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Published: 2013-03-23 00:19:41 +0000 UTC; Views: 15254; Favourites: 764; Downloads: 77
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Well, you're not anorexic. So you must be fat.A fat, ugly person.
Well, you fit in with the crowd. You must be a fake.
A fake wannabe.
Well, you're happy. What are you hiding?
You've got to be hiding something.
Well, you're sad. You must be emo.
An emo attention seeker.
Well, you're popular. So you must be a jerk.
Why would anyone like you in the first place?
Well, you're quiet. You must be a nobody.
Nobody at all.
Well, you're you.
What else could go wrong?
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I thought the length of each stanza made more of an impact although some examples could've been stronger. I also really enjoyed how harsh but true you were in this piece! The one thing that really bugged me about this piece though would've had to have been the fact that you act as though none of these examples could never really be possible. Otherwise, I thought you did a really nice job overall! Maybe work on your word choice for certain verbs. Keep up the writing and see where it takes you in life!
From one deviant to another, Write-Then-Think
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To be honest, I liked this poem a lot. The wording is very similar to your other works (that's because it's by the same person) but you still made the poem very interesting. It's short and simple but really it's home to hypocrites and stereotypers. I like the last line, I'm not sure if it's a statement or a challenge, and it's also refreshing after all the negativity. To be completely honest I'm speechless, your poem is very black in white. There's no watering it down, no in between (the reality) just you're this or you're not. I change my mind I don't like your poem, I love it!
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I love this poem.
Honestly, I see a lot of thought and heart into this. I feel like that you might have experienced some of this pain that you are expressing. If not, well, I'm sorry. My empathy powers might be overloading today.
Many of the people in this world feel like they do not belong, because they don't fit in a certain category. I know I definitely am not in a category, and yes, it does bring me down.
This poem, though, it kind of summarizes what society is now.
I feel like this really meant something. This was beautiful. Good job!
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i'm not sure what this poem is about exactly..... but i read it about 15 times. I cannot figure out whether this poem is supposed to be mean or a eye opener . If anybody is reading this critic, can they please tell me what this poem is about . I actually am a bit emo though, i do not really seek attention though, dear mikkimarie once you read this critic lease tell me what this is....... im sorry if this might be a bit of a boring critic ,i guess i might be a bit of a boring person. bye, bro
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It's about how nobody accepts anyone for who they are.
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Excellent free-form, and certainly something worth taking the time to read. I won't go into ridiculous analysis here, but to break it down simply seems a good idea. From the perspective of each type of person mentioned, those who are not like them would seem to silently mock them. A woman watching her wait, getting too skinny, for fear of the thoughts of others would dislike a woman with a healthy weight who didn't put in as much work. Someone who dislikes groups, prefers the quiet more often, would dislike that guy who works the room naturally. Someone who cannot come to terms with their life, however small or large the tragedy, would be jealous of someone truly happy despite the sadness of their life. Likewise, a person who was trying to hide in their happiness would dislike someone who embraces their sadness, flinging labels. Those with few friends may cringe at someone who has many, believing it is not possible to know and care about that many people. A social person may see the quiet person sitting on the bleachers as others dance or mingle and think that's the best that person can do. And we'll all have haters, even you and I. Rather than what went wrong, I think this shortly written project went quite right. True, it's been done before somewhere, but the word choice and order leave quite the impression.
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The message and delivery are both rather overused, but then again, it is hard to think of anything completely new nowadays. However, it does give a thoughtful insight into society and how stereotyping falls into its own trap. I suppose that people don't often take notice publicly about issues such as this, but on this website and others akin to it such as tumblr or popular forums, this is a rather popular subject.
This is an ideal message to be sending out to people, but the only difficulty is the platform used. It's wonderful, but you're preaching to the choir.
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It's a pretty simple poem with a clear and simple message. I like how you cut the verses so it has that "realistic" vibe. The last one though... I understand the voice of this verse, but the transition from the sixth verse to the last verse isn't very smooth. You could probably put another verse there summarizing the effect of the earlier verses while subtly showing the idea of a lesson learned. It might work better that way. Other than that, the originality is there, the title is eye-grabbing, it's not boring at all, and the whole effect of the poem is very convincing. Also, I must commend your placing the poem in the right section. ^_^
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Wow this really speaks to me. This reminds me of the way people tend to over judge, in fact judging and gossip were the main themes of my middle school. I really think your poems are great. This poem really shows how many people think its almost bad to be yourself, but people don't realize that molding yourself to every one else's expectations eventually makes them nobody, while Being yourself and pursuing your passions makes them somebody. I think if you keep writing these amazing poems you will be somebody someday!!!!!!!
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Your poems are the best! I just happened to be lucky enough to stumble upon it!
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I actually really liked this, it tottaly explained how society kinda works. Keep on writing!! You're great!!!
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another person already written about this before you did owo
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kay forget the comment:')
You ''updated'' the poem! :')
Ohmy i'm sorry xD well I like the one you wrote before this one c:
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I'm really sorry!
I love your poem serously!
Nowadays all what people care about is 'the outside'
sorry if my english is bad;3;
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A nice poem with a good point, I like it :3
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The number of people misunderstand in the comment section, and interpreting it as agreeing with these opinions, is absolutely astounding.
I think it's very nicely worded, well done.
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It's sounds all true yes, but it kind of sounds like somebody is judging everyone.. Also when you're sad it doesn't make u emo.. What if they have depression? Or what if something is going on in their life? And emo is just an expression... And careful what you write in your poems someone can take it in the wrong way... Know I'm saying?
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These are not my opinions. I understand that people have serious depression and serious problems in their life <3 thank you though.
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These kinds of poem are so annoying because they're so autistic and close minded. Don't be a so closed and evasive person, you got to change yourself sometimes to join the society.
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You really didn't get it
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I don't think you understood this poem.
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Great poem for reflection.
Society has the terrible habit of sticking labels in people like they are items. I say screw society for that. People are what they are and not something to be labeled and rated.
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Even if you are sick of these poems or don't want to write them they seem to be letting you vent. Also I love these poems because they say what no one else will.
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I have to say, this is all true on how people see other people. There the also themes we can see in every from video games to TV show's.
I never thought some one could right some thing this simple but so powerful, great job my friend.
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These things are so annoying but they do speak the truth abut some people. (not me.)
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Everything can go wrong!
Including people assuming there must be something wrong with someone who seems happily enough while not having any of the stuff society says people need to be happy
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All these poems kind of have the same message and feel to them. Not that that's bad, necessarily. Just an observation. Good job though
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Wow, this is amazingly true... makes me want to rethink how i think about some peopl :/ thanks
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I hate when my friends are always saying things like "Oh, all popular kids are b*tchy and sl*tty and *ssholes and etc." when I know for a fact that they've never even had a real conversation with them. 
I never have anyone to talk to because of it. It's rather disheartening.
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Yeah... but I'm slowly making new friends 
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I love poems like this and I never get tired of them. Really!
And this kind of follows fairly closely how people think when they presume.
Well done.
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