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Description The relationship between the two had always been a strange one.  Each time in the past their predecessors would face in the effort to prove who was the better and leave only one standing.  This was different though or perhaps they were different from their forebears.
It is commonly held that darkness is the opposite of light, but that is wrong.  Darkness is merely the absence of light.  After all, we don’t measure the light in a room by how dark it is.  So then as Link considered the almost mirrored image of himself standing before him he wondered what then could this man be?  If not his opposite then, what?
“What’s the matter “hero”?  Afraid to get your hands dirty?”  The man asked as he drew the shadowy sword from his back, taking shield into hand.  “That’s the problem with your type.  You just can’t handle having to put your vaunted morals on hold.”  He laughed without humor but much contempt.
Link opted to remain quiet despite how much his foe had been grating on his nerves.  Someone had once told him when he was young that people reveal more of themselves when you keep your mouth shut.  Link had taken the passing observation seriously and thus spoke rarely to the point that outsiders thought him a mute.  So in reply he simply drew his own sword, grasping firmly the old blade of evil’s bane and slipped his arm into the straps of the shield that bore the symbol of his heritage.  He struck a ready stance; shield held in front of him, sword by his side and waited for this other to make the first move.
The man smirked.  “That’s more like it.  Finally a hero who knows the means to his methods.”  He laughed and made a quick swipe at the air with his sword, taking a few steps closer to Link, getting almost within range of each other.  “You see, I’ve been thinking lately.”  He suddenly made a lunge with his sword.  Link batted it aside with his shield and slashed the Master sword at the man’s leg but he had already danced out of reach.  He laughed.
“I’ve been thinking that you and all the other green heroes before you are just tools, mere pawns in this game,” he paused for a moment, seeming to grimace.  “And so am I.”  He smirked again and shrugged, hefting the sword.  “But here we are despite your supposed free will and my utter lack of faith in my ‘master’s’ cause, both of us doomed to repeat this meaningless dance that has come about countless times before.”  With a smile on his face and self-mocking sadness in his eyes he stepped forward to do battle and Link was suddenly unsure of himself deep within the crypts of champions…

It was a bright sunny day as most days were out on this particular farm in the open fields of Hyrule.  She straightened and peered up at the sky, wiping the sweat off her forehead.  She hummed a tune quietly to herself and rebound her long red hair with a blue handkerchief that matched her eyes.  She bent and grabbed the pail of freshly squeezed milk, patted the cow on the side and set off for the shed.  After pouring the milk in a cold container she stepped outside and heard a familiar whinny and so with a smile she walked over to the horse stables and looked into the friendly eyes of her big, red friend.
“Hello Epona.  How are you feeling today,” she asked as she gently rubbed the horse’s nose and ran her other hand through its white mane.  The horse whickered and shook her great head and pawed the ground.  The girl laughed.  “Yes, I know you miss him.  I do too, girl.”  She glanced over her shoulder in the direction that Link had walked off to with promises of his return.  She shook her head wondering in what state he would come back in.  She shrugged such thoughts away.  It wouldn’t do to worry about him.  After all, if he couldn’t take care of himself it wasn’t likely that anyone else could.  A hero of the goddesses was a hard act to follow. She smiled a sad smile and caressed the horse’s head.  “I miss him too.”

