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Finally done !!! 
Let's forget about the info card thingy before. Esmerelda is fixed with a new look. I hope she won't become a mary-sue And sorry for my bad English 
Esmerelda Fenton/Phantom (c) P/S : My friends, please give me yar opinion about her new look. Thank you very much ^^
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EDIT 25/2/2012
Fixed her personality, color scheme, birthday, backstory...
I hope it won't be worse than last time (cuz I asked for my
mom's help !!!)
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EDIT 6/3/2012
I took a huge Critique from [link] and finally, this is the result.
Hope this one is better than the last one.
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EDIT 12/7/2012
Added Good traits and bad traits
Good traitsEsmerelda can really dance and sing but she doesn't like to perform infront of everyone else. Simply because she doesn't want herself to become a show-off. Although not always but she's an optimistic person. That makes people feel safe and happy while staying with her.
Bad traitsEsmerelda is a very bad artist, really. She doesn't have an artistic eye, so no one wants to take fashion advices from her. She is so stubborn sometimes that no one can tell her what to do, especially her parents, that's why there's always a fight between her and her mother. In the most desperate moments, although she's tried to be optimistic and confident, but deep in the inside, where nobody can know her feelings, is an pessimistic soul. That prevent her from thinking wisely while fighting monster.
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Well I hope that's alright...
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Esmerelda possibly is a variant of or comes of Esmeralda that is the Spanish name of Emerald and means the green gemstone and precious gemstone because the emeralds are green gemstones.
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Thanks for the info ^^
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Yeah. I find that most Fenton/Phantom children oc's are too much like Danny or Sam (or whatever other pairing), but Esmerelda is unique. (Because face it not every kid looks like a clone of their parents... unless you're me. XD I'm not even kidding on that one.)Not to mention her name is very original for a DP OC. You seem to have put alot of thought and effort into her character, and it seems to have paid off nicely.
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Aww thank you for that. I took a lot of critiques from the others and fixed that bio like...8 times, and yes it turned out pretty well 
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XD I've had to change my oc a lot too.
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XD Thanks! Could you check her out and tell me what you think?[link]
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Really great OC. Sounds very original too.
By the way I notice she has brownish hair? Did she get it from an ancestry gene since people can get that sometimes or did she dye her hair in her human form? Just wondering that's it.
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She got that from Maddie
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Oh alright then.
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I think the bio should be okay and I wonder if you're gonna do Darwin's. ALSO, I think my main OC's kids should meet yours. ^^
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I'm thinking about Darwin's personality and background story, I don't want to edit him 7 TIMES like Esmerelda. And also I think that too. I'm going to draw some sketch of our OCs but sorry I can't color them...hope you understand ^^
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I know you can't color them, but maybe I will in GIMP.
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Hihi, thanks ^^ and just finish a sketch earlier. I will submit it tomorrow ^^
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Nice!
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Thanks girl ^o^ !!!
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You're welcome! ^^
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I like this bio. It got the style. Whoa, it rhyme.
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Thank you so much girl ^^ !!!
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You're welcome, now you will carefully do Darwin bio hope you don't mess up with this again because It'll be so frustrating.
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Yes, 6 TIMES editing, a whole week for that bio...[link]
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Yeah, TONS OF EDITING COULD BE FRUSTRATING and good luck making Darwin's bio because I can't wait to see what kind of appearances that he has like good colors.
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thanks, but she needs a little work out
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Hmm well... I see you're a little let down because of your OC is being considered a Sue here... so may I give some advice? You could still make her work. You should do her a revision though because she is a Sue.
First, maybe you should check her birth date, since Danny and Sam were 14 when the show started (2004), that would mean they were born in 1990, meaning by 1997 they were 7 and that's a really weird age to have a child, you should try to guide your dates from the show's timeline (I know this is a minor detail and all, but we - the audience- really appreciate this kind of stuff, it means you did your research before writting down whatever date you thought was better).
You should also think about her appearance a little bit, think if the purple hair is really- well logical, for a start. Nobody has purpple hair and even if people did, as Danny and Sam are her parents,(and they both have black hair) wouldn't it be more normal if she got her hair like them? Think about your own parents and yourself, do your hair colour resembles theirs? Do your eyes? I'm not suggesting you make a copy cat of them and make Sam's hair longer then call her your OC, but you could use more inspiration from the parents when creating your character here.
