cast by other body parts. I think you can see this a little right under the white shirt and above the black blouse on Nee.
I'm also not quite sure what expression you were going for on Nee, she seems to be in a very *meh* e.deviantart.com/emoticons/h/h… " width="15" height="15" alt="
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I think nee's face is absolutely flawless in this one. one of my favs for sure
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lol. "do you ever wonder why where here?"
"NO, i don't EVER wonder why were here."
sorry for red vs blue crazyness jut reminded me of it
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....... cool this one I like alot... thats all I can really say at the moment
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LOL... well... you should try and leave the echii side a bit ... awesome job on this one
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Que puedo decir esta muy fregon me encanto!!!!!!!!
tu arte es muy divertido y facinante!!!!!!!
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esta pintado muy bonito pero la anatomia no parece de este mundo :S
lo demas esta muy profesional ya quisiera yo pintar asi de bonito
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aun me falta mucho por aprender
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Hey nice Effects And good line you have done
There are lights on background if i am have seen well =/
And the Shine of their reflex of light But Good works
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aaaaaaaa esta genial !!!!!
esta increible deveras!!!!
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muchisimas gracias!! :3
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wow te salio super lindo me encanta tu arte sigue asi
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hey amiga me puedes hacer un favor?
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depende O_o.. que paso?
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me encanta como tu dibujás y me gustaria que me hicieras un dibujo de hanako por favor >.< siii
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that's so awesome. i love the rain-i fail at doing rain. and i really like their expressions, well, just them in general is really good! 
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hehe thank you so much!
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your very welcome
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Esta lindo, pero personalmente veo desproporcionado algunas partes del cuerpo xD
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aun me falta mucho por aprender
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Pues dele duro mija, usted puede
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This pic is sooo beaiutyful the rain ohhh how I love what you use to make it so nice and her body all wet ya sexxy for me but its way more then that this pic is too good 100 out of 10 ^o^.
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YOUR sooo welcome sweetie!!!^o^
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