Link dodged back, barely avoiding the slash at this face, but his foot caught a lip of stone and he lost his balance.  He fell back and turned into a roll, narrowly avoiding another slice to his back and just brought his shield up as a stroke to his head came down.  He made a thrust at his foe’s belly but it was swept aside with the man’s shield and Link rolled to the side to get out of reach of that impossibly fast sword, slamming his shoulder into the stone coffin of a long forgotten king in the process.  He grimaced and heard the man laughing.
“You know, for a hero you are truly pathetic.  Oh if only the others who had wielded that blade could see how it’s being used now.”  He laughed again and watched Link slowly rise to his feet and resume his stance.  He smirked when he recognized the sarcophagus Link was standing next to.  “Do you know whose coffin that is,” he asked, pointing his sword in its direction.   When the answer was made plain by the puzzled expression that came in reply he went on.  “That is the resting place of the first hero I came upon.”  He laughed at the pained, almost worried expression that Link made.  “Don’t worry, I didn’t get the chance to kill him.  No, no.  He met his end at someone else’s hands,” he finished, speaking softly at the end.  He shook his head and smirked again.  “But speaking of history.”  He held his sword out.  “Let’s finish this,” he said and charged.
Link blocked the slashed to his side with his shield and then barely managed to get his sword in the way of a cut to his thigh, sparks flying as metal struck metal.  He stepped back, felt his heel hit stone and brought his sword up quickly in an attempt to slice at the man’s chin.  The attack was almost lazily batted away and Link realized that he was either backing up into a wall or into another coffin.  He sidestepped and cut at the man’s shoulder, the blade striking into the other’s shield that seemed to be everywhere at once.  Damn it, he needed to gain an edge somehow.  This man was very fast and seemed very strong to so easily shrug off his most potent attacks.  He grimaced.  He had fought others of skill before but even then he was still able to get a sword in edgewise but here, he couldn’t lay a blade on the guy.  Everything he did was countered with such ease and with little apparent effort on his foe’s part.  Perhaps he was telling the truth.  Perhaps he had fought his predecessors.  Link wondered if his foe had ever killed any of them and for the first time felt a sense of dread as the man laughed, tossing his shield aside.  He adjusted his gauntlets and twirled his dark sword.
“I have to say that you are the worst I’ve fought.  Your moves are so slow and easy to read.  At least the others knew how to change things up a bit but you, you aren’t ready for this fight.”  The man shrugged and pointed his shadowed sword at Link his expression losing all of its humor and gaining a more sinister edge.  “You are going to fall to my blade and as my sword drinks your blood I will finally break this horrible cycle.” He laughed pitilessly and let the point of his sword rest on the ground.  “As for me, if I were you I’d blame those who brought you into this.”  He brought his sword up into both hands, his expression becoming blank.  “They clearly guided you into dire straits,” he said hollowly and stepped towards Link.
Tired and sore Link lifted his shield and felt his body shudder.  In all of his fights he knew that death waited at every misstep.  But this was the first time that he felt that death wasn’t waiting anymore and as he looked into those dark, callous eyes advancing relentlessly towards him he was besot with woe.

The girl finished rubbing down Epona and was leading her back to the stables when a chill crept up her spine.  She shuddered and looked behind her in the direction that Link had taken to the ancient crypts.  She wondered if this feeling of dread was an omen sent by the goddesses.  She shook her head and forced herself to smile.  No, she would never believe that Link could ever fail at any task that was laid before him.  Even if that task were to face down the goddesses themselves.  So rather than worry she stabled Epona, looked at the setting sun and began to sing, softly at first the song her mother had taught her.  She sang with her heart and it desperately wanted her hero to come home safely to her.