I believe one of the main problems with your OC is her ghost half, think if it's really logical for her to have one for a start. She has one human parent (Sam) and one Half-Ghost-Human parent (Danny) this means she has a 25% of probability of being a half-ghost herself. I'm really up for the idea of Danny's kid being a someone who has less or no powers whatsoever. A normal kid can be interesting. She doesn't have to be a halfa to be a ghost hunter or have an exciting life with her Ghost parent Danny Phantom. But if you really want her to be a half-ghost (It is your OC after all) the ghost outfit doesn't have to resemble Danny's, seriously, if you like your OC to have a ghost side then maybe you could use another colour pattern and make her stand out more. What about having ghost powers, but without the ghost half? What if she could use her powers without 'going ghost'?
Finally, but very important I think you should tell us more about her personality, if you only say she's sweet and stubborn, well there are lots of people like that. We wouldn't care. You are contradicting yourself when you say Esmeralda has a strong personality yet she always listens to what other people say? People with strong personalities often think they are always right, they are impulsive and is very hard to get them to listen to other people. (Believe me I have a sister like that.) Maybe you could tell us something that could help us connect with your OC. Something more detailed like, I dunno "Esmeralda likes to be the leader in everything she does, but she stresses out very often and wants everything done her way. This causes her to loose control and yell at people often." I know this does not sound like the perfect girl, but that's just the thing, she can't be perfect. Don't be afraid to put some flaws into your character. They make her more real.
Anyways I hope this wasn't mean to you in any way, I only meant to give you some tips to make your character better.
Good luck in whatever you decide 
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Thank you so much ^^ I'll try my best this time ^^
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Hey there! Just saw- and read the modifications on your OC. For a start, I really enjoyed the changes you made. I really liked how you changed your Halfa origin story, yet kept the essence of it, which i assume was showing us that your OC has a hero complex just like her dad! It reminded me of Phantom Planet when Danny lost and got his powers back, which means, if the gene is there, it is possible for it to happen! Even the creators of the show think so. You used your logic and researched within the show and now your character's bio sounds believable and smart! Congrats on that!
I like the new appearance too, giving her black her in her ghost half is genius in my point of view! And she'd get the light coloured hair from Maddie's genes and Sam's parents... very interesting idea. Not every kid gets his/her hair colour because of his/her parents, there are grandparents too- take Sam- wh resembles her grandma more than her parents. Excellent job you took an advice and went beyond it! Way to go!
The personality seems stronger too. I like how you added little details to make her more believable, and help us readers conect with your OC. I still think it could be more detailed, but you can go into that as you develop your story more or whatever plans you have for your OC!
Now just keep up this good work! Your character has a good start as for now, but she is going to keep developing and evolving, (just like the rest of us do!) she is going to face enemies, (since she is part of Team Phantom) and her future battles will also put her in precarious situations that may affect her personality (in any way possible) so keep in mind her attributes and flaws have to develop along the way too.
Good job!
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[link] Actually Esmeralda was posted on tumblr for being a sue and I found it Click the link.
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This...is bad +.+ . Oh my...I can't believe it...after seeing this, I think I'm gonna give up...all my hope I've been raised...crashed TT.TT. Life is so harsh...
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No, don't not now. My friend did given up once, but went on because I support her and the critquers too. That's her.
I'll give you this proof. This is her sue--> [link]
Then it change to non sueish [link]
Also hermie told her not to leave dA when she posted her journal on the profile. Hermie wants her to continue and I too. Also, I want you to continue it too ^^ because the words may be harsh but they're critiques.
I think this blog will help you on your OCs. Maybe take the advices from there and put it into your bio. Then, I'm 100% sure that will not become a sue. You would have to ask the administrator and does that sounds like a good idea?
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Already asked. I hope I'll do my best this time. Go editing...5th time...XD. Fighting Marina !!! Thanks ^^
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Yeeeah...big challenge...again =.+, and thanks ^^
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Can't wait what his colors are like because I wanna do this in GIMP from sketch that I promise you.[link] That's link how I'm better in GIMP
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I'm gonna do that bio soon...and GIMP is good !!!
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