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Published: 2018-01-14 00:08:39 +0000 UTC; Views: 1474; Favourites: 20; Downloads: 0
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… I put too many details into this page.
You can also follow "Within" and my other pony-related stories on:
Tumblr: myth-pony.tumblr.com/
and FurAffinity: www.furaffinity.net/user/mythp…
Characters and artwork featured here are mine
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Comments: 12
You are using up a lot of your material very quickly. You should perhaps spread out the characters more to get more mileage out of them rather than reveal them all at once.
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Wow... if you think I'm using this up quickly, you really have no idea how long this story is.
Not to mention, if you think I'm really foolish enough to reveal everything about my characters in the first scene where they all meet... well, you're dead wrong
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You are revealing their powers. You could have kept that hidden for later and showed it as the story goes on.
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Yeah, I don't know if you just haven't been paying attention, or if you're really trying to give me a critique that I didn't ask for.
So, if you're a reader, and you're legitimately concerned: don't worry, there's still a lot more story. These individuals' powers are just the tip of the iceburg.
And if you really just came here to try to tell me how I should be writing my comic.... well, you just think about that for a while, and decide if you really want to go down this road.
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The thing is if you reveal all your favorite things about your characters already it's highly likely you will lose motivation later on.
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What do you think this story is about?
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About their lives at the school.
Also no need to get so defensive because I'm expressing concern.
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