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Description        I watched as Jack left the room rather abruptly, opening the metal door outward. I hadn’t been able to see the pin number that he typed in, but I heard the click of the lock when it had been undone… so I knew this door would automatically lock once it slammed shut.
       Watching the door begin to swing shut, my mind took over in order to save myself. The tape not being too tight around my left ankle, I wiggled my foot backwards only to snap it forward in a careful movement. I rotated my ankle so my toes hit a stray piece of rubble squarely. The little rock flew forward with direct momentum, sailing noiselessly an inch above the ground.
       I don’t know what the chances were of the stunt being successful…
       But perhaps I didn’t need chance.
       I had thought of all the variables… friction, trajectory, airflow, weight, momentum…
       The small chuck of concrete flew gracefully into the doorway at the split second the door shut – lodging in the tiny gap between the door and the rim. I listened carefully, satisfied when I didn’t hear the click of the lock sliding back into place – nor the footsteps of Jack returning.
       Crisis averted, I quickly pondered my situation.
       The tape needed to go first. I wiggled in my seat, cringing at the sharp pain that announced itself in my abdomen. Glancing down nervously, I analyzed the slit cut down my belly. It probably needed stitches, but the blood flow had almost completely stopped. Dark clotting liquid had solidified to make a weak barrier over the wound. Gratefully, I moved more carefully so as to avoid jarring the cut.
       Feeling that my right wrist was looser, I bent over at my waist to reach my wrist. Shimmying and twisting, I got my head close enough to my wrist. Giving one last wiggle and shove, I stretched to my limits. Leaning my neck down, I grabbed at the tethers with my teeth. Using my canine tooth and incisors, I managed to get a slip of tape between my teeth. Twisting and pulling upwards, the tape gave a satisfying ripping noise as it tore apart.
       The tape weakened by my work, I ripped the remaining adhesive on my right wrist by pulling my arm up in a quick jerk. I one-handedly reached to my bra and pulled the little hidden knife from within it. Using teeth and fingers, I opened the knife so it was in ready position. From there, I cut the rest of the tape off with ease and efficiency.
       Gratefully getting out of that seat, I rechecked my wound. Seeing it was completely dry now and still only a thin, clean line down my skin – I decided my priority was to get out of the building. Then, I could worry about the slice.
       I turned towards the door, excited to see the hairline crack in the rim of it, made possible by the tiny rock that was wedged in it. I turned to glance at the sad remains of my phone, scattered uselessly over the ground. A sigh escaped my throat but a sudden rush of adrenaline followed it almost instantaneously.
       Jack…. Let me go?
       Jack wanted to play… again?
       My head tilted in thought, making the room seem slanted in my vision. A few loose strands of hair fell into my gaze.
       He didn’t kill me. He didn’t fatally wound me. He didn’t even threaten Abbey. He basically agreed to the rules I had been playing by all along.
       What did that mean?
       I shook my head and squeezed my eyes shut for a few seconds. I’ll think about that later, I need to get out of here first! Jack could come back any minute and I did not want to be here when he did.
       Swinging to face the door, I darted forward on soft footfalls. Bracing my fingers in the doorway, I peaked out the tiny crack. Being met with thick darkness, I couldn’t figure Jack’s location in the warehouse. Turning back, I quickly found the light switch and flicked it off.
       Plunged into darkness, I bent down to the ground in search of little rocks. With a few bits of rubble in my palm, the lights out, the little knife in my other hand, and my body free – I proceeded forward.
       I relied on agility, trickery, and silence. Pushing the door open quietly, I quickly got the feeling I was being watched – or at the very least, I felt pursued. I slipped through the doorway and made my way left, twisting my ankles and toes in order to make the least possible noise on the hard concrete floor. Throwing a little rock to my right, I heard it make a few loud bounces. In that timeframe of noise, I darted forward while throwing more rocks to my right.
       Hearing footfalls of pursuit somewhere in the blackness, I bolted forward towards a faint glow of light. Wrenching an object open, I was greeted with the faint orangey glow of streetlights. Sprinting forward, I ran down the sidewalk and street. Hearing laughter behind me, I looked over my shoulder curiously and nearly froze in place.
       There was Jack, standing just outside the warehouse’s doors. The blue mask tilted and body shaking, I could hear his laughter from where I stood. He raised his hands and clapped them a few times in applause, seeming to smile despite the mask. I felt a grin crack across my face too, sensing any level of self-preservation melt away. The feeling of adrenaline, pride, and success ran through my veins like wild fire, making my mind fuzzy and mood blindingly giddy.
       I trotted away from him, looking over my shoulder at the creature that both captured me – and let me live. Where would we go from here? What was the status of this predator-prey relation?
       Were we officially playing the game?
       What were the costs?
       I snorted once in laughter, turning my back on the predator and disappearing around a corner.
       Did I really care about costs?
       “You know we’re still playing, right!?” A faint but exhilarated voice echoed off the walls as pursuing footsteps picked back up. My lips pulled back in a twisted smile, body swaying in a slow and teasing walk.
       “Always.” I called back, hearing a new ring to my voice. I turned to face the long expanse of alleyways and streets, pace increasing as I slipped into a trot and then a jog… pain forgotten, fear obliterated, mind whirling…
       Everyone should feel like this.
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Comments: 71

