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KitraKitty — falling
Published: 2004-02-04 20:55:31 +0000 UTC; Views: 57; Favourites: 0; Downloads: 9
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Description Now back to the girl who had slit her wrists
She looked out the window
She saw the cliff
She ran down the stairs
But she slipped
She landed on her back
She was left in pain
But that was her bliss
She slowly got up
Walked out the door
She ran bare foot
Across the land
Till she hit the end
She looked down
She saw the ocean below
She took a deep breath in
Got on her toes
Than she let go
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Comments: 4

AcidTearsx666 [2004-02-05 01:03:34 +0000 UTC]

I told you before i really like this one you use great imagery

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airmega23 [2004-02-04 21:03:40 +0000 UTC]

Intresting poem! You used some good imagery her to move your story along.
The diction was okay, as was the flow. However i did expect some more figuritve language, and more complex ideas from you. However you did suceed in what you tried to accomplish on this piece.

Keep it up

Greg

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KitraKitty In reply to airmega23 [2004-02-04 21:10:26 +0000 UTC]

thank you greg :-D i read some of your stuff and it was great

~Kat~
to much love to little of people to recieve

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airmega23 In reply to KitraKitty [2004-02-04 22:14:07 +0000 UTC]

Thanks! Im glad you liked it!

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