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Killer32 [2007-03-25 06:46:43 +0000 UTC]
Truly beautiful. Makes me want to cry.
Probably because my name is Jacob...
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TromBebop [2006-07-22 02:51:27 +0000 UTC]
I really enjoyed how it is a thought process most would never say out loud. It wasn't cruel, but it was observant and straight from 1st person perspective. Especially the line "And I am better than you, like everyone else." because as people in society, we do think that sick-twisted way.
+fav
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3amtransition [2006-05-04 08:50:01 +0000 UTC]
I love poetry like this. Its so real & down to earth. Its the life that runs through everyones head when they see someone like this, but instead of forgetting about it, you write the three second thoughts.
Nice job!!
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Redlady1610 [2006-04-04 09:27:55 +0000 UTC]
I love your honest work, most would not post this, for fear of sounding mean or hurtful. I love your truths, and I love this poem, good job.
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iAmShiny [2006-03-20 07:30:19 +0000 UTC]
Ahahah... you wonderful girl, such honesty is the rarest of gasps. So very faved.
You are quite magnificent with the imagery, that you are. It was like watching T.V. in my head.
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FrostyDevil [2006-03-19 21:40:05 +0000 UTC]
It would be an odd thing saying that I enjoyed this poem seeing as it is quite sad but that is exactly why I enjoyed it. I think everyone has seen people like this fellow, maybe even have a friend or two that slightly resemble him in certain respects. I know that I have and that is why this was so vivid and true to me. This a very good poem, I must say.
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Looganmathunubie [2006-03-16 07:55:21 +0000 UTC]
"You'll never be a husband" is heartbreakingly sad. I mean, that's some seriously sad shit. You weren't fucking around when you wrote that line.
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munichmannequins In reply to Looganmathunubie [2006-03-16 08:03:28 +0000 UTC]
It was actually a little hard to write, this guy is incredibly lost...and I just kept seeing him. He's just one of those people that sticks in your head, making you try to imagine what life must be like in those same sweat pants and grimey t-shirt day after day. Thanks for reading it, I'm actually half way through your new story right now, so expect feedback, an assload of it (or maybe just a few lines), until then Mr. Newby, until then.
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Looganmathunubie In reply to munichmannequins [2006-03-16 08:11:33 +0000 UTC]
Yes ma'am, I know what you mean. There's this single guy at my work, about thirty years old, who is hideously ugly. "You'll never be a husband." I feel so sorry for him.
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