Aircakes [2018-01-06 00:18:38 +0000 UTC]

How... how would you have gotten out if that didn’t work lol?

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ShadowXLoki [2017-02-19 17:44:37 +0000 UTC]

yay!!!! IM FRIENDS WITH A MURDERER!!!!!! 

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Talya-Serket [2016-10-05 14:09:26 +0000 UTC]

Happened?
Nothing, Reader-chan is Sherlock Holmes XD

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Lil-Magpie In reply to Talya-Serket [2016-10-06 17:27:02 +0000 UTC]

Haha I see your comparison. XD

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HetaliaFanatic1 [2016-04-24 21:28:43 +0000 UTC]

Bad Romance coincidentally came on at the end of the chapter XD
I love et

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Lil-Magpie In reply to HetaliaFanatic1 [2016-04-25 01:41:49 +0000 UTC]

XD Perfect timing.

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zeepaarden [2015-11-07 14:33:24 +0000 UTC]

I have a painting idea of this chapter.. PREPARE

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Lil-Magpie In reply to zeepaarden [2015-11-07 17:05:56 +0000 UTC]

Ooooooo, really?
That's exciting!

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kit123abc [2015-11-02 04:27:36 +0000 UTC]

I am reading this in secret and I have to keep my squeals of excitement in. The reader is exactly like me...it really damn scares me. ~shivers~ ;- ; (LOvO)L

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Lil-Magpie In reply to kit123abc [2015-11-03 13:33:07 +0000 UTC]

Haha, glad you like it!
I plan on updating around Thanksgiving.

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kit123abc In reply to Lil-Magpie [2016-01-03 21:51:00 +0000 UTC]

~Squeals and hugs~ I have be offline but now im back and IT HAS BLOSSOMED!!!

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Lil-Magpie In reply to kit123abc [2016-01-04 01:00:51 +0000 UTC]

Yep, all the way to chapter 24!

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kit123abc In reply to Lil-Magpie [2016-01-04 02:57:28 +0000 UTC]

Yay! Keep it up! (reason I was gone was...computer died and it's been going on and off lately...but I'm getting it fixed so i'm on meh phone and dad's old crappy computer!!!! yay.)

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Lil-Magpie In reply to kit123abc [2016-01-04 03:20:31 +0000 UTC]

Yay for fixing computers! I know the feeling, and the seemingly endless wait. Glad you're back.

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kit123abc In reply to Lil-Magpie [2016-01-05 05:00:23 +0000 UTC]

I'm happy it's getting fixed but also, I'm ready to shoot the fangirls down if they getting to crazy, let me know if you get trouble. ~holds out a warp kitty sparkly pink gun~ High quality...gets the job done fast. Also, I have to read more of your write because I love the way you think, wow just WOW! Like with the train tracks in a few chaps ago. I must say that was brilliant by the way. ~high fives in slow motion~ I could think like that but I won't lie it scared me that I act almost the same. I'm like. "Everything is boring and I'm too smart for train tracks, warehouses, escapes, friends, 
a-a-and...AND...and........Eyeless Jack.maybe."

