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Published: 2014-04-07 23:13:03 +0000 UTC; Views: 2842; Favourites: 149; Downloads: 0
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There's a party in my headAs I close my eyes to sleep.
Little creatures and monsters,
Oh, back and forth they creep.
On silent tip-toes they walk,
Playing melodies in my mind.
Finding caverns I have closed,
Putting my life on rewind.
My mind is somewhere else,
But in vain I toss and turn.
Little goblins man the lights,
And the ghosts try to learn.
It's all a big, loud, unruly mess,
This untamed party in my head.
I try and shut them down,
But back and forth they tread.
I'm never going to get any sleep
As long as they're awake.
They take my tired thoughts
Down every path they can take.
Oh, what would I give to have
One silent and sleep-filled night.
But that will never happen,
Although I wish with all my might.
There's a party in my head
As I close my eyes to sleep.
Only when the sun comes up
Do they never make a peep.
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Insomnia's really screwing me over this week. I'm glad i stumbled upon this ^^ Relates pretty well
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That is BEAUTIFUL!!!!!!!!! Would you mind if I were to use it in a presentation for school?
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Wow it really describes it well... Do you still suffer from it ? I have for 5 months now and I'm desperate Β
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I do still suffer from it off and on. I've had it for years now. Some ways I deal with it are: cleaning my room or whatever else there is to clean, drinking warm milk, eating plain honey because it actually makes your body slow down, drinking tea meant to help you sleep, or just taking sleeping pills. Different things work for different people and sometimes nothing helps at all, but I hope one of those helps you a bit. I'm sorry you suffer from it tooΒ
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Thanks for the advice ! Sport has helped me a lot, and yeah milk and honey work sometimes. About the sleeping pills, well, I took them for a while but it didn't help me a lot and now my tolerance to them is too high for them to be effective^^'Β I hope we'll both get rid of it Β
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Holy crap this is amazing. Also, I think I have insomnia now that I know what it is, and man does it suck.
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Thank you! And it really does. I've been getting better since I wrote this but insomnia is still there.
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Welcome! And I'm glad to here you're getting better!
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Thank you! Gotta love not being able to sleep at night...
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Yeah. Gives me more time to write.
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Wow. Just wow. You described insomnia perfectly.
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Awesome work. Captured and rhymed it very well.
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You've perfectly captured what it is.
And it's dark, and fun, and weird and rhymes.
Wow.
How'd you manage to write it down? (n.n)
Lovely work.
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I'm not sure how I managed to write it down, actually. It just kinda... came out. And thank you!
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Well you did a perfect job at it,
and no problem dear <3
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Wow this poem is amazing it perfectly describes what goes on in my head because I have insomnia. I love it! Keep it up! 
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Exactly, try to sleep alllll night, then finally when youre about to, the suns already coming up .-. Β Β
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Yepp, and everybody's yelling at you to get out of bed.
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I have it not fun for me
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I like this :3 I'm a fan of couplets like those.
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My favorite line is: "My mind is somewhere else,
But in vain I toss and turn." Great job! Keep the creativity going!
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Thank you, I'll try to!
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Your welcome
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I have slight insomnia, I can sleep at night, but never until little past midnight.
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For me, it always depends. I'll go for one or two weeks without sleeping at all, then I'll be able to sleep until it happens again.
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Great work, love the continued metaphor all the way through.
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It does kinda make me feel like a vampire. It's like, if I'm not gonna be able to sleep at night, at least make me look hot or be able to do something cool.
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Right there with you on this one. insomnia sucks. this poem, not so much (actually this poem is fantastic, just thought you should know
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