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MensjeDeZeemeermin In reply to HyperactiveParanoid [2017-05-16 20:35:39 +0000 UTC]
Thank you, very much... I think you'd also like this one...
Beneath the SurfaceBeneath the Surface
She steels herself for battle in the steel shelves of hell,
And thinks of meadows where she played, so many Springs ago.
She thinks of sand swept by the sea, and shining, pretty things,
And marches out into the dust, the heat, the noise, the smell.
Her fantasies and dreams of peace are bludgeoned by harsh words,
They'll have her do three things at once, and in no time at all.
Flourescent lights burn out the sun reflected forth from dew,
The howling of low-flying jets drowns out the song of birds.
She holds her eyes clasped shut and wears a flowing, gauzy gown,
And runs bare-footed through soft moss beside a cheerful stream,
And fights for her survival in this insubstantial dream,
That's shattered by the news that the computer system's down.
She floats, encased in silver scales, in blue seas all alone
Or flits on faerie wings and takes her ease within a rose.
Or stares with happy vanity, a horn above her nose,
And writhes at yet another grating voice upon the phone.
and my poems and one story about lamias might intrigue you...
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Sacron22 [2017-04-15 12:33:35 +0000 UTC]
The thoughts in this pone are human and simple and important.Β Nicely done.Β
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scarletwhite [2016-10-17 13:50:57 +0000 UTC]
I love this poem, it is so well written
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Kitsune64 [2016-10-11 17:12:19 +0000 UTC]
Lovely work. It creates a very serene and contemplative mood, with just a touch of the bittersweet. Nicely done!
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MensjeDeZeemeermin In reply to Kitsune64 [2016-10-12 05:18:40 +0000 UTC]
So glad that one of my centaurs could please you, yours have so pleased me.
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SempreSirena [2016-10-09 21:54:50 +0000 UTC]
Very nice story, reminds me of the good days during roleplay. Β Thank you for sharing it with the community!
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MensjeDeZeemeermin In reply to SempreSirena [2016-10-10 03:20:10 +0000 UTC]
I'm so very honored and grateful that you thought so highly of the poem.
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SempreSirena In reply to MensjeDeZeemeermin [2016-10-10 08:16:36 +0000 UTC]
it is quite beautiful, coaxing my mind into the past, reflecting upon the long days of centaur play. Β Good, honest and fun RP, reminding me of Dawn.
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HawthorneFae [2016-10-09 19:12:27 +0000 UTC]
You have a way of choosing just the right words I feel like~ And carrying an atmosphere through an entire work.
This is awesome, kudos~
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HawthorneFae In reply to MensjeDeZeemeermin [2016-10-13 20:16:35 +0000 UTC]
No problem~ It's not often I find poetry I really like, so you totally deserve it~
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uglygosling [2016-10-05 23:44:11 +0000 UTC]
Never more will IΒ be saddle sore
For truth be told now I am a 'taur
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mattaui [2016-10-05 22:12:28 +0000 UTC]
I really like this, nicely done.
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MensjeDeZeemeermin In reply to mattaui [2016-10-06 04:11:49 +0000 UTC]
I'm glad something of mine pleased you as your own work has delighted me.
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Olga17 [2016-10-05 19:04:50 +0000 UTC]
Great poetry!
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Agent505 [2016-10-05 13:25:23 +0000 UTC]
You can probably lose some of the extra commas, but very well done.
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