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Published: 2014-11-27 23:45:37 +0000 UTC; Views: 338; Favourites: 9; Downloads: 0
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Hello! Remember me? I did a criique a while ago on one of your drawings. Welp i'm back! But my critique will go on a more positive side i think~
Vision: Oh wow it looks much better than before! That's a good amelioration~ Keep it up! But the background seems a bit generic. Try working on it a bit more~
Originality: Welp you do a whole lot of shipping with that oc, so the originality goes a bit down.
Technique: Your characters now have muzzles, which is rather cool in my point of view. Because last time i came it was just a ball. But good job on that! The legs looks more like legs now. The only two things that bothers me are the ears and the hairs. The ears looks a bit weird but i'm sure you can work on that! The hairs looks a bit too detached from the head. But your drawing looks rather good on itself.
Impact: It's rather cute i must say. Even though i am not a big fan of extremely colorful OCs. Keep up the good work!
Final note: Keep this art style. Definetively. It looks extremely good. You'll become a great greeeaaat artist if you keep up improving and testing new things. Good job!!
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Vision:
-Basically this is a picture of two cute animals who are romantically involved or something like that.
It's kind of a good concept, and it could be cute, but...
Technique:
-Those lines are a bit offputting, and they seem abit unstable(example, Lefty's tail and bangs are a bit angular in some places) {I feel you'd do better with thicker lines}
-Honestly, I'm not a fan of those eyes, they're a bit too vertical if you know what I mean, even if it is viewed from the side. The eyes could be stretched a bit to the right, or something.
-Both of those bodies are literally exactly the same, save for minor alterations to the hair, color, eyes, blush, the second ear, and tail. Hell, they both even have the same expression, it's just that Whitey's blushing.
-The background is done a poorly, the grass looks like someone tried to start an atomic fire, and the sky is ridiculously empty.
-Also, on note of the grass, seeing how high these two are, and looking at the grass, I'd say that they are a bit too high, and they need to be lowered a bit.
-This leads to the grass looking ridiculously out of place, and it decreases the
quality of the picture (So perhaps the grass should be a bit more flatter, and a bit more higher, with a darker shade of green.)
Originality:
I can't really truthfully say that these characters are that original, nor can I say that the concept is original, what with the amounts of multicolored, cat/wolf/dog-like creatures popping up all over deviantart
Final Notes:
You can make an improvement I'm sure, just learn what colors go together good, and perhaps you could make characters more identifiable than just their colors and tails(yes I know that Whitey is another's OC, but you could still give them a bit more personality when drawing them.)
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This is my first critique so I apologize if anything is off. I'd like to start off by saying that this image looks a lot nicer than most of the stuff in your gallery and I can tell a lot of effort went into this picture. However, it is not without flaws. I'd say you should try to work on the anatomy of these creatures before moving onto working on other things such as dynamic posing or shading. Perhaps use a reference next time you draw (if at all possible, because I can't tell if these animals are a creation of your own or if they're based off of a real species) or maybe just doodle and play around with how it looks.
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Aww! Too cute <3<3<3 you didn't have to draw Flitz for me ;w; they look so cute together
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