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Published: 2010-09-03 21:47:53 +0000 UTC; Views: 566; Favourites: 6; Downloads: 0
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Description A Rather Disappointing Misunderstanding
Pairing - Derek x Victor
Author – Akari Tokita [formerly UndineAlice]
A/N – My first DxV written for ChibiEdo. Ummm, hopefully it doesn't seriously suck; it's my first spur of the moment lemon. Please don't shoot me if it doesn't meet your expectations Chibi, I tried! ; w; Okay, you probably will shoot me anyways…..
Rating – M for Mansex……and misunderstandings. HUGE misunderstandings. Some oocness, yaoi (guyxguy don't like, don't read; it's simple) and Tyler and Leslie being, well, Tyler and Leslie. You know how they are.

When Dr. Tyler Chase and nurse Leslie Sears passed by the testing lab that Victor Niguel was usually locked up in, they weren't expecting to hear anything. They never did. Why? Because Victor Niguel was a genius workaholic that didn't get enough sleep. And who really didn't get out much. Both Tyler and Leslie agreed that he seriously needed some sun. Oh, and that he had the most evident crush on the new surgeon at Caduceus USA, Derek Stiles. But Derek was too much a blockhead to notice.
"Honestly, Derek, just put it in your mouth and suck on it!" a loud, clearly annoyed voice yelled. That was obviously Victor, shouting at Derek who had the nerve to constantly interrupt his "important research", which Tyler suggested was merely an excuse to look at porn when no one was around. After that statement, Tyler hadn't been at work the next week. Everyone knew why.
"B-But what if it tastes weird Victor?" a nervous, much quieter voice countered. That was Derek, no one else had the backbone (or the inability to read the atmosphere) to get too close to Victor. But whenever it came to Derek, the violet-haired man would roll his eyes and allow the brunette to disrupt his research. The bespectacled surgeon always wondered why Victor was only nice to him, though when he would talk to Angie about it, she would ignore the question and merely point out that "nice" was such a vague term and was a poor way to describe said man. Angie was also absent from work the following week and Derek was wondering what he was missing out on. Nobody besides him dared to question it.
"That's the least of my worries right now!" Victor growled. "Do you want me to make you get down on your hands and knees and have me shove it in your mouth?!"
A faint whimper could be heard from Derek as he murmured, almost inaudible for the two eavesdropping doctors to hear, "But Victor, I-it's so big…."
At that, Tyler nearly burst out laughing and Leslie had a rather large nosebleed at the mental image of what was going on in the lab.
Victor's large hands had tangled themselves in the other's short brown hair, miserably trying to suppress moans of pleasure that could escape his mouth. Derek was lightly gripping Victor's hips to keep him from bucking further into his mouth as his tongue ran along the underside of Victor's large erection. His soft lips pressed a kiss teasingly to the head of Victor's length, causing said man to throw his head back, unable to suppress a groan. The brunette had taken Victor into his mouth and was now swiftly bobbing his head up and down, tongue trailing over every inch. Victor felt the familiar warmth in his lower stomach as he screwed his eyes shut. Before he could manage any words, Victor's vision was filled with white and he cried out a little more loudly then he wanted to.
A strange, loud squeak had escaped from Leslie's mouth and she immediately flung her hands over her mouth. But it was too late, for Victor had picked up on the noise and stormed over to the door, throwing it open. When he saw a red-faced Tyler clutching his sides and a flustered Leslie with a bleeding nose quickly running down the hallway, his perceptive brain made a realization and he stormed after the two, his cheeks a bright crimson red.
"Y-You sick perverts!! Get back here right now and get what you deserve!"
When Derek heard the commotion, he got up from his chair and walked to the door, catching a glimpse of Tyler and Leslie rounding the corner, Victor hot on their heels. His eyebrows were furrowed in confusion and he tilted his head to the side asking no one in particular, "Why is Victor chasing Dr. Chase and Dr. Sears? I thought he was going to make me the guinea pig for that new pill he developed…."

The End

A/N – OMG that was SUCH a fail!! –crycry- I hope you like it Chibi, this is an apology for not even starting your chaptered fic yet. -shot-
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Comments: 7

PhoenyxStiles [2016-10-08 17:20:07 +0000 UTC]

I had a rather large nosebleed reading this 😂

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MattsyKun [2010-09-04 15:40:26 +0000 UTC]

PFFFFFFFFFFFFT.

WIN.

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KonariWilliams In reply to MattsyKun [2010-09-05 19:12:23 +0000 UTC]

FFFFFUUUUUU----

FAIL.

