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Reyelene [2016-12-12 01:21:23 +0000 UTC]
Overall
Vision
Originality
Technique
Impact
Your technique has come a long way! e.deviantart.net/emoticons/s/s… " width="15" height="15" alt="" data-embed-type="emoticon" data-embed-id="391" title=" (Smile)"/> I like how you took into consideration the proportions of each characters' body, having the hands fall slightly below the hips but meeting midway of their thighs, which is at the same level that hands in real life generally fall. I also like the details of The Reformed Ratigan's medallions and texture of his royal garment as well as Mouses Fiennes's garment. It really shows that you pay attention to the small details so that it wouldn't look too generic and flat. I rated your technique a 4.5 because I'm a bit "iffy" with Mouses' groin area. On that part, I like that you paid attention to the details of the body, I'm not so sure how that would mull over with the Disney studios, especially since nowadays the topic of body image borders on the controversial as to what is acceptable and what is not. Even though art is heavily influenced by politics, artists (myself included) have to be as apolitical as possible since politics is yet ANOTHER controversial topic. Hopefully this doesn't come across as too random.
For originality, I see a lot of potential with your Mouses Fiennes character, the only thing I would recommend, as I stated in the comment post, is to pick only one crime that Mouses is guilty of. The purpose of this is you want your audience (especially the younger generation) to easily identify what kind of character Mouses Fiennes is. It think the "crime lord" title is the best way to show that Mouses encompasses ALL types of crime without it coming across sounding too random or too indecisive.
As for Vision and Impact, I rated those categories the same. I'm a little confused as to how different "Impact" is from "Vision."
Keep up the good work! e.deviantart.net/emoticons/s/s… " width="15" height="15" alt="" data-embed-type="emoticon" data-embed-id="391" title=" (Smile)"/>
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DisneyFanGirl1997 [2017-05-23 18:43:42 +0000 UTC]
Even though I'm less inclined to Ratigan reforming, this is great. I'm more inclined to Fidget reforming, even before I started reading the short GMD comic story, The Sideshow Sea Beast. I hope you didn't think I was flaming, though.
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Reyelene [2016-11-23 04:12:05 +0000 UTC]
I should've written this in the first comment post. The reason I asked that question is because in Eve Titus's book, the character Ratigan is actually a mouse, Ratigan was his name because the term "rat" in this case is used to describe a "traitor" (that's what "rat" in the slang term means). So I was wondering if you're taking the same approach with Mouses Fiennes?
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Reyelene In reply to MouseAvenger [2016-12-10 01:39:44 +0000 UTC]
Technique-wise, you have the characters down pat. I like how your Mouses Fiennes character came out.
Oh, I did take a look at your Mouses Fiennes biography on your website, specifically under "Occupation." I noticed you wrote multiple crime positions like rapist, child molester, "Ripper," etc. Which one of those occupations do you want to stand out for Mouses Fiennes? You're better off just sticking to one, having all those other ones just sounds too random. I know realistically criminals will commit one crime and then commit multiple others, but for a cartoon character, it's best to pick only one crime that he's guilty of and stick with it. The reason for that is so that your audience (especially kids) can easily identify the character better. Judging by the picture, I think the "crime lord" aspect stands out, but since Mouses Fiennes is your character, I will let you be the judge of that.
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Reyelene [2016-11-23 04:09:07 +0000 UTC]
Now ... Is Mouses Fiennes a mouse or another rat?
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Reyelene In reply to MouseAvenger [2016-12-09 07:52:42 +0000 UTC]
I already assumed he was a regular mouse, but you drew him with jagged teeth, like a rat.
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