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Sheinkin20 [2020-02-28 05:05:37 +0000 UTC]
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MaLAgua In reply to Sheinkin20 [2020-02-28 17:26:04 +0000 UTC]
Heh, thank you very much for your support comments. Yeah, leaving this up in the air is one of my regrets. Though it's hard to work on stuff when the mindset is not as optimistic >>
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bloodwolf1235 [2019-07-31 21:14:19 +0000 UTC]
are things still crazy or is this coming back to life soon
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MaLAgua In reply to bloodwolf1235 [2019-07-31 21:44:48 +0000 UTC]
Yeah, still are. Juggling a lot of stuff right now too.
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MaLAgua In reply to bloodwolf1235 [2019-07-31 23:50:28 +0000 UTC]
If I ever get to move out of my country and get to a place where i enjoy, maybe then will the creative juices flow again.
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BigPickupBigSemi [2018-07-17 06:52:10 +0000 UTC]
I am with everyone else, this is a good series and the rewrite is also ggod,. I just don't want this one to end up as what happens to the bear in Toy Story 3. Somebody else completely taking over. With that said, it seems a bit familiar and fresher coming from you. Its better you write it. Seeing that you are thinking with a friend is good. This just adds to the plot. So, my question is, when will this make its Grand opening/comeback?
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MaLAgua In reply to BigPickupBigSemi [2018-07-17 14:39:06 +0000 UTC]
I am not really sure. Right now I have to focus on my craft and find a way to make money and making a living. So my focus is already spread too thin between design jobs, art, writing 2 series here and coordinating with the WU universe, and thats to name a few.
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BigPickupBigSemi In reply to MaLAgua [2018-07-18 05:19:44 +0000 UTC]
Ooh. o_o Well, it's good to know it isn't forgotten. But, like I said, it would be nice to see a comeback of the series.
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Tenkokukutiw [2018-06-30 04:24:42 +0000 UTC]
Everything I wanted to say, said McGamor. It's a good Tg and Tf. It's hard work Tf is not a sexual fetish or something like that. After seeing the original and new version you can see that you are more worked. As original only serum gave energies now they are energetic bar.
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MaLAgua In reply to Tenkokukutiw [2018-07-04 17:25:41 +0000 UTC]
Yeah, it's kinda what I was going here. Story comes first in most of my stories. The original was meant to be a one shot thing that suddenly exploded into a two week adventure that i, sadly, couldn't complete.
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Tenkokukutiw In reply to MaLAgua [2018-07-04 17:31:04 +0000 UTC]
¿Por que no pudo completar?
Ami me esta gustando el huso de los recurso no se escapa una para explorar aspecto situación de tom.
Metes cada situación forma forzada pero relatos corto sin muchas pretensiones funcionan muy bien
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MaLAgua In reply to Tenkokukutiw [2018-07-04 19:46:34 +0000 UTC]
Outside reasons I guess. I left this series in a pause that I haven't gone back from.
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Tenkokukutiw In reply to MaLAgua [2018-07-05 02:12:01 +0000 UTC]
Espero que la continúes; pese todos defectos pueda citar, a mi me ha gustado.
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MaLAgua In reply to Tenkokukutiw [2018-07-05 03:31:40 +0000 UTC]
me alegro. Si me gustaria regresar a estas series.
Pero ando mucho lidiando con las preocupaciones de estar perdiendo habilidades, ese soy yo siendo paranoico.
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McGamor [2017-10-19 12:52:03 +0000 UTC]
Okay, just finished reading the full original and the 2 rewritten parts and I am SO glad that I found this story by accident.
I really love the setting you created here, aswell as the characters (Leo is an ass though, atleast he got what he deserved). What I like about this story and sets it apart from most that use the transformation/crossgender genre is that it manages to maintain a good balance between the realism of the plot (in terms of behaviour of the person) and the setting it represents.
Most stories that use such a setting, usually end up either in porn or a flat story-line that is totally disconnected the from the genre and setting it is about. Tom really feels like an average person thrown into this awkward situation where he is not only turned into an anthro, but also the opposite gender. On one hand he deals with being an anthro and the changes that come with it, but also the weirdness of now being a woman and the constant reminder by either his friends, family or the whatever weird stuff happens to him (starting a relationship with a girl, joining a volleyball team for girls, being forced to wear a bikini by said team, etc.).
And regarding the two rewritten parts: they do the story came up with justice. The amount of extra detail you added really fleshes out the settings, like the introduction of the company and park in the first part, Tom and his friends being baffled by seeing an anthro for the first time (seeing it on TV and in real life is hardly comparable; I too would be speechless to see something like that IRL), the slightly more complicated and better explained injection of the serum (the addition of the energy bars is a good idea, makes the whole thing a little bit more believable) and lastly the well written horror of Tom wittnessing his own transformation in this part ( I mean, not only is the thought about chaning gender terrifying, but also that his entire body is mutating into a half human half animal hybrid, which I can only imagine must feel weird, modifying his very DNA and trusting the serum not to do something wrong (the whole part with his vision getting blurrier and feeling pressure inside his head was terrifying to read, cause that's normally sign that something bad is happening and you really feel the horrifying terror he is in)).
That being said, I really hope that you one day continue writing this, cause it would be quite sad to see something like this being abandoned.
PS: What would that serum do to people with dental fillings, would they pop out? Or would they change with the teeth?
