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MissEzzyMoreno — Graffitia (TG TF, GAME OVER Contest)
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Published: 2017-08-09 00:40:26 +0000 UTC; Views: 8091; Favourites: 37; Downloads: 38
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Name: Super Mario Sunshine
Character: Mario
Method: Super Mario Sunshine has a bad ending hidden inside the coding, though it does take a while to obtain it. There are quite a few requirements needed for this bad ending. They are to:
-Only clean up 25% of the island
-At least die twice in every boss battle
-barely recharge Fludd
-Lose to Bowser Jr/Mecha Bowser a total of 100 times.
No one has really ever done this, until I heard about it from a thread online. I thought they were all rumors, but eventually, I wondered what this bad ending was like. The thought of a Mario game having a dark ending was a bit edgy for Nintendo. So, I dug up my GameCube and Super Mario Sunshine game and started to play it, completing all my the needed requirements. It took a while, and I may have neglected my responsibilities, but the obsession of what happened at the end kept haunting my mind...
After the 100th loss to Bowser Jr, the death cutscene plays, but then a new one plays. Mario is on the ground, knocked out and tired. Fludd is destroyed after Mecha Bowser steps on him. Bowser Jr. pops out of the mech and laughs, saying "that'll teach you for messing with my momma!"
Peach tries to interject, but Bowser Jr ignores her. He pulls out his paint brush and creates a large puddle of odd, pink graffiti behind Mario. He then spies the pieces of the Fludd and throws them in, and they suddenly sink into the graffiti. Oh shit, is Bowser Jr going to dissolve Mario in acid? There's no way Nintendo would allow this to happen...
Bowser Jr then shoves Mario into the pink puddle, and we watch him sink in, Peach screaming "Noooooooo!!!!" His head sinks in, dissolving into the goo, leaving behind his signature hat...
I am horrified at this scene. There was no way this was real, I had to be in a Creepypasta, right?
...right. At least, in that part. What happens next was shocking and very unexpected...suddenly, the puddle begins to turn green, and something rises up out of the puddle, moving the puddle along with it. I move closer to my TV screen, confused, but interested. The puddle forms into a very fat female figure, who then grows two FLUDD hoses where her hands would be. Suddenly, her face appears...her mouth is all gooey, stuck together by a few strands of goop. She looks like she's in agony.
...was this Mario? There was no way this could be Mario. Mario is dead, right? Maybe the goop just needed something special to get it going!
"Welcome to the world, Grafittia!" Bowser Jr. greets politely. "How do you feel?"
"...what...happen..." her voice sounded like someone eating something sticky. Whenever she moved, a soft puddle sound was made. "...what...did...you...do....Why...am....me...sticky..." Grafittia asks, looking at her hands.
The camera panned up to Peach, who looked devastated. This was indeed Mario, transformed into sentient graffiti. Whatever Bowser Jr. had planned, it better be good.
"Now I can spend more time with mommy, while YOU ruin this boring old place!" Bowser Jr jumped for joy. "Now, go!" Bowser Jr jumped up and slapped Graffitia's goopy behind, causing her to wobble. "Go wreak havoc!"
The goo girl looks at Peach, as if to say "I failed"...before moving away. She propels herself over the water with her FLUDD hoses as jets, similar to Iron Man...and into the town. Townsfolk look on in shock and surprise...the camera zooms in on Graffitia's face...in agony, pain and sorrow...
And then the screen turns black.
The credits roll, showing pictures of Graffitia spraying people with her goo, turning them into creature like her, minus the Fludd hands. As the pictures progress, you can see Delfino Plaza become more like a wasteland, with more and more creatures like her appearing. There's also "comedic" pictures of Bowser Jr and Peach playing together, with Peach having a sad face, but over time...she begins to smile. She really begins to accept this role as a mother, I suppose. Maybe it was Stockholm or something, I really don't know.
