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Published: 2003-12-17 09:54:40 +0000 UTC; Views: 1362; Favourites: 20; Downloads: 418
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Pages upon pages,sitting vacant and unused.
Expressionless faces staring into nothingness.
Waiting, wanting, wishing for emotions,
they cannot be forged without tools.
Pencils and pens,
lie scattered on the desk.
Seemingly harmless, their power is concealed.
Waiting, wanting, wishing to create,
they are useless without a canvas.
Ideas and emotions,
scramble through a head.
An insanely jumbled frenzy, that could ponder all existence.
Waiting, wanting, wishing to be shared,
they are just ideas until expressed.
Blood and muscles,
cause a hand to move.
Nothing exceptional has yet come to pass.
Waiting, wanting, wishing to assist,
it's just a hand without materials.
A hand starts moving,
picking up a pencil, putting it to paper –
ideas and emotions have found their medium.
The pieces fit together.
Pencils aren't harmless, paper not emotionless,
thoughts are not jumbled nor is hand idle.
Together they flow,
moving in time.
Waiting, wanting, wishing no more.
Each has found its purpose within the whole.
And something is created, where nothing was before.
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The picture goes perfectly with this piece 
This was a great poem, I love to think of potential of things 
But finally, the ending - And something is created, where nothing was before. It is so true, and a great way to end.
But I wouldnt have stopped there. I would have continued with something about the futility of creation, the pieces all coming together to spread something good, and then being pushed aside or forgotten.
But weirdly, i prefer your ending 
bye
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this appeal to me. the fact you can write something so detailed and thought-provoking on quite a simple subject is very cool.
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wow! i really like it and the repitition. a 
though it seem like the section 'when a hand starts moving' doesn't seem to flow with the others. but it gives it more emphasise.
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That is absolutely awesome! I've done this idea before; I think we all have in our own way, because it is something we as creators experience time and again. But you have captured it just so wonderfully! Kudos, kudos... This is fantastic.
~ Jamberry ~
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very nice!! very discriptive and great use of words!!
edf
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OMFG this is so great! Very expressive and emotional. Very true--God, there's so much truth in this piece. I absolutely love it! Definitely a 
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A poem about writing poetry - neat.
I think the end line is maybe a bit too direct, but I'm not sure how or if I'd reword it - the rest of the poem pretty well makes up for it, methinks. Great work, great read overall.
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Ooooh. Aaaaah. I really love it, its awesome. I especially love the repeated alliteration in "Waiting, wanting, wishing". Very sweet.
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The consistancy in the clauses is fairly good, but simple. Watch out for those pesky conjunctions: i'm picky about having exact parallelism between corresponding lines (Example: Lines E and F in each clause should fit together like a puzzle. Line D should always show consistancy, on certain clauses it does not.) i'm not crazy about the last phrase -it undermines a writer's 'calling', in my opinion. But in any case, i love what you're trying to accomplish with this piece, structurally. i look forward to seeing any updates.
xo, amiee
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i feel that at least someone has to say about any piece of art that its not too good.
so here am i, i dont like your poem. why i bothered to say this? dunno..........coz someone had to.
its just not the kinda thing i would like. too direct maybe.
is my art better? well, no.
its just the kinda poem that stationary shop would buy from you.
sorry, had to say.
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If you don't like it would you like to give me some constructive critisism or tell me why it is that you don't like it perhaps?
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its kinda hard to give anything constractive coz you did the poem really good.
i just dont like the idea itself, to write a poem about writing a poem, about pens and paper and muscules moving the hand. its too direct for poetry, i think.
but hey, thats just me.
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It's sorta like a schizophrenic's instruction manual on what happens when a poem is written. Are you a scientologist?
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Such a simplistic subject- or is it? You've really personalized the whole thing. I'm really impressed!
Definitely a fav!
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"And something is created, where nothing was before"
I <3 this line. This is a very excellent poem.
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*hop* That's awesome!
"Ideas and emotions,
scramble through a head.
An insanely jumbled frenzy, that could ponder all existence.
Waiting, wanting, wishing to be shared,
they are just ideas until expressed."
That's usually the stage of the creative process that I get stuck at 
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wow, that was really good.. i was actually smiling in appreciation through out th whole poem, i generally don't do that, so it must a really good poem.. I like the idea, very original, and very well expressed.. sort of reminds me of the idea that nothing can exisit with there being nothing..a poet can not form, out of anything but nothing.. beautiful.. definatley a favorite..
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And something is created, where nothing was before.
a perfect ending. i love this, im experiencing a bit of a writers block here so yeah.. glad my stock could be used for something great like this!
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Oh what a wonderful expressive journey with words! I really connected with what you were saying-- a most excellent poem- congrats to both of you
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You've used a very simple idea and turned into one hell of a piece kiddo
Fantastic use of punctuation throughtout the piece, the grammar is great and IMHO it flows quite well. Great imagery created by the wording too.
I like the idea of repeating the Waiting, wanting, wishing.... took me a couple of reads to get to liking it though
Overall a fantastic piece
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Wow, I really like this
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nice pace
i like the three actives for the verses.
doesn't seem like an emotion poem, more like brainstorm. pretty neat. ^_^
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I like it. But I don't know what else to say. Most people have written a lot, yet I can only really put my best comments into poetry when I'm at a peak of writing poetry.
The only thing I don't like about the poem is the repeatition of
"Waiting, wanting, wishing" - but that's just me. I hate my poems cause of repeatition, but yeah. It works for a while in this, but it gets a little tired after a little while due to the length of it.
Other than that, I love it. Great piece of writing.
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Great job Erin. Now, if you will excuse me, I shall go delete all of my poetry from devArt, for you have truly made my attempts look hellish.
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at first i wis lookign at the photo readt to comment just on that , but a wonderful piece of writing to accompany, well done
both excellent
im not the biggest reader but it seemed to draw me in
well done
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I love that feeling of writing after a long period of stopping. It is about as close to exctacy as you can get.
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I love this, I can so relate to it as a writer
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first of all, i wanna correct one line of your poem:
"Nothing exceptional has yet come to pass." you say, but this very nice poem has come to me
hehe, i like the idea and you expresse it very nicely. well done
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this is great - an hommage to the creative process and it works for both literary, poetic and visual art - good work expressing what to most of us is a real tension ... ideas and reality
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perfect
this is brilliant
3 comments 3 favs
well worth it
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My dear, first of all it's a pleasure to work with someone as amazingly talented as yourself, as well as something I would like to do further
Now, the poem itself is one that I could feel right from the very start phase of it, because iit's so close to home. I know the motions and feelings you've mentioned, and this sticks them back in your head with some kind of dominating force. Excellent work right from the outset.
The words you've used and the similies are rich, and build excellent images not only in my head, but help to give a kind of interesting mood to this peice. They sway and twist backwards and forwards at just the right pace which works well in your favour.
As I said last night when I was talking to you about it, I love it. I would love to do something like this sometime soon, and all I have left to say is +fav. It hits where it's meant to
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