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Published: 2006-11-15 06:11:40 +0000 UTC; Views: 330; Favourites: 2; Downloads: 4
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Description Her eyes stayed open as she dropped from the top platform on the roof. Her hair flew into the sky and her arms flew out in her feeble attempt to stay for just a moment longer. The ground had disappeared from under her and down she fell.

Down past the windows of the apartments, she went. She fell past the family celebrating their child's sixth birthday. She floated past the man rigorously scrubbing his teeth, yellow from coffee and bad hygiene. She dropped past the two lovers in bed, the married man and the unsuspecting younger woman. She flew past the mother chasing her children across their tiny kitchen and she may have passed a couple having tea, but she would never know.

She fell from the sky like money onto businessmen. She flew through the clouds like a bat with broken wings. She dropped to the ground like an apple from an apple tree. It was too perfect to leave, it was too horrific to watch. When she finally reached the bottom, she fell into open arms. She fell smiling into the arms of her savior, the arms which were never there.
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Comments: 3

HirokiSatoshema [2009-10-15 03:52:26 +0000 UTC]

im in love with this poem i like it

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Arameth [2006-11-17 11:36:04 +0000 UTC]

You shouldn't have worried about imperfection, it flows wonderfully. The composition and structure are just right.

The concept has been done to death but that isn't really relevant. The writing is good. That is the highest praise I can give you.

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MrsBamonte In reply to Arameth [2006-11-18 02:55:25 +0000 UTC]

Thank you for such a wonderful comment, it brightened my insanely boring day. And while I'm at it.. Thanks for the on Phantom!


Much Love

Keiida

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