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ChibiEdo [2010-09-04 08:46:13 +0000 UTC]

awwwwwwwwwwww thank you!!! It took me a while to get it (at least I THINK I got it now.. and if it IS as I understand it now I love it.xD .
you are really good at writing mature content stuff*_* I can't wait for your chaptered fic now.. *dies out of impatience*
I can totally imagine tyler and leslie evesdropping.. (I can actually also imagine tyler recording everything on cam in case something would have happened..XD I can also imagine leslie having mental images XDDDDDDDD

I am still a bit sad that they didn't really do it but the mental image totally makes up for it.. oh and on the other hand I'm actually glad that you didn't make them do it in the lab. Concerning my victor the lab is totally off limits for stuff like that.. kissing is ok but nothing more than that. I have the impression though that for your victor that wouldn't be the case.. mainly cause of the part with the porn you put in here xDD My victor isn't really interested in porn because he has no time for useless stuff like that.. he might do a handjob to himself though (thinking of derek that is.. before he fell in love with him he just didn't do anything.. only a few times when he was a teenager to see what it was like, liked the feeling but didn't really need it). but never at work. Actually Derek would be more likely to look at porn than victor..XD

On formatting text:
Generally put in an additional linebreak after a 'part' (don't know real english word, hope you get what I mean^_^; ). Makes it easier to read.
It would be good if leslie's mental image would be in italic. italic is like this without spaces : < i >italic text < /i > Example: italic text
I didn't get at first that it was only a mental image and not real .. so I was really confusedXD I didn't connect the leslie's mental image line to the rest of the text so I thought it was real.. and was really confused why Victor would be so mean to derek concerning that.<< especially because I had thought right at the beginning that it's not what it seems like they are talking about.

< b >bold text< /b > bold text

[link] <--more info here

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KonariWilliams In reply to ChibiEdo [2010-09-04 14:07:59 +0000 UTC]

I don't even think I really get it! XD (Think of a pale pink oval about the size of your thumb or something.....that's what I was thinking of....> .> ) Them eavesdropping is so in character for them, it's not even funny! They're just so silly sometimes. As long as it was believable. (which it probably wasn't)

I'm so sorry about that ; w; But there will be lotsa action in the chaptered fic. Maybe some spin the bottle or seven minutes in heaven. Yeah, my Victor was pretty OOC with the looking up el porno crap! XD I had to write something though. And yeah, my Victor is just.....yeahhefails.... Oh, for your fic, I was gonna make Angie sorta like Derek's ex who doesn't like Victor, maybe toss in some drama and a dash of DerekxTyler or VictorxTyler, depends on my mood when I start writing.......but there will be some friendship fluff between Victor and Tyler in the very beginning. . A.

.....Sorry, it wa confusing, it feels so freakin' rushed and crap like. I wrote it in like five minutes and my humor fails! DX Yeah, they were so OOC it wasn't laughable. I'm almost determined to take down this fail fic......TT 3TT

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ChibiEdo In reply to KonariWilliams [2010-09-04 17:53:50 +0000 UTC]

aw don't take it down.. I don't think they were really OOC O.o what makes you think that..? (besides the victor looking at porn stuff which might or might not be OOC.. ). I can't find any other examples.XD

what is seven minutes in heaven..?
and well it's your fic so you can write whatever you like, but I'll just tell you already that I won't like any kind of derekxangie (especially not as the mean ex.. because I love angie.. and I love derek-angie friendship (my derek and angie are really good friends by the way)) and I absolutely dislike love triangles.. sorry ^_^; friendship stuff is always great though~~ so victor, tyler, derek friendship stuff is loved~

I hope I didn't hurt your feelings or something ;_; sorry ;_; but like I said it's just my opinion, you should write whatever you feel like! the most important thing is that you love your story~

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KonariWilliams In reply to ChibiEdo [2010-09-04 21:20:55 +0000 UTC]

Okies, I won't take it down....but I still hate it and it just feels so....FUUUUUU---D:

Seven Miuntes in Heaven is where you but all the guys names in a hat and all the girls names in another hat then you pull one slip of paper from each hat and the two people whose names were drawn have to go in a closet for seven miuntes and kiss.....
Okies, so no DerekxAngie, I don't really like the pairing. Okay, i'll have some childhood friendship thing between those two. Love triangles are....complex, too annoying to write for me. Yeyz for friendship!!!

No not at all. I take it as....constructive critiscism, which I really need! XD Your opinion matters, it motivates me to write more fail smut fics! Oh yus!

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