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PrettyThings9 [2011-05-02 18:37:09 +0000 UTC]
this is wonderful; the metaphors and images you create are incredible!
you identify and word beautifully the haunting sensation of memories and how, despite being intangible, create such powerful emotions. i also like the way this piece transcends the visual, you mention scent and thirst which is wonderful; i kinda wish you expanded a little on the scents though, giving us a vivid account of this scene you're conjuring.
i also adore the final sentance; it has a sense of defeat and poingancy and definately resonates. a wonderful account of regret and agonising, i think. well done!
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Addy9063 [2011-03-26 21:04:48 +0000 UTC]
tends to help to write it down
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mixyPI In reply to Addy9063 [2011-03-26 21:05:34 +0000 UTC]
true...so i did
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