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Dottea [2017-02-26 12:09:31 +0000 UTC]
Okay so this character is really interesting and his history is SUPER well developed! I also really dig his design tbh his hair is lovely and your choice for colours for his clothes was great cause it really goes with his skin. My criticism isn't really for the character, moreso how you present his information. This is just a personal thing of mine but I've always thought it to be a bit too much to post things like lists of likes and dislikes (family I can understand though), and personality traits. I think you could make it more interesting by just writing a paragraph describing him rather than go into a list. Think like a page from a book of how an author would describe a character and roll with that. You can spruce it up by making it a scene even, that way it catches a readers attention much more and makes them pay more attention to what is being said rather than an endless list. But overall the character himself is good and seems very well thought out!
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MurtaghEsq In reply to Dottea [2017-02-26 19:47:39 +0000 UTC]
omgg I'm super glad you like him as a character, and especially the colours! The flats were so hard to pick out for some reason. the bio could def use some sprucing up and I'll try to do that in the future. Thank you so much for taking the time out of your day to look over my little disaster
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undercoverghost [2017-02-16 16:50:14 +0000 UTC]
Mmmmmm??? This is so interesting?? I love??? Tell me more????
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MurtaghEsq In reply to undercoverghost [2017-02-16 17:05:58 +0000 UTC]
omgg thank you ;; he started off as a napkin sized pirate kite that was like the best thing ever. He was originally a captain, for some reason, but changed to a nervous new pirate when I first drew him. Then he was my PC in a shitty game of dnd I was in for years (we only got to level five in two years and only one of the npcs could kill the Big Bad, not us) who started off human but eventually he turned into a really human passing half elf and there was this thing about one of the many boring npcs being his biological dad. There may have also been a dragon who shape shifted into an elf that he had... conflicted feelings about. He was also stuck in a weird country that wanted to wipe the country he was from off the map??? Important lore the dm forgot to tell me because boy did he talk way too much shit to everyone for a dad at risk of being murdered for being foreign
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undercoverghost In reply to MurtaghEsq [2017-02-16 17:15:02 +0000 UTC]
I'm crying that sounds like an adventure lmao
I've never played dnd nfortunately altho me and my sister kinda wanted to create one board game of the like for pirates and sea life only?? We actually had the characters up but then that was it lol. I wish i could have so many good ideas as you did with this char, I really love him and theres a lot to him (i cried a bit abt the shapeshifting dragon lmao)
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MurtaghEsq In reply to undercoverghost [2017-02-16 18:56:06 +0000 UTC]
omg I'd love to play or dm a game centred around piracy that sounds so cool and I need to look into that like right now. It's easy to get a lot for your characters though when you drop them into a culture tbh, like when I understood the culture he came from he sprang to life and was promptly stabbed
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undercoverghost In reply to MurtaghEsq [2017-02-16 19:44:35 +0000 UTC]
Ahhh lovely! We kinda made our own characters (i can dm them to u if u want) and planned to make like a chart to move our characters on (with islands and sea etc) and cards with events on them
But we dint really kno how we could play it out & I'm living in another region from her so it kinda died out a bit (not the will tho)
We wanted to keep it around the culture that was in the golden age of piracy with some fantasy themes added. Idk if that makes sense lmao
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