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Meerabelle — My Light Died

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What happened to the light in this world? People say you can still find it, but I’ve been looking for so long and all I see is the darkness. My grandmother used to talk about the stars, small points of light that lit up the sky and showed there was something more out there. She told me how they were stolen long ago. I think we are like stars, and that every life is like a small point of glowing light. I also think that one day, like the stars, we’ll be stolen. Not by a person or a thing but by our own misery. We live in such a corrupt place, one in which people are happy to die and sad to live. That is something I don’t call life at all. I believe one by one we’ll all give up and let that light die. And I think I let mine go out a long time ago. 

a section from the novel im writing "Ring". its a part taken from Sasha's suicide letter (Sasha being the boy in my picture). He is a 18 yr  old boy who on the same date as two other friends plans on committing suicide. before his death Sasha suffered from severe depression and his friend once said "while the others filled themselves with poisonous and hallucinogenic drugs Sasha swallowed anti-depression pills and prayed they'd cure sadness". He was terribly beaten by his father and always wore jumpers to cover his bruises, although he could not hide those on his face (i did not include them in this picture as they did not suit the atmosphere). he also felt there was no one in the world who cared for him, mentioning it in his suicide letter;
"Normally in such letters people apologize to those who loved them for leaving them, but I don’t think there is anyone out there who loves me. I’d only like to say sorry to my father, who I was never quite good enough for and who because of I spent my whole life covering up bruises."
Eventually this leads to his suicide, where he jumps of a twenty story building down towards the crowd below, breaking his neck. one of his surviving friends who did not take part in the suicide pack (Hidan, a main character in my story) witnessed his death and chose to stay with his friend as he knew that way Sasha would feel he had someone who may have cared. Hidan also chose not to save Sasha as he believe the boy was lost and that this was the only was to truly save him 

 
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Comments: 16

Cartoonfan402 [2016-06-21 03:09:03 +0000 UTC]

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Jeez, talk about depression, looks like a zombie. Still it looks great

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Meerabelle In reply to Cartoonfan402 [2016-06-24 10:35:58 +0000 UTC]

haha thanks

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Ace1999 [2016-06-14 18:13:02 +0000 UTC]

With the ProjectComment group   

Such a strong story to quite the strong painting. The fact that you chose such a subject to draw/write about just shows what a strong artist you are, and I applaud you for that. 

I really love the way to did the lighting and used the effects of the brushes in this piece. it makes for a warm, yet aerie atmosphere, something suiting of your description of the scene. The details of his hair is on point, and has a great flow in it, something I personally love to see as I find much fun in drawing hair >v> The shades and various colors you used to create the shadows also adds on that great effect, making it clear what time of day it is and what's about to happen. All in all I really like this, keep it up!

Now to the critique!
First I want to mention the background. I see that you created quite the in-depth background here, with great shadows and such, but the lighting isn't as well. While it should never out-shine the main focus of the painting, lighting can create such a rich atmosphere that I sorta miss here. A little of that golden orange that can be seen on Sasha could also be great seeing back there in smaller portions. Keeping it at the light, the lense-flare effect (or whatever you went for) kinda out-shines and blocks the buildings like a too strong filter. You did such a great jjob at the shadows back there, so why hide it with that? Not to say the effect shouldn't be used, but you could perhaps tone it down a little <:

To end this I have a little tip about shading things in general;
Blend the outer lines with the colors in the middle <: I tend to use watercolor brushes to get that nice blending effect, touching upon the inner borders of the lineart/sketch, blending in inwards towards the rest of the character. I'm not too good at explaining things, but if you wana I could always start up a live stream and show you uwu 

That's all for now, I wish you good luck with your art and story! Keep it up <:

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Meerabelle In reply to Ace1999 [2016-06-18 09:25:59 +0000 UTC]

wow thank you so much for this amazing comment! i really appreciate the feedback and advice

i totally agree with all your points; at the time i painted this i was trying to avoid backgrounds entirely which resulted in blurring things out and trying to hide them. 

i've never really thought of that last tip, so i'll be sure to try it out next time i paint something digitally! 

thanks again so much, this is no doubt the best critique ive had on a piece  

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Ace1999 In reply to Meerabelle [2016-06-18 12:08:03 +0000 UTC]

No problem! I'm just happy to help <: Good luck!

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ThereallylargeFly [2016-05-30 20:34:18 +0000 UTC]

The excerpt in the beginning of the description was very powerful, something I think about quite often. The lighting and expression made me think that, at first glance, this was an angry or at least frustrated peace. But now after reading the description, I can see that it depicts a sad serenity.

I don't know if Sasha is supposed to look effeminate, but I thought the picture's character was a girl until I read the description. I'm fine with him being skinny and thin faced, but his hair and his eyes add to this misperception. Perhaps that is just me.

This picture definitely treats the subject you are exploring in the correct manner. However, the fact that one of Sasha's arms disappears behind his back (at an awkward angle) means distracts from what should be the focus (his face, and the shabbiness of his clothes).

The blurriness of the surroundings make it difficult to know where the character is, but I feel that is fine. The audience should be able to imagine a suitable location for this moment to take place in.

Your work was found through projectcomment.deviantart.com/ .

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Meerabelle In reply to ThereallylargeFly [2016-06-01 09:36:57 +0000 UTC]

thank you so much for the feed back and i'm glad you enjoyed the excerpt! that means a lot to me

as for Sasha being effeminate in appearance, i realize he came across a little too feminine. while he is meant to look quite gentle, i realize now when i look back that he does look instead very female my style is just quite feminine in general, so when a male character is feminine i tend to take it too far haha

and i totally agree with the hand, but this is quite an old picture and at the time i could get the hand/arm to sit right so my solution was simply to hide it (one i do regret now).

but again, thank you very much for the constructive criticism, its much appreciated

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ThereallylargeFly In reply to Meerabelle [2016-06-01 21:22:49 +0000 UTC]

It's good to know that I can help. 

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HawkeyeNextGen [2016-05-30 18:27:30 +0000 UTC]

Woah. Epic.

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Meerabelle In reply to HawkeyeNextGen [2016-05-31 10:09:20 +0000 UTC]

thank you

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Pai813 [2016-05-29 18:29:28 +0000 UTC]

This is sad and yet so good.
Great work!

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Meerabelle In reply to Pai813 [2016-05-30 12:31:57 +0000 UTC]

yes sadly it is he was a cool character to have
but thank you very much

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ak5hAyvs [2014-10-12 15:23:16 +0000 UTC]

I love the way you've described this.... it's quite something!

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Meerabelle In reply to ak5hAyvs [2014-10-13 03:05:46 +0000 UTC]

aww thank you so much

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Girlbleachblaze [2014-08-16 10:43:04 +0000 UTC]

beautiful work ^^

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Meerabelle In reply to Girlbleachblaze [2014-08-16 14:02:51 +0000 UTC]

aww thank you  

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