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Reifgrimm [2021-10-10 06:01:29 +0000 UTC]
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0formant0 [2020-04-28 15:19:26 +0000 UTC]
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institute5 [2019-04-21 17:31:39 +0000 UTC]
i can see a lot of thought goes into your works
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lakritz69 In reply to institute5 [2019-04-23 12:16:49 +0000 UTC]
Thank you. I appreciate the compliment.
On the downside: I overthink stuff and then become really slow with my writing and can never finish anything...
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institute5 In reply to lakritz69 [2019-04-23 12:26:51 +0000 UTC]
I have a similar problem. Ideas the pop out strong get
half finished and then often sit idle indefinitely.
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lakritz69 In reply to montycrusto [2017-05-25 13:13:49 +0000 UTC]
Thank you - you are too kind - and thanks to Chain-man yet again. You really caught the spirit I had in mind when writing.
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Toszum [2016-10-02 13:11:32 +0000 UTC]
Nice work. A little gruesome but well written.
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lakritz69 In reply to Toszum [2016-10-02 22:01:23 +0000 UTC]
I take gruesome as a compliment as well. I tried to create a nightmarish atmosphere. Wish I had the strength to continue.
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Toszum In reply to lakritz69 [2016-10-03 04:42:24 +0000 UTC]
I would probably read it. I like crazy ideas.
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a1993 [2016-04-19 08:25:23 +0000 UTC]
Wait what happened to Mary then? Wasn't she originally an earthling? Did they just decide to keep her?
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a1993 [2016-04-19 07:20:29 +0000 UTC]
Uh what happened to Mary then?
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a1993 [2016-04-19 07:05:08 +0000 UTC]
Uh what happened to Mary then?
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mrhungry56 [2013-06-11 13:37:52 +0000 UTC]
Excellent story! The concept was really good (fetish vacation) and the activist doctor shaving her head was very devious! Seeing the doctor sentenced in the end was a real treat. Well done.
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lakritz69 In reply to mrhungry56 [2013-06-11 14:12:12 +0000 UTC]
That is very kind of you, Mr. hungry! I have more in store for her while she errs outside helplessly. I imagine a Torei style Luna park with her as an attraction. It is not going to be funny for her !
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lakritz69 In reply to Rubbella [2012-11-06 08:40:15 +0000 UTC]
Thank you, Rubbella, for your compliment! I appreciate it.
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jaypunk [2012-10-16 15:42:12 +0000 UTC]
Awesome!
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lakritz69 In reply to jaypunk [2012-10-17 05:53:19 +0000 UTC]
thank you! I am flattered
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lakritz69 In reply to uksmile [2012-10-14 21:14:00 +0000 UTC]
Glad you liked it - thank you. Many more stories, but stored in my head until now...
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lakritz69 In reply to SpartzPet [2012-09-02 05:28:21 +0000 UTC]
a sound as if you liked the story...
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SpartzPet In reply to lakritz69 [2012-09-02 14:40:46 +0000 UTC]
Very much so. It blew my mind.
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lakritz69 In reply to BritBastard [2012-08-05 12:27:47 +0000 UTC]
i think an afternoon (plus evening plus night) of being tied and chained to my desk, teased and tortured thoroughly while i write, might sparkle the creative process.
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lakritz69 [2012-08-02 05:34:52 +0000 UTC]
i prefer to be a bad girl and get punished for it. Like in the picture.
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lakritz69 In reply to chain-man [2012-07-31 10:06:37 +0000 UTC]
Boring? Maybe, but not necessary. I have worked on stories "after the slavery", but never finished any. Failed attempts to return to a normal life, still being controlled by the former master, becoming a torturer myself, or maybe an especially cruel dominatrix.
I prefer such endings to those most people in here like ("and then she rested in that terrible, cruel bind for the rest of her life"). I think open ends are nicer because they offer more possibilities.
But everybondy his taste..
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GospodinP In reply to lakritz69 [2012-07-31 10:43:47 +0000 UTC]
Glad to see that you updated this with the new ending! Clearly our little creative process was just the thing!
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lakritz69 In reply to GospodinP [2012-07-31 11:59:07 +0000 UTC]
It surely did! But wait! Is that stupid little smilie of yours lashing out at me?
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GospodinP In reply to lakritz69 [2012-07-31 12:00:50 +0000 UTC]
It's just keeping you in line, pet. Take your licks and be a good girl!
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jarvik2009 [2012-06-26 22:08:47 +0000 UTC]
really liked this story!
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lakritz69 In reply to dublatex [2012-03-20 22:17:15 +0000 UTC]
Well, if I could paint I would definitely give it a try...
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cardimart [2012-03-18 22:27:43 +0000 UTC]
i really liked this story and some of the scenes it set. I'm reading the whole Torei story with interest and hope to contribute. This was helpful; ta!
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GrymtheGray [2012-02-15 05:06:57 +0000 UTC]
Nice ideas in this story and good characterization from the start. Then just as you were getting past the intro you skipped right to the end. I'd like to suggest that you think on your story some more and come back to it later? I think you could flesh it out into a much longer and more involved tale.
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lakritz69 In reply to GrymtheGray [2012-02-15 06:38:18 +0000 UTC]
Of course, you are right. I have tried that many times, and always got stuck in the middle. So at least once, I wanted to finish something. It is really slow to write in a foreign language..
But if somebody would want to help me - elaborate the ideas and the details - that would be more than welcome.
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GrymtheGray In reply to lakritz69 [2012-03-04 20:33:18 +0000 UTC]
lazkritz, how about fleshing out the time the two fellows spend training the heroine. Perhaps things like making her walk down regular passenger corridors naked, maybe bearing a tray of crops and offering them to various passengers for them to crop her? Maybe the fellows make her crawl across a room to pick up the item they are going to use on her, and make her pick from a selection of items?
Then on the planet have her actually test some unusual items, some bizare form of isolation, pleasure machine? Then before her time with the test group is compete, the crazy doctor and her team arrive and 'liberate' the heroine and others before being captured? And due to the interstellar ramifications when the Toreans punish the assault team, they return all off-worlders connected with the raid as a gesture of 'good-will'. The heroine having made a friend in the two fellows on the trip out, maybe they become her 'connection' for Torean bondage gear for her to setup back on Earth?
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lakritz69 In reply to GrymtheGray [2012-03-04 22:07:39 +0000 UTC]
i love your ideas - i am thinking in similar directions. If i only found more willpower to continue my writing - i am so slow. do you want to elaborate some of the stuff you mentioned, and i try to follow up?
Thank you for your interest in my story line!
maria
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