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Lil-Magpie In reply to kit123abc [2016-01-05 05:52:05 +0000 UTC]

No trouble here! Though that warp kitty sparkly pink gun sounds like da bomb. XD
(High fives back in slow motion) Thanks for your feedback! I'm thrilled you like the story so much, I was worried the reader's personality was too 'out there' to be enjoyed by the actual readers. But it's nice to know that's not the case! Many people like this one's personality.
And... are you really too smart for EJ? I know I'm not.

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kit123abc In reply to Lil-Magpie [2016-01-09 05:45:44 +0000 UTC]

I dun know, I am probably not smarter then EJ...~sob~ But I shall not give up ~loads warp kitty sparkly pink gun up~ OH and your welcome with...feedback? (I lost my mind but tats ok......I think.)

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innocentbystander97 [2015-10-26 10:38:40 +0000 UTC]

Holy crap that was awesome! You are great at this! Please keep them coming!

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Lil-Magpie In reply to innocentbystander97 [2015-10-26 12:21:41 +0000 UTC]

Thank you!
When I get time I will continue.

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SawyerTheReaper [2015-10-26 04:07:36 +0000 UTC]

Omg
I
Love
It

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Lil-Magpie In reply to SawyerTheReaper [2015-10-26 05:21:07 +0000 UTC]

Thank
you.

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SawyerTheReaper In reply to Lil-Magpie [2015-11-01 14:19:55 +0000 UTC]

No problem

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KityKira2501 [2015-10-17 22:28:32 +0000 UTC]

Plz make more, it's amazing how much I got into the 'movie', i literally felt every moment of it.
So plzmakemore, my adrenalin is high when i read this. ( I like it when my heart pounds in my chest, kinda like in the fic, I like the adrenaline rush. ).

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Nachtnight In reply to KityKira2501 [2015-10-29 16:02:30 +0000 UTC]

I have something like that too! my heart beat so fast. Ahhhh love this FanFiction <3

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Lil-Magpie In reply to KityKira2501 [2015-10-18 18:22:28 +0000 UTC]

Nice! I'm glad you like it.
More in the making~~

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Nachtnight [2015-10-15 09:50:05 +0000 UTC]

Wow, I'm surprised that you did a researh.
by the way, I have to say that this is one of the best fan fictions I have read. I actually imagined every scene every detail you described in to a movie in my head. (plus soundtrack and sound effect, I'm serious XD) And I guess It's so awesome because you wrote really good that the movie in my head continued to flow flawlessly. Really nice work!
PS. I kinda made up Reader's face...to looksedlike Casey Newton. (From TomorrwLand) Because why not? She is smart and hopeful and never give up in the movie XD and Jack...well he looked real and scary enough in my head. Not just a 2D drawing. All the details you described are there. (Handsome and scary at the Same time, brrr!)

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Lil-Magpie In reply to Nachtnight [2015-10-18 18:23:13 +0000 UTC]

Thank you very much.

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athiestexcept4fandom [2015-10-11 00:16:46 +0000 UTC]

I am badass! Hells yeah! That was awesome. Please don't let this be the end, I really like this story!

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Lil-Magpie In reply to athiestexcept4fandom [2015-10-11 14:42:12 +0000 UTC]

It's not the end!
But idk when I'll have time to write and update.

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SaidNobodyEver [2015-10-06 03:40:35 +0000 UTC]

You did a great job with the escape bit. Yay, very funny and creative how you did some first hand experience testing on this chapter! It made it seem more realistic I think.

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Lil-Magpie In reply to SaidNobodyEver [2015-10-07 01:20:32 +0000 UTC]

Thank you! I thought it'd be fun.

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ab121500 [2015-10-05 18:18:55 +0000 UTC]

Omg i cant wait for the next chapter!

Ps good for you doing research!

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Lil-Magpie In reply to ab121500 [2015-10-06 00:18:44 +0000 UTC]

Thanks.

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alixlou [2015-10-05 02:33:00 +0000 UTC]

Great for the research 😉👍.I was so happy when you post it!
It is the first and the most interresting eyeless jack story what I read.😚
Good ending.Ending?

