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Published: 2008-07-07 23:41:01 +0000 UTC; Views: 192; Favourites: 3; Downloads: 3
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page 18I'm not liking how this is turning out. =/
It feels like I'm just throwing random crap into the story. which I'm not...but the way I went about it makes it seem that way.
opinions?
Screentones that I used:
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[link] by debi-chiru
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omg. This story is really amazing! I don't think its random crap, its like setting up this great mystery and you really want to learn more about it all!
Have you ever read the illustrated children's book "Gwinna" by Barbara Helen Berger? Its a book I read when I was young and I've always loved it. It's about a young girl who has wings and binds them to keep them secret... I won't say more in case you want to read it though!
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Well if you like a great mystery....
gosh darnit I should just start my new story.
I haven't heard of it. As a child I regrettably didn't read as must as I should have. The Hungry Caterpillar was about as far as I got...
Will look for it though! I love inspiration from unexpected sources! Thank you!
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well, this is a twist...
and i wasent expecting her secret to be out that quick... but its interesting.
but i think her wings are cute! and my little cousin he says that you are a good artist! (-_- what about me??? *jab him in the eye*) lol nah, i didnt hurt him.. but you see, even ppl that dont know you love ur art!
^___^
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yes. I needed to get it out there. that way people will understand her actions better.
>///< eeeh thanks. I like your art though.
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The panel in which she is throwing the ball is marvelous!! Great pose! It may be moving a bit fast, maybe that's why you think there is something wrong, but I really like where this is going!!
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: D thank you so much!
I know it's moving really fast, but I really wanted to put this stuff in there before it gets too late. D: I don't want to be almost forty pages into the story before bringing this up. (though I could've done it more slyly than just throwing it in. xD)
But thanks. :]
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I like it! It is very nice! You did do it slyly! And It is impressive that you broke up the beginning with more than just a monologue, So it's exciting from the very start! And since you skipped around a bit and didn't launch into her secret on like the first page, we were all ready for it!
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You think so?? The way you put it makes me feel smart. hehe. Thank you so much!
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mmhmm. 
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