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Published: 2009-02-21 12:23:55 +0000 UTC; Views: 1232; Favourites: 25; Downloads: 14
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Mimosa Page 2. Since I lost the competition with not even a consolation prize, I guess its okay to upload my art.I'm really disappointed and feel really unconfident about my art now. Please tell me if the story was bad, or if the panneling was bad or if the art was bad.
I'm really at a lost to how I couldn't even get a consolation prize (which had ten ppl in it)
... but a ganbatte prize for best story and art
> (which is insulting me. It gives the feeling that "Oh no, the other contestants need prize too, so we'll create a category for best manga and art , not for the competition but among the rejects cos if she really was the best art and story she would have won haha")
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Comments: 37
I think the story is a bit un-original, im pretty sure i picked this manga up in a bookstore but with a different title. Don't feel discouraged, but the dialogue is cliche. Your art however is quite unique and you have amazing talent and patience. I hope in the future you don't feel that others are looking down at you, instead see other art works as an inspiration instead of losing confidence. 
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Thank you very much! Haha. Its been a long time since I'd seen a good critique! I believe you're right. I can summarise my prologue into romeo&juliet> little mermaid> alice in wonderland
altho I honestly didn't really notice it (since the deadline was a few days away haha) and I found out I'm really bad at adding dialogue since I dun plan ahead
Thanks so much for the encouragement! I'm planning to continue it and I'm quite confident it won't be cliche( I'm leaving the prologue as it is tho for the benefit of those who'd read). Thanks again for your time
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Oh no problem, I really dont like to give critiques unless the artist get's my attention. Well I went to your comic's link and for 10 pages, you got me wanting to see more heh. Nice work ;3
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Sooo pretty and amazing! I wish I could draw as well as you!
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Gahhh nonsense! Everyone can draw like me, I'm just the many normal artists out there!
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Gahhhhh, details everyone can do, seriously, it depends whether you can force yourself to keep on going *urzzz* haha. realistic is all due to fine lines!
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It still is very good, no matter what you say
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Haha, I guess I'll have to accept what you say or this comment will go on forever, even if I think I'm not good enough, no matter what you say XD
But thank you very very much, at least I'm more confident now!
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XD Well I have one last thing to say, if you were so 'average' then why do you have over 11000 views and 3 pages of deviant watchers? XD
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Haha. Can I blame God, and ? I don't think I have the skills to gain all that. Its only by God's grace that I met these two people who helped me a lot!
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*suspicious look* it must be more than that... And no, you can't blame God.
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Haha. Seriously. I have really great friends who tends to promote me at times! XD
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Doesn't matter. Still doesn't change your talent
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Yeah is a bit short but has alot of potential
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That's true. Gruuu can't draw manga tho. Cos of studies
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yeah i can understand that
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i havent goten a chance to read it yet (going to) but from what i see here it was done beautifully and i like how you did the hands on the last pannel
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Haha thank you so much really tall midget!
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Thank you so much! I honestly think its too short and lacks originality! (TTATT) hopefully my future chapter 1 can save it!
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sigh the juges nvr stopped to see the intricate backbreaking clthing design. 
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lawl. I shuold. Nooo we should! Lets do this.. after stpm eheheheh.
*dies*
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I would say - it's too short...
And, you know, after reading it, you just want to know, WHO IS THAT GUY xD and what will happen next...
But story is pretty
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You're right, haha,the result of last mintue work.
But thanks so much *bows*
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Awww, you're welcome~! ^_^
Umm, if I may ask - would you continue this story...?
I would really love to see some sequel...
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I am planning to altho not around this year since I'm busy with studies but please look forward to a continuation. I am as well! haha
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I'm looking forward!
Really, it will be nice to see continuation
Well, I'll wait patiently
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Yeah, I told you I liked the story, and there's nothing wrong with your style (I'm ready to kick some ass if someone has complaints about it).
But don't worry about it. Keep working to improove (for your own sake, not the contests'
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Haha. I'm gonna workd hard (after the monthly exams) thanks sis!
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More exams? I hate school life =_= (sorry for you T_T ) Well, good luck on your exams ^^
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i thought the story was really good but maybe it was kinda short
dont lose confidence just keep practicing
you win some you lose some
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Thanks so much! I'm really glad you took the time to read it and to give your feedback! Thanks again!
You're right it is too short, but at least I can learn from my mistakes. Thanks again!
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