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Description Jak 2: Bath Time!! Final part

Panting heavily, Dark’s claws scraped the ground as he ran on all fours to increase his speed and distance from his pursuers. He knew he wouldn’t be able to keep this up, though. Tearing around the corner, he ran until another bright light shone right in his eyes in front of him. Skidding to a halt, he shielded his face from it, cursing his luck…again. Another barricade was right in front of him. Bravo, Torn…looks like someone thought this through. He turned from the vehicles in front of him to the ones behind him. Damn, he was trapped! He looked around frantically for a way out of his predicament.

“No use trying, Jak. Come on. Let’s get you back to headquarters.” Torn called to him, but Dark wasn’t giving up so easily. There was an old building to his right. He turned to Torn, staring into his eyes. Torn held the gaze, his heart beginning to pick up its beat again. Then, Jak smirked, and Torn raised his eyebrow. Then, Jak bolted for the building, avoiding gunfire as some of the soldiers fired at him. “Jak!” Torn shouted as he disappeared into the darkness. “Ashelin! Tess! You two stay here and keep an eye out. I’m heading in myself.” Torn removed his gun from its holster. He jumped from his zoomer and immediately hit the ground in a stride, following Jak into the building.

Watching his pursuer enter the complex from a hole in the second floor’s wooden floorboards, Jak smirked. Looks like Torn was going to take some risks, eh? He blinked as he felt something stir within him for only a second. “Hmm…I won’t kill him. He’s a friend…but it doesn’t mean I can’t amuse myself…” he muttered, grinning at the thought. No way was he going to get himself caught now.

He stepped cautiously, tattooed face wracked with nervousness. Closed quarters, a place that’s falling apart, and a rampant monster running around it? Sounds like a fun time. “…where is he…?” He kept his gun at the ready, pointed at right in front of him in case Jak wanted to use him as a scratching post. His eyes slowly looked around each area, trying to see all of the places someone could hide. He was glad his eyes were adjusted to the dark already or else he’d be running into everything. The silence was almost suffocating as he waited…waited for something, anything, to happen. He got his wish. Before he could even jump backwards, something came crashing down from the second floor right in front of him. He skidded backwards, making sure to stay on his feet. He knew he’d have to be on his toes for this. Coughing through the dust cloud as it settled, he kept his gun barrel trained on the figure in front of him. “Hello there, Torn…”

He froze. He stayed rooted to the spot, watching those claws gently click together, the grin on his face, the intensity of his gaze. He didn’t dare make a move first, knowing how unpredictable Dark was. “Easy Jak. Don’t make me shoot.” He had the gun pointed straight at him. Jak’s only response was a laugh. “Don’t make you shoot?” his voice made Torn flinch almost. It was far from Jak’s calm, warm voice. It gave him shivers just hearing it. He slowly approached Torn, black eyes fixed onto his target. Torn only backed away a little, his fear keeping him at a distance, but his determination keeping him there. “By the time you pulled the trigger, my hand would be around your neck…” he gripped thin air, a gleeful look on his face. He was enjoying watching Torn squirm. Every action he made kept him on edge. He kept walking towards him, seeing Torn’s face harden as he put a finger on the trigger.

“Jak. Don’t make me do this.” He told him as he got so close Jak could claw him to pieces if he wanted to. He still wore that grin, though. It didn’t seem to faze him one bit. His claws flexed, getting ready to attack. Torn couldn’t move. He was paralyzed. “Move dammit!” he told himself as Jak got closer, but his legs didn’t listen. He was just about to pull the trigger when a loud *clang* surprised them both. Torn snapped out of it to see Jak with a confused look on his face. He then staggered around a little before falling to the ground. Torn looked from Jak to the figure behind him…which had a metal pole in his hand. “Nice timing, Sig…” Torn said, trying to keep himself from stuttering. He was shaking all over now from realizing he had almost would’ve been shredded.