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Starwind16 [2017-05-09 17:53:48 +0000 UTC]
Is this still being worked on?
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MaLAgua In reply to Starwind16 [2017-05-09 18:22:01 +0000 UTC]
Sorta, working on it but got a bit sidetracked on many things
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eep79 [2015-12-06 19:46:56 +0000 UTC]
Nice to see that your still at it. Keep it up.
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NoWayOutHere [2015-02-03 21:32:06 +0000 UTC]
Nice story, well done.
The extra information you added really helped understanding the whole plot and Tom's situation better.
Are you going to continue the story after chapter eight ?
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MaLAgua In reply to NoWayOutHere [2015-02-04 02:38:46 +0000 UTC]
Thanks, im glad the tweaks help. And yeah, i plan to. Though im stalling for a bit as i bounce ideas with a friend just so i dont fall in the same pitfall as before
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faer-windstormfan [2014-10-20 16:46:52 +0000 UTC]
This is actually really cool, I could feel the anxiety oozing out of the page as Tom tries to hold it in. It was great! I don't usually go for TGs, mostly because it's generally some cheap erotic stuff that generally gives me the impression it was written by guys like Leo, but this seemed to keep the fetsih stuff on the back burner and really explore the psychological aspects of things.
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faer-windstormfan In reply to MaLAgua [2014-10-21 04:10:43 +0000 UTC]
Yeah. Your storytelling has the mark of storytelling - you're deliberately going someplace with it, working with the characters. It's great.
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Blazefan3669 [2014-09-23 15:57:02 +0000 UTC]
Once again, great improvement over the original. Everything just feels like it flows better, and you've made it even more believable by adding more drama/emotion to basically the whole thing. Again, only problem is that you're sometimes missing words or have them in the wrong place, but that can be overlooked sometimes. Once again, great job!
Personally, I would only work on the remake until you reach a chapter of the original that you were happy with, and THEN move on to finishing it so you don't have to rewrite the whole thing. Personal opinion, nothing more.
(Please tell me I'm not the only one who wants to punch Leo in the face repeatedly. I mean, I know what happens to him later, but God! He is a grade A douchebag!)
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Blazefan3669 In reply to MaLAgua [2014-09-24 14:40:39 +0000 UTC]
I have problems coming up with stuff to motivate me as well. My method is either going back to the ideas I have and tweaking them if I'm not satisfied, or (and I'm not making this up) I listen to music. For some reason, when I listen to certain kinds of music, it gets me in the mood to write something in my stories of the same general feel.
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MaLAgua In reply to Blazefan3669 [2014-09-25 02:56:48 +0000 UTC]
That's nice. You found your rhythm and what triggers you. If it works for you, keep at it. I honeslty havent found the real trigger that helps me... and if i found it i think i lost it.. For me though, its a bit more of a serious matter.
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Blazefan3669 In reply to MaLAgua [2014-09-29 20:00:27 +0000 UTC]
What is? Finding your writing trigger, or the trigger itself?
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MaLAgua In reply to Blazefan3669 [2014-09-30 01:01:13 +0000 UTC]
means what gets you to write
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Blazefan3669 In reply to MaLAgua [2014-09-30 18:37:46 +0000 UTC]
Hm. Well, I hope you find yours. I like your work, and I'd hate to see you stop. Not meant to be creepy, I swear.
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MaLAgua In reply to Blazefan3669 [2014-10-01 00:35:55 +0000 UTC]
Its okay and it didnt really feel creepy. But... as to stopping i dont know how the future will be
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Blazefan3669 In reply to MaLAgua [2014-10-08 18:16:27 +0000 UTC]
Just gotta hope for the best, right?
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MaLAgua In reply to Blazefan3669 [2014-10-08 18:32:01 +0000 UTC]
I really want to answer positively to that question, but i cant
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Blazefan3669 In reply to MaLAgua [2014-10-14 15:56:19 +0000 UTC]
And it's that attitude that's stopping you from doing so. I'm not trying to sound mean, but that's my honest opinion.
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MaLAgua In reply to Blazefan3669 [2014-10-15 00:25:50 +0000 UTC]
Hm. I've heard that a lot, but there isn't really much i can do. I have no alternative nor future plans.
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Blazefan3669 In reply to MaLAgua [2014-10-20 16:33:48 +0000 UTC]
Welp. if there isn't much you can do, then I guess you should just make the most of what you have, right?
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MaLAgua In reply to Blazefan3669 [2014-10-21 00:19:36 +0000 UTC]
I know. And it isn't really helping >.<
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Blazefan3669 In reply to MaLAgua [2014-10-29 19:07:33 +0000 UTC]
Is that supposed to be Homer's "D'oh!"?
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MaLAgua In reply to Blazefan3669 [2014-10-30 03:44:37 +0000 UTC]
not really, at least not in this case (although since its been a while since last post here, i kinda forgot what we were talking here
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Blazefan3669 In reply to MaLAgua [2014-10-31 23:50:45 +0000 UTC]
I kinda don't want to bring it back up, truth be told.
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MaLAgua In reply to Blazefan3669 [2014-11-01 00:20:29 +0000 UTC]
It's okay, i suppose its for the best
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MaLAgua In reply to Blazefan3669 [2014-11-01 01:15:52 +0000 UTC]
well, still thanks for talking
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Blazefan3669 In reply to MaLAgua [2014-11-03 20:43:53 +0000 UTC]
Don't mention it. I'm always willing to listen.
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