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lotrdeana17 In reply to ??? [2010-07-16 00:26:17 +0000 UTC]
Thanks! ^_^
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StephethxLoser [2010-02-20 16:00:57 +0000 UTC]
Shit, shitshit. Things are really getting out of hand aren't they? Ah, well. I guess it's to be expected if you're in love with your brother.
I felt kind of helpless reading it, because I knew what was going to happen--I mean it had to, they were letting people in and things were bound to go sour. But I could just read it. There was a lot of groaning on my part, that's for sure. Just like, why did they dig their own grave kind of thing.
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lotrdeana17 In reply to StephethxLoser [2010-02-21 05:01:55 +0000 UTC]
Exactly. Chris can be a little clueless like that. I think this half of the story needs the most serious editing to explain things more fully and keep with the more novel-like style I slipped into here. Hopefully it will be expanded and improved one day!
At least it got the right reaction from you. ^_^ Thanks!
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AlbinoApples [2010-01-23 04:05:01 +0000 UTC]
...way to leave a great cliffhanger. Haha.
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redrose-vine [2010-01-05 23:30:23 +0000 UTC]
All I can say is NOO!!!
Chrissy can't lose Milo! And and and... Emily can't go away!!!
AHH!
I have to read Guilty...
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Soleste81 [2009-10-23 03:29:14 +0000 UTC]
holy hell! the world is coming crashing down.. damn perceptive people.. damn mixing people who have different ideas of what is going on.. wow.. just wow.. poor chris.. i think this is the first time he's had a chance to freak out completely..
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totodile2mew [2009-09-07 15:20:57 +0000 UTC]
oh no...that's not good....i hope they'll be ok.....
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lotrdeana17 In reply to ChuuuuANIMEmod [2009-07-01 05:35:05 +0000 UTC]
Thank you very much! I'm working on it right now. ^_^
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greeleygrrl [2009-06-27 04:45:48 +0000 UTC]
How soon is soon when Guilty comes out? Or Umbrella 31? Or...or...some goregous bit of art?
Guilty mainly I am asking.
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lotrdeana17 In reply to greeleygrrl [2009-06-27 19:47:29 +0000 UTC]
I don't know how soon. As soon as it gets finished, I suppose. I also feel terribly guilty. I've been more into reading than writing lately, but I feel the bug of creation biting me again. ^_^
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greeleygrrl In reply to lotrdeana17 [2009-06-28 02:23:10 +0000 UTC]
Yay!
Good buggy!
Aww...don't feel guilty!
I've been reading a lot, too...
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Nilaka [2009-06-26 04:34:33 +0000 UTC]
Omg... you need to write a book... This is painfully good. Hopefully you write more .. For us new comers.
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lotrdeana17 In reply to Nilaka [2009-06-26 05:25:27 +0000 UTC]
I will! ^_^ Thank you very much. There will be one more chapter.
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xxEngelxxx [2009-06-10 06:41:38 +0000 UTC]
The only thing I can say is...
I love it!
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groovygal707 [2009-06-09 23:02:47 +0000 UTC]
please finish the story soon. u have very good writing skills i might add.
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lotrdeana17 In reply to groovygal707 [2009-06-10 09:49:02 +0000 UTC]
Thank you very much! I'll try to get it written soon. ^_^
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kitsune712 [2009-06-08 16:28:42 +0000 UTC]
aaaaahhhhh shittt!!!!!!!
when does danny get out of jail im about to DIEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEE!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
XP
:'(
*sigh* i love your characters soooo much!
i think i momentarily confuse them w/ real people sometimes......<3
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lotrdeana17 In reply to kitsune712 [2009-06-08 22:41:58 +0000 UTC]
Thank you! ^_^
And him being in jail was just a dream.
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lotrdeana17 In reply to kitsune712 [2009-06-09 05:12:32 +0000 UTC]
No, they are not going to the police, as far as Chris and Danny know right now. I haven't finished writing the next chapter yet.
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lotrdeana17 In reply to LilOtakuAngy [2009-06-03 15:25:52 +0000 UTC]
Okay, okay! I'll try to get it done! ^_^
Haha, thanks! Glad you liked it.
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hellojilli [2009-05-10 20:15:10 +0000 UTC]
It had to happen... *sigh* poor them.
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lotrdeana17 In reply to greeleygrrl [2009-04-29 22:11:31 +0000 UTC]
Yes, there will be a final part called Guilty when I have time to write it. Glad you enjoyed the series so far! ^_^ Thanks!
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AllMyLife0903 [2009-04-27 12:02:43 +0000 UTC]
I'm gonna sound like a broken record here, but your author skills are really, very good. The only thing that caught my attention though, after having re-read it a couple of times (the series, aside the prison story; got me all shocked and panicked there lol), was the repeatation of "I love --" in narrator speech, it started to sound like they were both trying to make themselves believe they do, instead of it sounding like they actually were in love. You're gonna freak out if I said I relate to this particular series, so I wont say that
I was first a little confused with Daniel's story, but after having read it over, I figure it was to potray his personality. Which I came to think was really well done. Instead of writing from your own style continuosly, it seemed you'd taken into consideration the fact two people see and remember things differently from another.
Overall, the only thing I was sort of unpleased with was, the general questioning of own feelings. You seemed to tackle on Daniel's part; his responsibility as an older brother, also the age difference, when it came to the 'reasoning', if you will, for his feelings and the effect on his younger brother. I don't know, perhaps I was expecting more of a self study part, regarding his feelings (the rights or wrongs and self doubt). But, I'm a philosophical person, that said You did bring out the fact Daniel was having much pain due to the nature of the relationship and self-guilt/blame.
Sorry for the length of the note. I wasn't really planning a mini-essay here Now I shall go forth and roam around your gallery
J
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lotrdeana17 In reply to AllMyLife0903 [2009-04-27 17:52:48 +0000 UTC]
Thank you very much. I really appreciate long comments. It's what makes writing worth it all.
Yes, I have had people mention the repetition of "I love" before and perhaps that was a mistake on my part. I normally don't include lots of that in my other writing, but for this series I thought it would be appropriate because first it's normal sibling/family love and then it's friendship love and then it's romantic love. So I was trying to show those phases with the the same words, but have the situation change around them so that the audience could pick up on that. But you're right, it can also be repetitive and annoying, so if I ever do a rewrite/revision of this story, I'll be sure to remember that. And if you can relate to this series, that's very helpful. I'm an only child so I was completely making this all up.
Yes, thank you. I tried to make their different 'voices' or personalities come through in the different narration styles. Also, I hardly ever write in First Person, so this was already way outside my normal style. But I'm glad you thought Daniel's personality was well done. Thank you.
So you were displeased with how I wrote Daniel's internal battles? I wanted to show that this is what he wants to do even though he knows/feels it is wrong, so that's what I focused on with him. However, you mentioned a self-study approach. Could I ask you to elaborate on that? I also plan to write a final installment to this series called "Guilty" which will also be from Danny's POV, so any advice or constructive criticism would be most welcome and extremely helpful. What would you like me to hone in on for the final chapter?
Once again, thank you very much. It's rare that I get such thought out and helpful comments as yours. I really appreciate it. Thank you. ^_^
And if you don't mind my asking, you say you can relate to this series, so does that mean you also have a close relationship with your brother?
Thank you again.
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lotrdeana17 In reply to georgesampsonlover66 [2009-04-05 22:52:26 +0000 UTC]
I'm working on that... I've been seriously lax in writing lately, I need to get caught up.
I'm sorry it made you sad. *hug*
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