Strike after strike after strike came down on him like lightning and each time he only just blocked or dodged them, each blow resounding like a peal of thunder.  Link was on the defensive and he didn’t know how much longer he would last.  For several minutes this onslaught had been going on but to Link it felt like hours, days, a whole lifetime was keeping pace with the beating he was taking.  His eyes went wide as he jerked back and avoided a slash at his face, the tip of the sword a mere inch away from his nose.  Link tripped and lost his balance his arms going wide, but the darkly dressed man laughed and suddenly the sword was thrusting towards his heart.  Link rolled and felt the blade slice his sword arm.  Wincing he quickly swirled into a standing position and saw that this whirlwind of death was trying to pull his sword out of the stone floor.  Quickly he stepped forward performed an overhand cut towards his enemy’s head, the man’s eyes going wide and Link finally felt victory within his grasp.  The man smirked.  A blur of motion the man seemed to flow out of the way of Link’s sword, grasp his wrist and with a quick twist of his body, both disarmed and threw Link to the ground, knocking the wind from his lungs.
“Well, well.  It seems that even a hero knows how to take advantage of a foe in distress.  A commendable trait.” He laughed tossed the Master sword from hand to hand seeming to admire it as he did so as Link gasped from breath.  “So this is the sword of evil’s bane, eh?”  He pointed it at Link and looked down its length, taking in the edge and balance.  “I’ll give it this, it certainly is well balanced seems to have a very fine edge.  I daresay I could shave with it,” he said as he ran his fingers lightly over the edge of the blade with a smirk.  He went through a few motions with the sword and watched as Link slowly picked himself up into a kneeling position.  The man laughed and rested the point of the sword on the ground and leaned on the pommel. “Now wouldn’t it be an amazing twist of irony if the hero blessed by the goddesses was slain by the Master sword itself?”  He smiled evilly.  “Come then, lets test its edge on chosen flesh.”  And with that he straightened and flipped the sword up, taking the grip in two hands.
Link had up to that point been getting his breath back and thinking furiously of a way to get on top of the situation.  He couldn’t help but grimace.  He’d been having a hard time with a sword in hand much less now that he was disarmed.  He glanced briefly at his foe’s sword imbedded in the rock but felt that it was too far away for him to get to it before he was cut down.  Then, watching the man take his sword in a two handed grip Link felt he was out of time.  He felt it true in every term of the phrase.  The sword of heroes came slashing down at Link and he put his shield up to block it.  The Master sword cut into the edge of the shield and Link felt his arm jolt from the impact and impossibly the sword kept going, pushing the shield down, tip of the blade slicing into his face, cutting him from forehead to cheek at an angle.  Link fell back as the sword withdrew and the man laughed while Link put a hand to the cut.  He briefly looked at the blood in his hand.  He then looked at the dread figure before him as his blood seeped down his face into his eye.
“My this is an amazing sword.” He smiled widely and admired the way the hero’s blood looked on the shiny surface of the blade.  He then looked at Link and his eyes narrowed. “I can see that now you know you are indeed my inferior and that your life is now held in my uncaring hands.”  He idly tapped the flat of the sword into his other hand seeming to consider the fallen hero’s fate as Link wiped the rapidly flowing blood from his eyes and face.  He smirked.  Wounds to the face always bled profusely.  He thought the look rather suited the ‘hero’.
“And I imagine you know that I have every right and in fact am ordered to kill you.”  He smiled sadly.  “Good bye hero.”  Then with that he took the sword back into a two handed grip, brought it up over his head.  Bringing it down in an incredibly fast arc he laughed as Link winced, realizing that he would never get the shield up in time to fully block it.
The sound of metal cutting into metal and the unmistakable sound of flesh striking stone resounded through out the ancient burial place of past heroes and kings.  Slowly, so very slowly the echo of dark laughter faded away into the shadows…
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Comments: 37

Aryandiani-Maecy [2016-01-07 02:33:56 +0000 UTC]

 Awesome! My clap emoji agrees!
       <----- Agreeing

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MichaelScanlon In reply to Aryandiani-Maecy [2016-01-08 22:54:17 +0000 UTC]

Thank you!

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Aryandiani-Maecy In reply to MichaelScanlon [2016-01-08 23:06:14 +0000 UTC]

No prob. I like the way it was portrayed!

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AkuDemyfan [2014-05-15 17:29:31 +0000 UTC]

That was amazing and bit unexpected. Hadn't thought that Master Sword could be held by anyone who'd want to harm Link but...... Sadly, Dark being his Shadow and dark side...... It kinda works that he too can use the Master Sword.

*sniff* R.I.P. Link

At least Dark won for once.

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ValkyrieKnights [2014-03-08 22:42:39 +0000 UTC]

Very well done. Is there a sequel of sorts? So Dark Link wins...I think I may cry. I really a continuation to this. Maybe the  the song the song the "mysterious" girl sings will help him, you know maybe save him. Right? Right? I really hope I'm right.

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Jormel [2011-02-05 09:24:54 +0000 UTC]

It's very well written, and I enjoyed it. This is completely different from any fic I've read concerning Dark Link and Link. The ambiguous ending is practically unheard of today. Ignoring the refs to Malon, this could take place during literally any time period in which the Hero arises, making this never ending battle and the more real. Link being portrayed as just getting used to his power was believable, and Dark just wanting to be free made him a sympathetic anti-hero. You could understand why they were fighting, which is really an essential part to any story. To finish things off, I really love your writing style. I would be willing to read more of your stuff, especially if you ever write more along these lines. Thanks for the refreshingly good read. ^_^

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Ailysha [2010-07-12 00:11:28 +0000 UTC]

I absolutely LOVE this! But... I hope Link not really dies *Get´s nightmares from this thinking^^* I found it super how you discribet everything, just the thing with Malon I didn´t understood, I think... But how I just said, well done!

