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androo138 [2004-03-22 16:03:07 +0000 UTC]

Awww! the perspective in the last panel! Gawd damn thats good sequential!

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Tundra-Spectre [2004-03-16 17:14:02 +0000 UTC]

I think the first panel is fine, nothing wrong with it, I'm saying this because an inker and/or colourist would touch it up a bit and correct any shadows so it's ok, good job ^^

The second panel is a bit strange because batman looks more like spawn, he's a bit too big as well and his face, just doesn't look like the batman I'm used to, then again everyone has their own interpretation of what something looks like and that looks like your style so that's not really a crit it's a compliment . Maybe making him smaller and putting something that people can instantly say "oh it's batman" like the bat signal in the sky or the batwing, don't, it all depends on what you're trying to achieve. As this is a page and not a splash page then it's ok, in fact if this is a page then you're already establishing the "inciting incident" which is the first thing a comic book writer does, as well as "the hook" and "situation and conflict" and I would say this also qualifies as what they call major visual action, something that they always put somewhere in the first act.

Sorry about the long post, it's probably stuff you already know and wanted to achieve. Keep up the good work.

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igrek [2004-03-16 00:02:42 +0000 UTC]

Good job, as usual!
There are some things though that I've noticed that could be improved: The second guy running from the bank on the pavement is running pretty weird, and he is out of perspective. The car (as other people said) is too small, and you've rushed too much on some of the pedestrians and faces in the background, and the indoor of the bank is out of perspective.
The fat guy doesn't have a shadow, it looks like he's floating in midair. The window above the cash thingie is out of perspective, too. Second frame:

The moneybag seems to be slipping out of the guys hand, it isn't really adapted to the hands grip. The house is looking kind of blocky, especially the windows. The sky could use a little more detail too.Other than that, it's very good, and I hope you'll post more pages of the comic!

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Ephon [2004-03-14 11:35:28 +0000 UTC]

awesome work on the comic page

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Papa-Pills [2004-03-14 05:10:25 +0000 UTC]

Looks cool. I'm diggin' the eyes and the building.

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darkw00ds [2004-03-14 02:41:06 +0000 UTC]

Hey man, have you been using poser?

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Vagabond-Eddy [2004-03-14 02:32:53 +0000 UTC]

awsome man! i love the details and the angle in the last panel.. i also love the old money bags with the dollar sign on it D

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aeontek [2004-03-14 01:58:32 +0000 UTC]

Really cool! It's already got a proffesional feel to it. For a wee crit- I think Batman should be a bit smaller on that building... I mean it looks like its 3 stories high, so Batman shouldn't be that big unless he's got a Hulk-like mass...

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latino-champion [2004-03-13 23:45:49 +0000 UTC]

thanks guys. I see what u mean dualmask but i am always hesitant to lay any figures in the centre because that makes for boring composition thanx for the crits

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Yellowmoon [2004-03-13 20:48:14 +0000 UTC]

holy moly!! one more thing! i hadnt even noticed the batman on the roof!! thats awesome!! i love it! IM favin it jsut cuz u did that..... man thats so cool

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Yellowmoon [2004-03-13 20:46:58 +0000 UTC]

I love your style man, VERY cool, but, what i think about it completly contradicts everything the first dude said..... i LIKE how the first robber is off too the right, and the batmans eyes, they look more angry to me then anything else, and I like that AWESOME job, only one flaw tho... the batman looks almost like a wolf.. try putting in more nose definition. I love the bottom frame.. but the other robbers lblend in too much with the BG! if they stood out just a liiiiitle more, and batmans nose was defined.. this would be perfect, great job so far, i cant wait too see more

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Dualmask [2004-03-13 19:25:06 +0000 UTC]

This is really nicely done...the details and shading are all excellent! I just don't like how you laid out the first panel, the guy in the foreground is way too far to the right, he should be more centered in my opinion, he doesn't look like he's in league with the other bank robber, more like he's trying to get away from him. The view itself is a bit too rigid in that panel, too, although the perspective in the next big shot makes up for it pretty well. The close up of Batman's eyes looks a little unconvincing to me as well, I can't really explain it, it's like he's looking more shocked than angry. Still good stuff and far better detailing than what I'm capable of, congrats on fine work.

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halcyondf [2004-03-13 17:00:24 +0000 UTC]

great pencils!

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knightcomix [2004-03-13 14:57:07 +0000 UTC]

Man this looks great, very good shadow work bro, as well as detail. If your looking to get a comic published you should check out [link] my friends and I are gonna do it. Catch you later .

J.Scott

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gnomen [2004-03-13 14:51:18 +0000 UTC]

really wow ... action delight page 1 im hoping you get to publish a comic book someday cause you have the excellent drawing skills for it... *wanna see batman do some kick-ass* draw page 2 !!!

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tin-can-man [2004-03-13 14:45:19 +0000 UTC]

this is soo cool Latino
I really like it, great work on the pencilling

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