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Jeff the KillerRed
This is what I see through eyes I canβt shut
And this very colour flows through each vein
Everyone looks the same inside, but
In their souls they are like me, we all cause pain
Black
This is the natural state of the world
I hate the weak and prey on the strong
Every great plan fails before it is unfurled
I will see this through, I will kill every wrong
White
This is how things will be when Iβm done
With no one left there will be no death
I only scare them because I've already won
My blade has a hypocrite as its sheathe
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Not bad! It has a very fast rhythm to it and it keeps you going. Hell someone could sing this! It's not bad and I understand what the point of it is. I'm just wondering about this line
"Every great plan fails before it is unfurled"
Huh? Can you explain what you meant by this line? And why does it sound like Jeff's a genius ass poetic master? lol it's just funny. Please explain the meaning behind that line. Thanks!
-Arthur55623
P.S. This part is to meet to 100 word minimum so do not mind the random sentence here okay? thanks!
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That line refers to how in Jeff's mind every idea or plan a person can have will only result in pain in the end, either for that person or someone they love.
As for why Jeff sounds like a thespian, serial killers statistically have very high IQ's so I wouldn't rule out that he might actually be surprisingly intelligent. XD
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Okay, THANKS FOR EXPLAINING!
Most people I know would try to dodge the meaning and it gets SO ANNOYING! and I understand the High IQ's thing but really!
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I really like this. First, kudos for actually putting rhyme and verse into your poem!
Second, I like your interpretation of Jeff here - a nihilist who almost sees himself as a hero. That actually makes him scarier, and better yet, really fleshes him out as a character. But I mean, this is coming from someone who doesn't know too much about Jeff other than him being an undead creepypasta who kills people.
Third, way to go with using his color scheme. I'm a symbolism freak, and I love how you went and took his colors and gave them deeper meaning. I'm always going to think about that every time I see "GO TO SLEEP". e.deviantart.net/emoticons/b/b⦠" width="15" height="15" alt="
Overall, this is awesome.
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Thanks for your feedback, I found it very constructive. ^^ And props for noticing the nihilist theme, I view Jeff as the living incarnation of that philosophy.
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I love this and did anyone notice these colors are on the RWBY song "Red Like Roses?" No. Just me? OK, then.
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Thanks! It's just a coincidence, though. XDDD
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Don't worry, it's a valid question. I've just never been a RWBY watcher, personally.
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I think you'd like it.
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Thanks! I might check it out later.
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It's awesome! The first episode is really funny, too. But I won't spoil anything! My favorite characters are Ruby, Yang, and Qrow. They're all pretty badass, but Qrow is alcoholic and the hottest character in my opinion!!! NO MORE SPOILERS MIND!!! Heh, sorry. Had to yell at myself.
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this is a beautiful poem.. thanks so much for writing this <3 it's a wonderful thought you've put into words.
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Thank you! I'm trying to think of possible candidates for other poems.
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Anytime for you wonderful work.Β Β
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This is really good! About one of my favorite creepy pastas
It's quite accurate, but the last line is a big hard to understand for me xP
Great work
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Sorry if the last line was confusing. Since a sheathe is what you normally store a blade inside, I tried to imply that Jeff views his blade as naturally belonging inside another person. Literally.
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Ohhh now I get it xD wow that's DARK 
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Thanks, I plan on making more pasta-poems in the future too.
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You're welcome, please do
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wow. this is amazing. its so deep. i love it!
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Thank you! And of course I'm deep, I'm a totally fancy artist person. Β
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awsome!
you have got to make more jtk stuff!
(i really love him!!! Β )
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I did write that pasta where he played a big part:shacklesoul.deviantart.com/art⦠. And I do plan on using him more, he's such a bad boy. XD
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this is good!Β I love how you use the colors to explain his intent and view on the world!
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Thank you! I view red, black, and white as the primary colours of horror illustrations. That's why I used only them in making my avatar, for instance.
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there also the same colors as Jeff is
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Yeah, I mentioned that in the description. XD I don't blame you for not reading it or anything, it seems most people don't read descriptions.
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I did read the describtion and I saw that 
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Oh, sorry about that! XD My reading comprehension sucks. And you're right, that's what I love about Jeff's character concept the most.
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Aw, that's nice of you.
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IS RLY SO AMAZE. God I wish I were as good as you. My poems don't even make a clear statement.
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It may sound clichΓ©, but practice helps. A lot. And any poem is good in my book as long as it comes across as heartfelt.
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I'm gonna try and make my poems better!
You are an AMAZING person. You give people tips, speak your mind about things, you're just awesome.
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