“No problem, chili pepper.” He smiled, tossing the pipe behind him. Ignoring the series of clanging noises that ensued, Torn put his gun back into its holster. Sig hoisted the now unconscious Jak over his shoulder. “Good thing Tess called me when she did. You looked like you were in a bind.” Sig eyed Torn as they walked out of the building. “I was just afraid I’d have to shoot the guy…” he shrugged; secretly glad Sig came before he could. “Let’s get back to HQ…it’s been a long day…” Torn sighed, motioning Ashelin to return to the underground’s base. She nodded, and signaled to the soldiers. Torn jumped onto his zoomer, exhausted from today’s little fiasco. He barely acknowledged Ashelin telling him the shadow was back, just wanting to get some rest…

Back in the underground’s base of operations…

“Hmm…I think I know what’s wrong.” The young Samos concluded as he inspected the awake and now growling Jak. “He began to transform just before he was knocked unconscious, therefore this form took over while Jak was still out cold…” Samos nodded. Torn leaned against his desk, arms crossed. “He will probably be back to his old self by morning.” The sage looked to Torn, who only nodded slightly. “So…we just have to wait till tomorrow?” Daxter asked. “Oh no. I’m not letting him off that easily…” everyone turned to Torn, who hadn’t said a word the whole time they were there. Slowly he got up and walked over to Dark. “I didn’t forget the whole reason we went after you for, Jak…” he had a smirk on his face that even made Dark a little worried. He then slowly held up something white in his hands. A fresh, new bar of soap. Jak’s eyes widened at the realization of what it was, and desperately tried to get at the ropes that bound him. Tossing the soap to Daxter, he turned to the ottsel. “Hey, furball…be sure to get behind his ears…”

The next day, Jak was back to his old self. He awakened that morning with hardly any recollection of yesterday’s events, but wondered why he smelled like soap. Torn refused to say anything, but Jak could swear a smile tugged at Torn’s lips whenever he tried to ask. Ashelin and Tess weren’t much help either. As soon as he could, he asked Daxter what had happened after the metal heads attacked. “Oh that…haha…funny story there…”
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Comments: 76

Nosam513 [2013-11-24 22:25:54 +0000 UTC]

Jak, Daxter, and comedy is always a fantastic combination in my opinion. Very good story. I've played through the games multiple times, and you seemed to get all of characters  dead on the nail. Dark considering mass murder entertaining fits just so, and Torn was reasonably scared without over-doing or uh, under-doing(?) it. Hope to see more work like this  

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Nakurux In reply to Nosam513 [2013-11-24 22:48:40 +0000 UTC]

Thank you very much! Keeping them in-character was always in the front of my mind, especially Torn. He was the hardest since I wasn't used to gruff characters that kept the constant 'I don't care >=/' attitude up. I needed to have him care...but not too much. XD

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PDSD234 [2013-07-24 20:58:37 +0000 UTC]

XD I love this story.  

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Nakurux In reply to PDSD234 [2013-07-25 01:17:39 +0000 UTC]

Always glad to please. ^^ I like to think I've improved since I wrote this so long ago...but I have no finished works to prove it. =/

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SonicAsura [2012-11-03 00:32:49 +0000 UTC]

AHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHA!!!!!!!!

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InstaStud [2012-05-31 06:14:30 +0000 UTC]

lol great story! Hmmmn i never thought Torn could get scared...aw well at least he lived!!

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Nakurux In reply to InstaStud [2012-06-02 18:18:45 +0000 UTC]

Well, if you saw that thing heading towards you, wouldn't you be a biiit scared? I know I would.

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InstaStud In reply to Nakurux [2012-06-02 18:21:08 +0000 UTC]

haha yeah, but i thought Torn had only 2 emotions: pissed and pissed

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Nakurux In reply to InstaStud [2012-06-19 15:46:57 +0000 UTC]

Don't forget snarky, irritated, and impatient.

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InstaStud In reply to Nakurux [2012-06-19 15:52:17 +0000 UTC]

yeah, haha guess we cant forget those...
and dont forget:

:iconchallengeaccepted2plz:BADASS.

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Nakurux In reply to InstaStud [2012-06-26 16:09:47 +0000 UTC]

Epically badass. I love his tattoos...kinda wish my fail Krimzon Guard had such cool patterns. But I went for somewhat plain so he wouldn't seem like a Sue or something.

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InstaStud In reply to Nakurux [2012-06-26 23:54:03 +0000 UTC]

i know rite!?? His tats are awesome, and your Krimzon gaurd is prolly not even that bad, hes prolly smexay!!!