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NightmaresCalling [2010-03-31 19:58:13 +0000 UTC]

I love it man! Keep up the work

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thecloakedqueen [2009-12-27 04:03:13 +0000 UTC]

This is a great fic. Since we all know that the Hero can't win ALL the time, I find this to be a breather from the typical ending.

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Sapphire-Rogue [2009-11-23 19:11:31 +0000 UTC]

So, first off, I would like to begin with saying that this was a wonderful concept. You honestly made Link all the more human in this than he usually is demonstrated as being. Generally in most fics, he almost always triumphs without even the slightest difficulty. Conveying Link with a distinct lack of experience by comparison to his predecessors makes perfect sense (all things considered, I mean - this was written based in the Ocarina of Time era, correct? I apologize if I am incorrect - I merely am assuming based on the fact Malon was referenced). Dark had just the right measure of sadism, and I like the fact that the Master Sword did not ‘burn’ his hand when he touched it. I have read fics that had that happen. Dark is not necessarily ‘evil’. He has been made by what his Masters have made him do. He only seeks to break free of the cycle he is in. He’s really in an awful situation, and the little lapses of bitter irony and almost self-loathing were good.

The title was also really good, I have to say. The title itself seems to lend itself to two possibilities for the end of your fic, seeing as you were rather ambiguous about it. Either A), Dark killed Link, thus setting himself free and effectively ‘breaking the chain of events’ that he was tied to via constantly having to try and kill the hero, only to fail. Or B), Dark did not kill Link, but rather left, still managing to ‘break the chain of events’ by neither killing Link nor dying himself. I think that this fic has the real potential for continuing, if you so wish to do so.

The fic is nicely written. However, there were a few grammatical and punctuation errors, as well as some of the paragraphs needing to be split (to only reflect one main idea). Such as (keep in mind you do not have to take this seriously - this is merely a suggestion) :

“Link had, up to that point, been getting his breath back and thinking furiously of a way to get on top of the situation.  He couldn’t help but grimace.  He’d been having a hard time with a sword in hand much less now that he was disarmed.  He glanced briefly at his foe’s sword imbedded in the rock, but felt that it was too far away for him to get to it before he was cut down.  Then, watching the man take his sword in a two handed grip, Link felt he was out of time.  He felt it true in every term of the phrase.  

The sword of heroes came slashing down at Link and he put his shield up to block it.  The Master sword cut into the edge of the shield and Link felt his arm jolt from the impact. Impossibly, the sword kept going, pushing the shield down, tip of the blade slicing into his face, cutting him from forehead to cheek at an angle.  Link fell back as the sword withdrew and the man laughed while Link put a hand to the cut.  He briefly looked at the blood in his hand.  He then looked at the dread figure before him as his blood seeped down his face into his eye.”

You have a very good writing style, and it is very appealing to read. The only thing I can say is to perhaps find someone who is willing to beta read your work so as to fix the little errors. All and all, I will say that I liked this very much, and I think I will be keeping an eye out for more of your works. Wonderful job with this.

~Sapphire-Rogue

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MichaelScanlon In reply to Sapphire-Rogue [2009-11-23 22:15:06 +0000 UTC]

Firstly, thank you for such a detailed and flattering reply to my fic. I appreciate the criticism and your advice.

Now then, as to your suggestions, I do completely agree with them. However, I have since decided (even after having re-read through it several times) to leave it as it is. That way I can look back on this piece, look at its mistakes so that I know in future works how glaring they are and how to avoid them. But again, thank you for words on it.

As to the story itself... I didn't really put it in the OoT-verse (although it heavily influenced me, obviously) and I actually had intended on writing further into the story. However, as I reread it again and again I realized that I rather liked the 'well, what now?' ending and decided to keep it that way. At least for now. Your comment has gotten me wanting to write more along this line, even though there are other works that I REALLY should be getting to.

