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Sketchjacks [2018-05-03 20:24:51 +0000 UTC]
I really enjoyed that.👏👏
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Muscleboyfan2538 In reply to Sketchjacks [2018-05-04 17:56:11 +0000 UTC]
Thank you, do I need to improve anything to make it better?
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Sketchjacks In reply to Muscleboyfan2538 [2018-05-04 18:39:15 +0000 UTC]
Just the grammar. There are a few times where you switch from first to second person. Honestly it didn't bother me much , the story had me captivated.
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Muscleboyfan2538 In reply to Sketchjacks [2018-05-04 18:41:10 +0000 UTC]
Oh I know about that, and thanks for reading it, and faveing if you did, nobody really reads my stories.
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Sketchjacks In reply to Muscleboyfan2538 [2018-05-06 14:53:14 +0000 UTC]
No problem. I know how that is, and I try to be supportive of fellow writers.
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