LadyRiverlark [2013-01-01 07:26:03 +0000 UTC]
Finished reading it!
There were parts that got a bit slow, but overall, it felt nicely complete while still leading towards the next episode. I liked the inclusion of the many character threads to strengthen your own story and to help James start changing. He's getting that boost towards making his own decisions (even if he still lacks experience to do it well).
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Leohan In reply to LadyRiverlark [2013-01-01 11:12:32 +0000 UTC]
Thanks! I do try to show that my story has somewhere to go even after each individual entry. I think that it can make it stronger in this kind of format where you can approach the parts as substories of a greater universe/setting.
Giving the judges a sense of suspense also helps I guess. ^^
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