As to the title itself... well, it actually took me quite sometime, even after I posted it here to come up with it. I came up with it with Link's name in mind and I thought I was being fairly ironic with it myself. Your conclusions about it are interesting as well, as I had considered those such thoughts when trying to come up with a title. As to to the end... I'll let you decide on how you'd rather it end. That's one of the reasons I left it open in that manner; I wanted the reader to give the ending to it that they wanted. That and to frustrate my cousin.

Anycase, I'm glad you enjoyed it and I'll be taking a swing around your gallery before too long. Thanks again.

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Sapphire-Rogue In reply to MichaelScanlon [2009-11-23 23:58:58 +0000 UTC]

I can see the logic behind merely keeping it as is. That is nice, in a way, to be able to look at works from the past to improve upon what is later written. That is really very mature of you, actually. For me, I would never be able to. If I look back upon a work that I feel have even the slightest error, I will ultimately delete it (hence why so many of my works are no longer in existence). Which really does me no good, all things considered. I then no longer have the ability to look upon what I have done versus what I am doing now so as to avoid repeating errors. I applaud you on that, most definitely.

Ambiguous endings certainly lend themselves well to works, I must say. Especially this one. Even if you decided not to continue on with it, it is a nice stand alone piece that can be read and appreciated in its raw form. *chuckles* Yes, well, that does seem to be the way when the Muse descends, is it not? Interests typically pertain to that which we should not be doing rather than what we should be doing (either dictated so by ourselves or others).

The title itself is quite ironic, I must agree - and I think that it honestly was the perfect name for this work, I dare say. My interpretation of the ending can really go either way. I have no strict preference. There are some that are steadfastly against the idea of the hero dying and darkness triumphing, or something along those lines. I have no such qualms about the thought of Link, as inexperienced as he was portrayed, failing in beating his shadow. Conversely, I can accept Dark as leaving without killing just as easily because I do not think he is necessarily ‘evil’. I really just take it either way - or any other interpretation of what happened, come to think of it. Ha, so the ending was intended to appeal to the masses, yet merely aggravate your cousin?

Er, really, I wish to spare you the mental anguish. None of my works are especially good, let us say (travesty, really, is the only way to describe them all). I do appreciate that you would be willing to, but honestly - it really would not be worth your time, I assure you.

And you are most welcome.

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MichaelScanlon In reply to Sapphire-Rogue [2009-11-24 00:46:14 +0000 UTC]

I have to say a couple things in regards to your last comment. Humility is a useful trait, one that, in the right circumstances, could help you through life. However, I really don't see any reason for you to give me a... low opinion of your talents before I even have the chance to judge them for myself.

Certainly, it can help take a bit of sting away by putting your writings down before anyone else can do so, but... is it really worth it? I mean, taking the fire from someone else can be a useful tactic, but only if you plan on using it to make yourself look good by shining its light on those traits you DO like. So sure, you can be humble and portray humility, just don't humiliate yourself, ya know?

Anycase, one of the reasons I keep a lot of my old stuff is just so that I can learn from it. Which is part of the reason I keep reading crappy books all the way to the end. I use it as a sort of 'do-not-ever-write-like-this' sort of guideline. I stress the same thing with my cousin; even if you're not satisfied with how a drawing came out, do not throw it away. Keep it so that you can look to avoid those future mistakes. Plus, it's nice to look back on where you started so that you can further bolster your knowledge of just have far you've come. I can't help but mentally face palm myself every time I think of all the notes, sketches and other unfinished works that I've either lost or gotten rid of along the way. So please, don't make the same mistake.

Now then, as to the fic itself. What had inspired me to write it was that I was very tired of how the Dark character was portrayed in pretty much every fan comic of fan-fic. To be truthful, I was tired of yaoi. But brotherly love aside, I also had qualms that Dark Link was given a personality at all, but then to read some of the other crap people put out...

I wanted to accomplish four things with this fic; to give Dark a decent personality, that while a bit morbid would not fall into the emo side, to give Dark an honest reason to want to serve an uncaring master and to pursue a man he was both mirrored to and created to kill. The last two goals were to give Dark some sort of history that could connect even a tiny bit to the other LoZ's and to have the tar beaten out of Link, but in believable fashion.

