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Published: 2017-07-08 06:18:04 +0000 UTC; Views: 279; Favourites: 3; Downloads: 0
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Description This is a creepypasta OC i made. I tried to avoid cliches(excessive blood, insanity) to give my own idea on my character.

Name:Alisa
Alias:Scar, Scab
Height :5'11
Age:19
Relationships: none
Backstory: Alisa grew up with very little friends. This was due to her clumsiness, leading to her many scars and bruises on her body, as well as her nicknames. Because of this, she made up her own imaginary ones. This drove people further away and isolated her more and more with only the friends she created in her head. AS she aged, she developed MPD(Multiple Personality Disorder), now talking for each of the people she made. The other kids around teased  and bullied her for this, sometimes beating her to make the voices stop. She tried to endure it, hiding the scars with long sleeves and pants. She had done fine until one of the bullies caught her outside of school. When he tried to hither, she pushed them into the street, in front of a car. She when through a wave of emotions, each of the voices in her head yelling at once. They told her this was a good thing, that the bully deserved his death. Yet the guilt weighed on her, leading to her cutting herself. The voices told her to get the others, to kill off those who were against her. She listened to the voices, and with every kill, she gave herself another scar. Even her parents, who attempted to send her to a psychiatric ward, had died at her hands, leading to the scar on her eye. She remains in the house alone, only leaving when the voices demand it, and killing those who attempt to stop her.
Weapon: Scar tends to kill with knives, but she also uses hand-made poisons from household supplies.(she only uses these for deaths she wants to keep secret or she doesn't want to do personally)

And THAT's my creepypasta OC. I know its done in MS paint, but i work with what i got. And what i have is a mouse and the program. I accept criticism to help improve this
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Comments: 6

Jameee-Wolfeee [2017-07-10 06:24:46 +0000 UTC]

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Kisamelover12 In reply to Jameee-Wolfeee [2017-07-13 01:33:56 +0000 UTC]

MY anatomy isn't the best. And looks don't define a character's biological gender

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PeanutTheDestroyer1 [2017-07-08 22:02:29 +0000 UTC]

Nice start! Id suggest some anatomy videos, idk what program you use but some are harder then others, I use ibis paintx (kinda complicated but easy once your used to it) its an app for phone, if your on computer sorry im horrible with that ;-;

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Kisamelover12 In reply to PeanutTheDestroyer1 [2017-07-09 00:53:37 +0000 UTC]

Thank you. I find it harder for me to draw with a mouse than an actual pencil. That kinda why I hide the hands in pockets. It's also is hard to good lines in the Paint app on my computer. Any specific areas to focus on? Any critiques on the OC itself?

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PeanutTheDestroyer1 In reply to Kisamelover12 [2017-07-09 01:03:59 +0000 UTC]

Agreed, a mouse is a lot harder then pencil 😂

And your Oc's arms bend in a sorta strange way, theres a guy on youtube called "Xabio arts" who does a lot on anatomy and clothing, hes not boring and has a lotta fun commentary, also its a CP OC right? The story could use some improvements (lotta killer stereotypes) but I did the same sorta thing, the more you write (and read) the better you get (mrcreepypasta on youtube reads stuff for you) besides that it looks like a good start, over time I guarantee working at it will make your character great! (Baptistonfire is not for the the faint of heart but does bring up a lot to avoid)
Besides that the only other thing is it's hard to tell shes a her, just more anatomy lessons and it'll be fine ^-^

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Kisamelover12 In reply to PeanutTheDestroyer1 [2017-07-09 01:20:43 +0000 UTC]

Thank you

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PeanutTheDestroyer1 In reply to Kisamelover12 [2017-07-09 01:24:43 +0000 UTC]

No problem ^-^ i love to see people improve

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