Comments: 15
DoomWinter [2021-07-16 19:06:32 +0000 UTC]
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Tamaril-86 [2021-04-23 02:09:31 +0000 UTC]
GLORIOUS!! I think i might draw that belly!
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Tamaril-86 [2021-04-23 02:09:06 +0000 UTC]
GLORIOUS!! I think i might draw that belly!
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hurricanestormer [2018-09-27 13:20:25 +0000 UTC]
HELL YES. MY ABSOLUTE FAVORITE NO DOUBT IN STORIES. NICE JOB! THIS DESERVES A COMIC ADAPTATION
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ExpansionEnthusiast [2018-03-15 08:41:44 +0000 UTC]
Loved the concept, and the execution. Magical + reluctant weight gain is my absolute favourite.
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PMQTime [2017-11-06 11:26:18 +0000 UTC]
Great story! I enjoyed how it was a slow burn, then rather a lot happened to her at once
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Forcedlactationlover [2017-11-02 01:02:21 +0000 UTC]
Three million Dollars, in exchange for an extra 300 plus pounds. The demon will get her anyway, if she spends too much of her gains on pizzas. But, if she's smart, it was worth it.
Well done!
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MassiveDoom [2017-10-21 16:52:26 +0000 UTC]
Excellent story, my friend. The demon may have won after all...
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clarkpalmed [2017-10-03 02:46:00 +0000 UTC]
Nice one, especially given the speed with which it was written! I personally enjoyed the 'snappy start', it lent an air of mystery to the beginning of the story. Who is the protagonist, why is she here, what does she want out of this game, etc. I guess I just like those questions being slowly answered instead of presented all at once. I see how it could be disorienting, though, so I'm sure whatever edits you make will only improve it!
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TacoIsotope [2017-10-02 01:01:38 +0000 UTC]
Amazing story! You had detail that would make John Steinbeck gasp! You're a really talented writer my guy! Why not write a book maybe??
One critique though, maybe give a TINY bit more characterization before throwing us into a story. Other than that, 10/10.
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