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Nakurux In reply to InstaStud [2012-06-27 23:07:08 +0000 UTC]

Yeah, he kinda stemmed from my dislike of Erol...XD. I wish I had drawn a more updated version of him...which I will when I get the chance...as my art looks nothing like that now.

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InstaStud In reply to Nakurux [2012-06-27 23:23:21 +0000 UTC]

yeah you prolly draw epic now!!
i just saw him and he is awesome and hes got the tatoo across his nose just like my OC does yay!!!! my OC is a former Krimzon gaurd, but she escaped to join the underground and i guess her and Torn fell in love?? Whatever, they be together

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Nakurux In reply to InstaStud [2012-06-27 23:29:37 +0000 UTC]

Haha, I wouldn't say that...still have a ways to go.

I can't remember what I had in mind for him...I know it was either death or getting some cool blue eco powers...because I didn't want to go the dark/light route, but I wanted to see what could happen with other ecos. I know after Praxus got squished, he went freelance merc come third game if he lived...

Hey, whatever works! Torn didn't exactly have a girl before that we could see.

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InstaStud In reply to Nakurux [2012-06-27 23:43:33 +0000 UTC]

lol me too...prolly 100 years before i get called "epic"

cool blue eco powers would be awesome!!! *imagines awesome elf dude with epic powerz and a cape*
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yes and Torn will have a better life with her rather than with Ashelin,who is a cheater

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Nakurux In reply to InstaStud [2012-06-30 00:16:59 +0000 UTC]

Haha, yeah...twice as long for me.

Ikr! Fast, lightning, maybe learns to be good with machines...but I'd need to think of some weaknesses...maybe he can't ever run out of eco or his heart fails.

Agreed...she's also Praxis' kid which makes me wonder...

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InstaStud In reply to Nakurux [2012-06-30 01:37:19 +0000 UTC]

hmmn sounds good..or how about when he runs out of eco, his body sorta shuts down and his body kinda just goes limp and he doesnt have the strength to do much? I dunno xD

it makes you wonder what? o3o

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Nakurux In reply to InstaStud [2012-07-04 21:43:23 +0000 UTC]

Hehe, that could be funny. All sorts of fun poked at him for that. "So...how goes it, laying on the floor?" "Shut it, Jak..."

Makes me wonder if she ever has tendencies to be like her father at times...

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InstaStud In reply to Nakurux [2012-07-06 02:46:39 +0000 UTC]

Me: *walks over and pokes him with a stick* i see...

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Nakurux In reply to InstaStud [2012-07-07 00:40:12 +0000 UTC]

"Hey! Quit that, or I'll-" Me: You'll sit there and grumble...you can't do much else until you get some eco. "..."

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InstaStud In reply to Nakurux [2012-07-07 01:18:56 +0000 UTC]

Me: ahh!!! It moved!!!!

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Nakurux In reply to InstaStud [2012-07-08 00:49:37 +0000 UTC]

Me: Oh dear...

"...ohgodwhyyyy..."

Me: I'll...go find you some blue eco, dear...and some green...

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InstaStud In reply to Nakurux [2012-07-08 02:57:19 +0000 UTC]

Me: ASDFGHJK!!!!! *pokes his ears* ahaha!!! This is so fun!!!! *Pose him funny* >w<

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Nakurux In reply to InstaStud [2012-07-08 10:51:16 +0000 UTC]

"...I hate you all..."

Me: It's...how we show affection.

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InstaStud In reply to Nakurux [2012-07-08 13:19:36 +0000 UTC]

Me: so much affection!!!! *hug him and then pose him heroically* hmmm...*put a retarded tiara on him* he is a...SUPER PRINCESS!!!!!!! xDDD

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TheBearbie [2011-02-06 19:51:28 +0000 UTC]

XD I loved this little story! I loved how you made Dark act like a pet!

Note to Self: Never give animals a bath unless you got them pinned down.

My dog does that ALL THE TIME!! She hid in my room when I said the word 'bathtub' next to her. I was referring to a joke I was told, but she took it seriously. XD

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Nakurux In reply to TheBearbie [2011-02-07 22:30:28 +0000 UTC]

Hehe yeah. I had fun with that little OOC version of Dark. And man is that true. Many times my ferret has clawed up my arm to get out of the sink while bathing him...that hurt. A lot.