And then the last few pictures show. It shows Bowser, Peach and Bowser Jr doing a family picture in front of the destroyed town. They're all posing like it was a normal vacation.
In the second photo, it shows Bowser being ensnared by the goo people, and Graffitia spraying Peach with the goop. Bowser Jr is being transformed as well.
In the last...it shows an entire army of Graffitia like creatures, all goopy and fat. The goopy Peach is by Graffitia's side, creepily smiling with her gooey mouth. The transformed father and son stand behind them, smiling equally as creepy...Bowser and Bowser Jr had been transformed into very round and blob like goo girls, where as Peach had a peach goo like body.
I dropped my controller, as Graffitia said "Here we go!"
I see why this game was never meant to have that ending.
I wish I could forget it...
Word Count: 854
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Comments: 24
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This could've been better as a literature piece instead of squished into the description. Nice idea however.
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Sufficiently Creepy although I wish the drawing had a little more time put into it. I think it would have been nice to get some extensions on the story since you used so little of the limit.
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Now the art itself is just not good. It looks like it was made in paint in a half hour and it looks unappealing color wise, which is kind of the point, but it could have had more work put in. Now as for the story, you took an original path in making the tg a video game creepypasta story, but I had to dock points because it followed all of the cliches of a gaming creepypasta, only with tg added into the mix. You also need to make sure your tenses match. Since you are writing a story that takes place in the past, you should have most of the verbs stay in past tense.
And then the screen TURNED black
The credits ROLLED etc.
I will commend you on making a legitimate game over which many contestants I felt struggled with and you fit the theme perfectly. I'd just say for next time, try to avoid cliches and spend a bit more time on the picture if you decide to include one.
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I like what you've done here! It's a very original piece, it fits the contest theme perfectly and the art and text work together to create something that's more than the sum of its parts. You've created a very convincing creepypasta atmosphere. Even the artwork being unpolished adds to this feeling. Accompanying your "memory" with a drawing makes it more believable: "This is what she looked like! I swear I saw it!"
One thing to pay attention to: try to stay in a single tense. You switch between present and past tense often and it's a bit distracting. Example: I am horrified at this scene. There was no way this was real... Pick one tense, either past or present and stick to it. I feel like your piece could have used a second revision.
Other than that, though, great job! Your ideas and your sense of atmosphere are strong! Keep up the good work!
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Agreed with Chimafan, the Tf is cool but a bit of lining would be pretty nice too, just to make a bit clearer who's transforming in the art piece.
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While nice I think a bit of outlining and some shading would greatly benefit this. The idea itself though is actually very nice, and the ministory is well written too.
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You wanted this one to be creepy didn't you?
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I need to go wash my brain out now, thank you good madame
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What program do you use to draw? I might be able to offer a few tips if you use the one I do.
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I just use an app on my iPad.
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Oh. Well, my advice may not be applicable then. But I've found that using different brushstrokes to vary line thickness can make things look better. I'm not sure how you do that in whatever program you're using though.
The melty mouth looks really good, though.
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Um you need to put the details in the description, kind of important.
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Check the rules journal again, you need have a little info bar at the bottom.
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Have the following info in the description:
Game: The game you chose to use as a setting
Character changed: Names of any characters transformed
Method: How to get your Game Over
Word Count: If its a story list your final word count here. We will check it. Please check your word counts.
Description: Any info you think should go along with your entry. We do read the descriptions, don't neglect it.
Link to Contest Journal: just put a link to the original journal
Most of the info is there and just needs to be rearranged.
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Include a word count if you dont mind. SInce your description is long enough to count as a story. Other than that you seem fine.
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Actually read the contest info, there's a set of details you are required to put in the description. Actually read the contest info.
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...there's no need to be so condescending about it
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Not being condescending, I am trying to communicate useful advice in as few comments as possible. I am bad at this.
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I don't know, I think she's kinda cute.
I know someone who may like this, hey remind you of anyone?
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Sounds like a good ending, as long as i looked like her or peach LOL
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