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Lil-Magpie In reply to alixlou [2015-10-06 00:19:32 +0000 UTC]


Thank you!

This could be the ending... but I'm going to try and continue with the original plot I laid out.
We'll see how it goes~~

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Asssitant-Scientist [2015-10-02 02:46:17 +0000 UTC]

Yay for coexistence! And sheer luck! And insane (and probably painful) research!
My thoughts are all over the place on this one, so I'll make a list.
1. I see how the rubble played a role in the escape now. It was pretty smart to use it as a way to throw off the pursuer instead of throwing it at the pursuer (which would probably miss).
2. Wow and thank you for doing the research to see if it was plausible. Did I guilt you into that...?
3. The warehouse is smaller than I expected. I actually thought that it was a labyrinth of sorts, but then again, it is supposed to be an old warehouse, p robably with some of the walls knocked down, which would explain the rubble.
4. Will Abbey accidentally find out about this? Or the manager? That would make for an interesting story for the reader to tell them... >: D
5. Love the imagery. Every sentence serves a purpose.
Lastly, sorry that I'm a bit terse, but I am kind of pressed for time at the moment, so I couldn't think up a long, eloquent response. But is this the end? It still says "Next" on the author's note so will there be an epilogue?

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Lil-Magpie In reply to Asssitant-Scientist [2015-10-03 05:34:50 +0000 UTC]

It wasn't painful research, it was kinda fun to try. XD
1. Loved that part.
2. Well, you convinced me that not everyone reads over logic holes. So I decided I'd try to perfect the escape scenes to at LEAST be humanly plausible. So yes, you had influence!
3. Yeah, I imagined one big room (dark area) and the small back office. There were no good warehouses to research nearby... And yes, it is vacant and very old.
4. You'll see!!!
5. Thank you. I'm glad it worked out, I edited it too quickly for my usual standards.

It's all good! I LOVE your comments! You are always helpful and supportive, eloquent or not. XD
And yes... there will be several more chapters~~

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The-Mistic-Soldier [2015-10-02 01:21:33 +0000 UTC]

Love~ it~
~Misty

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Lil-Magpie In reply to The-Mistic-Soldier [2015-10-03 05:29:40 +0000 UTC]

Thank you!

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LastoftheWolves [2015-09-29 13:08:25 +0000 UTC]

THIS IS AMAZING!! XD I need more

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Lil-Magpie In reply to LastoftheWolves [2015-10-01 02:33:57 +0000 UTC]

Thanks!
I will try to update soon... soonish...

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LastoftheWolves In reply to Lil-Magpie [2015-10-01 10:04:18 +0000 UTC]

"soonish..." XD I understand, don' worry about it. As long as it happens in sayyyy, within the next millenia, I should be good :3 XD

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Lil-Magpie In reply to LastoftheWolves [2015-10-01 14:22:30 +0000 UTC]

Haha, thanks.
I should be able to meet that deadline. XD

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LastoftheWolves In reply to Lil-Magpie [2015-10-01 14:34:17 +0000 UTC]

XD hope so. How you been?

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Lil-Magpie In reply to LastoftheWolves [2015-10-02 22:51:35 +0000 UTC]

Busy but good.

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LastoftheWolves In reply to Lil-Magpie [2015-10-03 02:42:26 +0000 UTC]

that's good ^_^ 

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YangOkami [2015-09-27 16:32:38 +0000 UTC]

I only found one mistake and its probably not worth mentioning but you asked for us to point them out so here:
Plunged INTO TO darkness, I bent down to the ground in search of little rocks.
I capitalized the error, its not much and its easily over looked. Completely up to you if you want to fix it
And I'd like to see Jack admit he likes the Reader but its fine if you end it here, if is your story after all.

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Lil-Magpie In reply to YangOkami [2015-09-27 17:37:05 +0000 UTC]

Fixed!
Thank you very much for pointing that out!

I think I'm going to keep going... I'm not entirely satisfied with this ending.

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TheTennisballs [2015-09-27 13:49:40 +0000 UTC]

The research that you did for that part is like what rick castle did in the TV series Castle

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Artistmema123 In reply to TheTennisballs [2015-09-27 17:54:53 +0000 UTC]

I Love castle!!!!

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