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TheBearbie In reply to Nakurux [2011-02-07 22:34:23 +0000 UTC]

Yow... I can imagine.

...XD [link] Got a good laugh outta this..

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Nakurux In reply to TheBearbie [2011-02-07 22:51:30 +0000 UTC]

Though it probably wouldn't have been as bad as Dark's claws...THAT would hurt.

I can't tell if that was brilliant...or what...

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TheBearbie In reply to Nakurux [2011-02-08 03:19:48 +0000 UTC]

Gotta wonder how Daxter and Tess managed to NOT to any scratches at the LEAST.

I know right?? I'm going to show it to my history teacher tomorrow at school :-D

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Nakurux In reply to TheBearbie [2011-02-08 21:41:20 +0000 UTC]

My guess is...they probably had his hands tied up good and tight. Or handcuffed at least.

That should be good...what are the odds your teacher would show it? XD

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TheBearbie In reply to Nakurux [2011-02-08 23:13:39 +0000 UTC]

Most likely that was the case. xD

IDK what the odds are but if he shows it, I'll be happy the remainder of the day : D

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zara2148 [2010-09-13 02:24:29 +0000 UTC]

Nice story! I like the explanation you came up with for why he couldn't change back.

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Nakurux In reply to zara2148 [2010-09-13 20:58:53 +0000 UTC]

Thanks! Not sure where I decided that was why he couldn't change back, but it fits I guess! Is that Mist as your icon? Or are my eyes just going bad...it looks like somebody from Rune Factory!

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zara2148 In reply to Nakurux [2010-09-13 22:42:36 +0000 UTC]

Yep, its Mist!

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Nakurux In reply to zara2148 [2010-09-13 23:58:31 +0000 UTC]

Yus! I got it right!

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zara2148 In reply to Nakurux [2010-09-14 01:24:52 +0000 UTC]

Yay!

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EllyWithAWhy [2010-08-13 15:26:30 +0000 UTC]

Again: hahahaha!! I love Jak Good moment with Sig and the pipe right there.. could just imagine that happening.. Great story!

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Nakurux In reply to EllyWithAWhy [2010-08-21 14:54:02 +0000 UTC]

As could I hehe. Sig + pipe = Ouch...

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EllyWithAWhy In reply to Nakurux [2010-08-21 21:02:01 +0000 UTC]

Poor Jak..


But still... on some other level... HAHAHAHA!!!

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Nakurux In reply to EllyWithAWhy [2010-08-23 15:57:12 +0000 UTC]

He'll heal...if he can survive two years of dark eco experiments, a conk on the head is nothing to him! ...I hope. XD

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EllyWithAWhy In reply to Nakurux [2010-08-23 22:26:55 +0000 UTC]

Haha true He's totally taken worse and lived

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BloodyJosie [2009-09-11 21:43:11 +0000 UTC]

that fanfiction was cool, a little bit dark and...sweet
Hahah Darkie is always adorable

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Nakurux In reply to BloodyJosie [2009-09-12 11:42:11 +0000 UTC]

Really? Thanks! Yeah he is...in his own little way.

*stares* Your icon is awesome!

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BloodyJosie In reply to Nakurux [2009-09-12 11:44:43 +0000 UTC]

I hope we all can see more of him in the next game

Thanks

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Nakurux In reply to BloodyJosie [2009-09-12 11:53:42 +0000 UTC]

I hope so too. Him and Light both rock!

No problem! ^_^

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BloodyJosie In reply to Nakurux [2009-09-12 11:59:22 +0000 UTC]

Totally agree!
I saw screenshots from the game and Dax is now dark too.
He looks scary

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Nakurux In reply to BloodyJosie [2009-09-12 18:00:14 +0000 UTC]

...he is!? Cool! And he looks scary? Even cooler!!

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BloodyJosie In reply to Nakurux [2009-09-12 18:04:44 +0000 UTC]

haha, I think he looks cute too...in a special kind of way, ya know?
[link]
I hope this is not a fake

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