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mixyPI — Hungry ghosts by-nc-nd
Published: 2011-03-26 21:03:21 +0000 UTC; Views: 181; Favourites: 4; Downloads: 1
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Description I wish I could forget brief moments, so that memories would stop stalking me, like hungry ghosts waiting, begging for satisfaction. They come knocking at my door, interrupting the foolish dreams I chase. 'I don't want you here', I protest, but they push past and make themselves at home. An old couple lies sprawled on my couch, gazing into each others eyes. My kitchen is overrun with cooks, old smells and ingredients spilling like marbles across the floor. I retreat, burrowing further and further; past clothes and sentimental trinkets, past frames filled with faces I want to forget. 'Come for a little pleasure, have you?' one leers at me from my bed.
How do you run from yourself?
Shut down – the final escape – I force myself to numbness. You follow me though, looking for sustenance. You feed on my emotions, drinking them in like a man parched with thirst. Even after I drive the others out, you lean against the doorjamb, with that half-smile curling on your lips. Like old, bitter lovers we drink together and imagine what life could have been.
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Comments: 7

PrettyThings9 [2011-05-02 18:37:09 +0000 UTC]

this is wonderful; the metaphors and images you create are incredible!

you identify and word beautifully the haunting sensation of memories and how, despite being intangible, create such powerful emotions. i also like the way this piece transcends the visual, you mention scent and thirst which is wonderful; i kinda wish you expanded a little on the scents though, giving us a vivid account of this scene you're conjuring.

i also adore the final sentance; it has a sense of defeat and poingancy and definately resonates. a wonderful account of regret and agonising, i think. well done!

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mixyPI In reply to PrettyThings9 [2011-05-03 06:17:50 +0000 UTC]

Thank you firstly, it's always wonderful to get comments such as this one
hmmm...yes, maybe i'll edit some more senses in, was worried that i'd start to ramble when i first wrote it
thank you again

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PrettyThings9 In reply to mixyPI [2011-05-03 17:58:05 +0000 UTC]

oh no worries...i always like getting in depth comments so i decided, well, if you want something you gotta give, y' know? changing dA one step at a time!

oh no, just a word or two would be lovely

it was my pleasure

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mixyPI In reply to PrettyThings9 [2011-05-04 10:43:54 +0000 UTC]

makes sense
i'll see what i can do

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PrettyThings9 In reply to mixyPI [2011-05-04 18:33:23 +0000 UTC]

i'm sure it'll be amazing

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Addy9063 [2011-03-26 21:04:48 +0000 UTC]

tends to help to write it down

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mixyPI In reply to Addy9063 [2011-03-26 21:05:34 +0000 UTC]

true...so i did

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