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munichmannequins — Ode To Jacob

Published: 2006-03-16 07:51:12 +0000 UTC; Views: 256; Favourites: 3; Downloads: 3
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Description Twice now, I've seen him
Between canned corn and beans,
Lumbering through the aisles.

His girth, like a house,
How his poor knees must buckle,
Beneath that bearing load.

His eyes never leave the floor,
He has dissolved,
Into the nothingness he is, always was, ever will be.

Draped in those same sweat pants,
Creased along the legs,
His second mottled grey skin.

And his hair, wet with grease,
Hangs low on his forhead,
Above a bespectacled bloated face.

Like dough,
His face,
Like dough.

I imagine he's never been laid,
A bulging thing like him,
No prom queen was ever that compassionate.

I thought for a moment,
That if given the chance,
I might give him a pity fuck.

But really, I wouldn't,
Because for some reason I am better than him,
Like everyone else.

I never looked in his basket,
But I imagined it filled,
With treats and things, greasey microwave chicken wings.

At the checkout, people keep their distances,
And try not to stare
At his enormous humiliation.

Oh Jacob, what mother
Has set your eyes so low,
And spoon fed your sickness?

What ignorant father,
Never took you out in the yard,
But planted you on the couch instead.

What ill bred aunt turned up her nose,
At your tenth birthday party,
As you took a guilty fourth piece of cake.

What channels do you watch?
Which beaver mags perk your eye?
Masturbation must be your only salvation.

I watch you,
I see your sadness,
Hanging on your slumped shoulders,

Heavy as rot iron,
And permanant.
You'll never be a husband.

Oh Jacob, I thought once
That maybe I'd give you a pity fuck,
No one deserves an unbroken cherry at thirty.

But I never will, because
Your face is like dough,
And I am better than you, like everyone else.
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Comments: 16

Killer32 [2007-03-25 06:46:43 +0000 UTC]

Truly beautiful. Makes me want to cry.
Probably because my name is Jacob...

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munichmannequins In reply to Killer32 [2007-05-05 19:12:28 +0000 UTC]

lol, aw. Thanks a lot for the nice words.

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TromBebop [2006-07-22 02:51:27 +0000 UTC]

I really enjoyed how it is a thought process most would never say out loud. It wasn't cruel, but it was observant and straight from 1st person perspective. Especially the line "And I am better than you, like everyone else." because as people in society, we do think that sick-twisted way.

+fav

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munichmannequins In reply to TromBebop [2006-09-10 21:22:46 +0000 UTC]

thank you, I'm glad you liked it.

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3amtransition [2006-05-04 08:50:01 +0000 UTC]

I love poetry like this. Its so real & down to earth. Its the life that runs through everyones head when they see someone like this, but instead of forgetting about it, you write the three second thoughts.

Nice job!!

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Redlady1610 [2006-04-04 09:27:55 +0000 UTC]

I love your honest work, most would not post this, for fear of sounding mean or hurtful. I love your truths, and I love this poem, good job.

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iAmShiny [2006-03-20 07:30:19 +0000 UTC]

Ahahah... you wonderful girl, such honesty is the rarest of gasps. So very faved.

You are quite magnificent with the imagery, that you are. It was like watching T.V. in my head.

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munichmannequins In reply to iAmShiny [2006-03-20 18:11:17 +0000 UTC]

thank you very much

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FrostyDevil [2006-03-19 21:40:05 +0000 UTC]

It would be an odd thing saying that I enjoyed this poem seeing as it is quite sad but that is exactly why I enjoyed it. I think everyone has seen people like this fellow, maybe even have a friend or two that slightly resemble him in certain respects. I know that I have and that is why this was so vivid and true to me. This a very good poem, I must say.

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munichmannequins In reply to FrostyDevil [2006-03-19 22:17:40 +0000 UTC]

thanks Travis

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AToxicDelight [2006-03-16 12:39:29 +0000 UTC]

Awe. I feel bad for this man. You wrote a strong poem about him.

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munichmannequins In reply to AToxicDelight [2006-03-16 20:43:40 +0000 UTC]

thank you, I feel bad for him too. I do feel a little sleazy writing something like this, but in all reality he'll never know. Thanks for the comment

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AToxicDelight In reply to munichmannequins [2006-03-16 20:44:36 +0000 UTC]

That's the truth. You're welcome.

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Looganmathunubie [2006-03-16 07:55:21 +0000 UTC]

"You'll never be a husband" is heartbreakingly sad. I mean, that's some seriously sad shit. You weren't fucking around when you wrote that line.

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munichmannequins In reply to Looganmathunubie [2006-03-16 08:03:28 +0000 UTC]

It was actually a little hard to write, this guy is incredibly lost...and I just kept seeing him. He's just one of those people that sticks in your head, making you try to imagine what life must be like in those same sweat pants and grimey t-shirt day after day. Thanks for reading it, I'm actually half way through your new story right now, so expect feedback, an assload of it (or maybe just a few lines), until then Mr. Newby, until then.

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Looganmathunubie In reply to munichmannequins [2006-03-16 08:11:33 +0000 UTC]

Yes ma'am, I know what you mean. There's this single guy at my work, about thirty years old, who is hideously ugly. "You'll never be a husband." I feel so sorry for him.

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