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KunoichiSakuraHaruno — Me - Vocaloid
Published: 2009-04-27 03:56:25 +0000 UTC; Views: 2170; Favourites: 35; Downloads: 31
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Well...this was fun.Anyways, I love the way this turned out! *o*
This was drawn/inspired when I was watching a Len AMV.
- gets shot -Well, hope you guys like it.
Art © Me
Len & Vocaloid © Yamaha Corporation
Me © My mom
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Thank you very much.
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Hey there, I'm from *CritiqueWeek . You requested for critique, so here you go. I also redlined your drawing, which will hopefully be of use to you: [link]
The first thing I noticed was how your figure looks stiff and uncomfortable. I am fairly sure this wasn't your intention; this is a common mistake I've seen a lot of artists make, but fortunately it's not a difficult issue to solve either.
I can see that, while you have a goal in mind ("vocaloid girl portrait"), the rhythm of your figure is 'broken'. There is no clear indication of what her body language is supposed to convey: is she dancing? Standing still? Swaying to the beat of music? Should she exhibit a more cheerful disposition? She also appears expressionless, which dampens this sense of rhythm further. Be clear-cut about what you want to express, don't settle for an in-between, vague solution. It's important to know that even a figure in a static pose has its own rhythm. Once you study and understand this, you will find that it will make your figures more lively.
Some guides to get you started: [link] [link] [link]
Anatomy-wise, Her skull appears to be flat on the top, as the shape seems to suggest. Be aware that skulls are rounded, hard objects and that the hair should follow that shape. Her left eye - the one to your right - is also a little too far away. Nudge it in closer. Ideally, the distance between the eyes should be no more than one eye apart. Her chest cavity is also far too small even for a stylized character. For a young girl, The chest cavity should ideally be roughly 1.5 heads wide.
It would be advisable to sketch out the body itself before adding the clothes. I cannot quite make out much of the volume or mass that is supposed to be under the clothes. Clothes, accessories and the like are built to follow the contours of the body, so the headphones should curve and follow the skull, boots should follow the shape of the legs, and folds on the clothes should do the same and follow bodily contours.
It is a good idea to define areas like joints to avoid any confusion as to where different parts of the body starts and ends.
Guide for clothing folds: [link]
Thank you for submitting your drawing for crit, and I wish you good luck in your future artistic endeavors!
Devious Rating: 3/5
Vision: 3/5
Originality: 2/5
Technique: 2.5/5
Impact: 2.5/5
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Thank you very much, I'll use your notes for my next devitation.
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You're welcome.
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Jazzy, your tablet'ness' is amazing! Everything looks so much clearer.
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Lulz, I wish it was my tablet.
I lost my tablet pen months ago. So none of my devitations are done with a tablet. Only one, which I deleted. But I'll be getting a new one later. 8D
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Whoa. How are you doing these ones then?
Haha... if I was near your area I would go into Best Buy and get you a killer discount on a new tablet pen since I work there.
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Haha, I draw them in pencil. x3
GAHHH, No fair! D: Send me one!
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How do they look so perfect and colorful is you draw them in pencil? Hahaha sorry I don't get it!
I totally should, huh?!
Like this one?
[link]
xD
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Lol, I draw it in pencil, then I out line it in Paint.Net, and color it there.
Oh yes, definetly that one! XDDD
Get the whole thing while your at it! 8D
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I give up ahhaha.
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My link failed. o_O
[link] 
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Oh, okay! I have Paint.Net too! But I can't draw anything with pencil hahaha... every time I try it ends up looking like a little boy drew it.
Haha that thing is like $2,000. This one doesn't seem too bad, mm?
[link]
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Heyya 
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Lol, thank you kindly! >w<
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Haha your welcome
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it looks so kool and it looks really pretty too
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Thank you very much!
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OMG i have a Vocaloid character too!... but it's in my drawing book... LOL.. and i like Len TOO! OMG we have so much in common ...
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Oooh yay! Go vocaloid! Lol. You should upload it!
Len's amazing! 
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Well.. it's more like that but short hair and kinda like red hair ^^... and HECK YEA Len is so amazing >w
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Ah, I see I see. owo
Lol, don't forget beautiful! 8D
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Oh yea! Beautiful
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Lmao, yeah.
I'm obsessed..I need help. D:
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Yeah, you do
Lol XDDDD
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Oh shut up. XD
And why aren't you in school?
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I had a few minutes cuz' I had to get sum mouth surgery
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With my Len obsession. XD
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Haha you're copyrighted by your mom...you weirdo! lol
Love the drawing btw
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Lol, oh yes. >:3
Haha, and thankies.
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-person that shot you- LOL jk!
You look almost as pretty as Keiichi! -shot this time-
Oh mah goodinessss, Jazzy! I was like, thats a cute base, but you drew that! Your art..Its also almost as beautifull as Keiichi. Haha, naw, its amazing.
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