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midnightfaery — Beauty and the Beast Chapter 9
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Published: 2019-06-21 06:17:50 +0000 UTC; Views: 1381; Favourites: 23; Downloads: 0
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YEESSSS, I will not be reading this yet because I'll have to go reread the story! Thank you for coming back to finish this
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There are few things that have been as surprising as seeing this pop up in my dash. I think I'd assumed that we might not have seen the ending for these two, and I very nearly re-read the entire series before this part, but was too eager and just re-read part eight, and I'm so glad to have finally read this. Your writing style is just so fun to read. The characters are wonderfully relatable and just fun to read. A little sad that we won't get to read more of these two, but I like their ending!
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Fantastic to see the conclusion! Thank you for sharing with us.
I don't have the brainpower for any real constructive help, but I do have one grammar point—in "She had been so busy with the children, so busy planning lessons and keeping the young ladies from quarreling that she hadn’t been given very much time to think about all that had happened between she and Garrett." It should be "between her and Garrett," as the preposition makes Beth an object (her) and not a subject (she).
Keep writing!
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Thank you for this! I’m glad you enjoyed this chapter, and I appreciate you taking the time to give me this feedback! I really struggle sometimes with “showing vs telling,” and having your input helps me to see where I can improve on this. 
I am slowly but surely finding my way back into writing, and am excited to post more!😃
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I found this story during its hiatus, and I am so happy to see you've returned with it! I know what it's like when life keeps you away from your writing, and how great it is to be able to start again!
First, let me say I've loved this concept. It drew me in right from the beginning. It was very creative and an interesting take on a classic tale, yet unique enough to stand out. And the characters--oh man. There was something captivating about Garrett from the beginning, and I especially liked that he is still a bit socially inept even at the end (10 years of socially isolation will do that to you). And Beth was so pure without being unbelievable. I really liked the twist you had at the climax, where she was the one to be injured. I thought that was a really nice trope subversion and actually made a lot more sense. I loved the way it ended, too. I liked that he set out to find her, because I think that's in keeping with him wanting to show his love.
As far as constructive criticism, I'd just say don't be afraid to add more to the internal dialogue and descriptions. I struggle with those myself. I felt there were just a few places where it felt stilted--not because the word choice was poor but because I thought there could have been *more* to it. For example, " She was tempted to tell him that he had never had her affections, but that would have been a lie that he would have seen right through. Even now she found her defenses against him cracking.
His sheer arrogance, his absolute nerve! Those were the only things keeping the walls around her firmly in place."
Talk a little about her emotions here. "Her lips pressed together in a harsh line. She was tempted to tell him that... How dare he think his pretty words would be enough to mend the damage he'd caused, even if he did seem to know exactly what to say. Even now she found her defenses against him..."
Does that make sense? Your writing is great! Just expand on it! Welcome back, and I hope you continue to write in the future!
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I’m glad you found this story and got to be here for the ending! I definitely need to work on my internal dialogue with my characters, I tend to rush stories to make sure I get everything out, I think I worry that I’ll lose my flow, I just need to get better about trusting that I know where I want the story to go and that I can take my time, let the characters tell the story...thank you for reading😌
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OMG! Thank you so much. It's wonderful to have you back! I'm so happy for you.
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You’re welcome! I hope you liked it😌🙏
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You're back; yay! You've just made my weekend, haha
Congrats on finally finishing the story. I know how hard it is to let your own creations end, but you did a wonderful job the whole way through. Thank you for giving us the ending we all needed and deserved
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Welcome back!! Glad to hear that you're writing again!
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Thank you, it’s good to be back & writing again💜
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Yay! I'm glad that you've finished this! I'll have to re-read through it but I can't wait to read more of your stories.
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There are more stories to come!😀
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