So, that's how the Muse hit me. It's laughable how easy it is to work with a universe with its own canon than to create your own.

I wrote the ending the way I did because I wasn't sure whether or not I was gonna get the creative drive to write more on it and if I did, I wanted to have readers left on the edge of their seats, ready for more. I've learned that from some of my favorite authors... The fact that the ending made my cousin go "Aw man, come on! How ya gonna leave it like that?!" was an added bonus.

Mental anguish aside, I still plan on reading your stuff and look forward to writing unusually long for DA comments to you again.

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Sapphire-Rogue In reply to MichaelScanlon [2009-11-24 07:20:14 +0000 UTC]

You are quite right, I must say - I should not have offered by own hyper critical view of my works before you, yourself, had a chance to look at them. I am quite sorry. I do understand what it is that you are saying. I suppose it is just sort of a habit of mine to not give my works the credit they may or may not deserve and to automatically try to avoid obtaining another’s opinion on them because I feel it will reflect what I already know to be true (or think to be true, at least). It really is a convoluted little cycle.

What we have done before does serve as a useful tool in learning. I try to avoid crappy books, usually, though. And even if I have read a travesty, I don’t usually read it again even if it would serve as a guideline for what never to write like. Usually I can recall the style of the writer enough so that I remember, ‘Oh, well, let’s not do that, then’. Typically I reread books that I like so that I’m reminded of what can appeal to people. Of what appealed to me, really. Then I wonder why that is - and if others liked the book for that very same reason. So, though I’m never necessarily looking back upon my mistakes, I tend to look to what I wish I could be, as far as a writer goes.

I do agree that looking back on the past (I do retain some of my works and went back and reread them about a few months ago - oh what entertainment that was) is good. I suppose I should do that more often... And avoid deleting what I’ve done, of course. There are many stories I lost that I wish I could look at again because I had deleted them in a moment of misjudgment. I’ll try to avoid making that error so much in the future.

Ah, yes - the whole yaoi aspect of Dark Link... Now, let me begin by saying that yaoi in and of itself does not bother me all that much. Would I ever write/draw something for it? No. I’m not comfortable with conveying relationships in general. They always feel awkward for me when I write them. Even more so because I don’t endorse the idea of Dark Link and Link himself together. I will accept it if an artist/writer does something with it - but it’s not something that I, personally, would do. It just seems off to me. Like it honestly does not make an iota of sense for them to have a relationship like that unless there is severely tweaked circumstances that brought them together.

As for personality, I must agree. Dark was generally given the same personality every time I read something involving him.

You most certainly did accomplish all four of those things. His personality suited him well, and made perfect sense. His reason behind his actions were justifiable. Both his history and the fact that you created a believable scenario in which Dark Link could beat Link were pulled off flawlessly as well.

Isn’t it? I find it so much easier to use characters not created by me than ones I’ve created. Fanfiction is wonderful in that aspect.

Hm... A perfectly logical reason, I dare say. You did happen to leave your readers on the edge of their seats - me being one of them. Your conveying of how dire the situation was for Link was spot on. *chuckles* Bonuses like that are always nice, no?

Very well. And I, in turn, look forward to replying to said unusually long comments.

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artist-00 [2009-09-15 23:53:06 +0000 UTC]

So the Hero finally dies and by his own shadow thats really scary being killed by youre own very well being *shutters*

wow this was great though even if link dies

does he or is there another chapter

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MichaelScanlon In reply to artist-00 [2009-09-17 03:12:50 +0000 UTC]

That's a really good question. I've actually been thinking about whether or not I was going to continue this fic. I don't know, we'll see, right?

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artist-00 In reply to MichaelScanlon [2009-09-17 04:12:38 +0000 UTC]

hm think about it

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CrimsonNightshade [2009-08-10 01:16:07 +0000 UTC]

Absolutely a fantastic story. You made Link seem far more human than in most stories I read about him. It's so rare to come upon a wonderfully written and well thought out fanfiction like this!

