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Aircakes [2018-01-06 00:18:38 +0000 UTC]
How... how would you have gotten out if that didn’t work lol?
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ShadowXLoki [2017-02-19 17:44:37 +0000 UTC]
yay!!!! IM FRIENDS WITH A MURDERER!!!!!!
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Talya-Serket [2016-10-05 14:09:26 +0000 UTC]
Happened?
Nothing, Reader-chan is Sherlock Holmes XD
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HetaliaFanatic1 [2016-04-24 21:28:43 +0000 UTC]
Bad Romance coincidentally came on at the end of the chapter XD
I love et
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zeepaarden [2015-11-07 14:33:24 +0000 UTC]
I have a painting idea of this chapter.. PREPARE
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Lil-Magpie In reply to zeepaarden [2015-11-07 17:05:56 +0000 UTC]
Ooooooo, really?
That's exciting!
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kit123abc [2015-11-02 04:27:36 +0000 UTC]
I am reading this in secret and I have to keep my squeals of excitement in. The reader is exactly like me...it really damn scares me. ~shivers~ ;- ; (LOvO)L
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kit123abc In reply to Lil-Magpie [2016-01-03 21:51:00 +0000 UTC]
~Squeals and hugs~ I have be offline but now im back and IT HAS BLOSSOMED!!!
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kit123abc In reply to Lil-Magpie [2016-01-04 02:57:28 +0000 UTC]
Yay! Keep it up! (reason I was gone was...computer died and it's been going on and off lately...but I'm getting it fixed so i'm on meh phone and dad's old crappy computer!!!! yay.)
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kit123abc In reply to Lil-Magpie [2016-01-09 05:45:44 +0000 UTC]
I dun know, I am probably not smarter then EJ...~sob~ But I shall not give up ~loads warp kitty sparkly pink gun up~ OH and your welcome with...feedback? (I lost my mind but tats ok......I think.)
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innocentbystander97 [2015-10-26 10:38:40 +0000 UTC]
Holy crap that was awesome! You are great at this! Please keep them coming!
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KityKira2501 [2015-10-17 22:28:32 +0000 UTC]
Plz make more, it's amazing how much I got into the 'movie', i literally felt every moment of it.
So plzmakemore, my adrenalin is high when i read this. ( I like it when my heart pounds in my chest, kinda like in the fic, I like the adrenaline rush. ).
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Lil-Magpie In reply to KityKira2501 [2015-10-18 18:22:28 +0000 UTC]
Nice! I'm glad you like it.
More in the making~~
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Nachtnight [2015-10-15 09:50:05 +0000 UTC]
Wow, I'm surprised that you did a researh.
by the way, I have to say that this is one of the best fan fictions I have read. I actually imagined every scene every detail you described in to a movie in my head. (plus soundtrack and sound effect, I'm serious XD) And I guess It's so awesome because you wrote really good that the movie in my head continued to flow flawlessly. Really nice work!
PS. I kinda made up Reader's face...to looksedlike Casey Newton. (From TomorrwLand) Because why not? She is smart and hopeful and never give up in the movie XD and Jack...well he looked real and scary enough in my head. Not just a 2D drawing. All the details you described are there. (Handsome and scary at the Same time, brrr!)
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athiestexcept4fandom [2015-10-11 00:16:46 +0000 UTC]
I am badass! Hells yeah! That was awesome. Please don't let this be the end, I really like this story!
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SaidNobodyEver [2015-10-06 03:40:35 +0000 UTC]
You did a great job with the escape bit. Yay, very funny and creative how you did some first hand experience testing on this chapter! It made it seem more realistic I think.
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ab121500 [2015-10-05 18:18:55 +0000 UTC]
Omg i cant wait for the next chapter!
Ps good for you doing research!
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alixlou [2015-10-05 02:33:00 +0000 UTC]
Great for the research 😉👍.I was so happy when you post it!
It is the first and the most interresting eyeless jack story what I read.😚
Good ending.Ending?
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Asssitant-Scientist [2015-10-02 02:46:17 +0000 UTC]
Yay for coexistence! And sheer luck! And insane (and probably painful) research!
My thoughts are all over the place on this one, so I'll make a list.
1. I see how the rubble played a role in the escape now. It was pretty smart to use it as a way to throw off the pursuer instead of throwing it at the pursuer (which would probably miss).
2. Wow and thank you for doing the research to see if it was plausible. Did I guilt you into that...?
3. The warehouse is smaller than I expected. I actually thought that it was a labyrinth of sorts, but then again, it is supposed to be an old warehouse, p robably with some of the walls knocked down, which would explain the rubble.
4. Will Abbey accidentally find out about this? Or the manager? That would make for an interesting story for the reader to tell them... >: D
5. Love the imagery. Every sentence serves a purpose.
Lastly, sorry that I'm a bit terse, but I am kind of pressed for time at the moment, so I couldn't think up a long, eloquent response. But is this the end? It still says "Next" on the author's note so will there be an epilogue?
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Lil-Magpie In reply to Asssitant-Scientist [2015-10-03 05:34:50 +0000 UTC]
It wasn't painful research, it was kinda fun to try. XD
1. Loved that part.
2. Well, you convinced me that not everyone reads over logic holes. So I decided I'd try to perfect the escape scenes to at LEAST be humanly plausible. So yes, you had influence!
3. Yeah, I imagined one big room (dark area) and the small back office. There were no good warehouses to research nearby... And yes, it is vacant and very old.
4. You'll see!!!
5. Thank you. I'm glad it worked out, I edited it too quickly for my usual standards.
It's all good! I LOVE your comments! You are always helpful and supportive, eloquent or not. XD
And yes... there will be several more chapters~~
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LastoftheWolves [2015-09-29 13:08:25 +0000 UTC]
THIS IS AMAZING!! XD I need more
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Lil-Magpie In reply to LastoftheWolves [2015-10-01 02:33:57 +0000 UTC]
Thanks!
I will try to update soon... soonish...
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LastoftheWolves In reply to Lil-Magpie [2015-10-01 10:04:18 +0000 UTC]
"soonish..." XD I understand, don' worry about it. As long as it happens in sayyyy, within the next millenia, I should be good :3 XD
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Lil-Magpie In reply to LastoftheWolves [2015-10-01 14:22:30 +0000 UTC]
Haha, thanks.
I should be able to meet that deadline. XD
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TheTennisballs [2015-09-27 13:49:40 +0000 UTC]
The research that you did for that part is like what rick castle did in the TV series Castle
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