Comments: 5
TheWorldIllustrated [2016-11-05 17:44:51 +0000 UTC]
Really good! I understand English may not be your first language, so here's some minor text changes which should help the English speaker follow your story more easily.
For centuries,
You humans searched
throughout the universe
for another intelligent species.
You wanted to make the first contact...
And you did!
But you didn't find this species in the stars,
...
No.
You found us in
the jungles, the wilds,
and in your...
zoos!
All you ever knew of was
our animal instincts,
our teeth and fangs...
Never our minds.
We are apes,
as you once were,
ages ago.
'The name's
Orion.
I grew up
in the old
observatory.
I'm
searching
for another
intelligent
species...
And humans are not it!'
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TheWorldIllustrated In reply to krukof2 [2016-11-19 03:39:59 +0000 UTC]
No worries, sir. I got your point, but the ape-ish language was almost so much that it was difficult to follow. That's all.
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