Really a great job, and an instant fav~ |D

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MichaelScanlon In reply to CrimsonNightshade [2009-08-10 23:32:50 +0000 UTC]

Wow, thank you. Hopefully future works don't disappoint as well!

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CrimsonNightshade In reply to MichaelScanlon [2009-08-10 23:34:29 +0000 UTC]

You're very welcome! |D I'm sure they won't!!

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Feudalalchemist [2009-08-05 16:58:19 +0000 UTC]

I love how you gave explanations to Link's character and the fight scene (in my opinion) was impressive.

Something I've noticed abou this fic that differs from LoZ Mangas (hellz yeah I read those) is how you make Link struggle in battle rather than being all badass from the beginning and easily defeating his opponent. You even say that he is less experienced than the Heroes before him.

Before I go on rambling, I just want to say: awesome story. Love your writing. Keep up the good work.

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MichaelScanlon In reply to Feudalalchemist [2009-08-05 21:44:46 +0000 UTC]

First of all, Awesome freakin' comment! Thanks alot and lettin' me know exactly what you thought of it. And don't mind me, if ever you come across somethin' o' mine by all means, ramble. I only hope I do as well on future projects. Thanks again!

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Feudalalchemist In reply to MichaelScanlon [2009-08-07 04:02:33 +0000 UTC]

You're welcome! lol

I'm sure if you keep up that same style in your writing, you'll have no troubles.

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Jadin-Sedai [2009-08-03 18:48:55 +0000 UTC]

Wow... I love your writing style

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Rouxbea [2009-08-03 02:47:21 +0000 UTC]

wow, that was amazing. I love your writing style and such detail you wrote in. Man, I just loved it =]

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sc-lcremeans [2009-08-03 00:24:34 +0000 UTC]

So, I did enjoy it. even though i'm not a "Zelda" fan or "Link" fan. *clear throat*. I find that in some areas it didn't sound like you and others it did. I am impressed though that you have gone outside of your "realm" as it were about writing styles and themes. Also I am sorry but you did do this to yourself you are going to get tons of fan girls saying "like omg...i can't believe you'd kill of link he would so like not die in that situation omg!?" *BANG* , but still good job you should post little fan fictions of your characters that way I could care more...sorry. maybe. LOVE YOU!

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MichaelScanlon In reply to sc-lcremeans [2009-08-03 00:27:03 +0000 UTC]

I uh... love you too? Well, I guess that's the risk I run.

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sc-lcremeans In reply to MichaelScanlon [2009-10-14 22:26:12 +0000 UTC]

i love you oooooodlles of those nooodles

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Spades-Kings [2009-08-02 21:57:29 +0000 UTC]

Pretty neat. The only thing I have qualms with is purely punctuation. Paragraph spacing and such.

Dark Link really does like his toys, doesn't he? X} Manipulative shadow.

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MichaelScanlon In reply to Spades-Kings [2009-08-02 23:40:58 +0000 UTC]

Yeah, I was having troubles getting deviantart to do the things I wanted it to do and I didn't want to go through all the trouble of putting in all that code. But thanks!

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Spades-Kings In reply to MichaelScanlon [2009-08-02 23:43:34 +0000 UTC]

Yeah,

Literature submissions can be a real pain.

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Seillinia [2009-08-02 16:32:32 +0000 UTC]

that....was.... INCREDIBLE! it was so awesome! great job! ^^

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MichaelScanlon In reply to Seillinia [2009-08-02 20:19:29 +0000 UTC]

Thank you I appreciate the encouragement. Anything you liked about it in particular?

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Seillinia In reply to MichaelScanlon [2009-08-03 02:30:36 +0000 UTC]

i enjoyed the eye for detail and especially how you explained link not speaking much. ^^

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StateKunoichi [2009-08-02 06:43:43 +0000 UTC]

Man, that was so cool. One of the best fics I've ever read (but so sad that Link dies....)

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MichaelScanlon In reply to StateKunoichi [2009-08-02 20:18:57 +0000 UTC]

Thank you but... who said he dies?

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StateKunoichi In reply to MichaelScanlon [2009-08-03 06:16:51 +0000 UTC]

Ah! So true. This keeps my hopes up

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