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Published: 2006-01-03 01:43:13 +0000 UTC; Views: 266; Favourites: 1; Downloads: 6
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Description ~ Verisimilitude ~


Instilled into the pantheon of the demigods
desperate to feed my emotional sickness
the evident void that courses its way through
consuming our mindless shadows to fall short
in contrition of our shame we will never amount
we will forever walk under someone else's glory

so the individual defines humanity
but our collective minds forces us to walk blindly
a constant pain to match the fashion of our shells
the endless defamation for being ourselves
and not accepting what provides true happiness..
im worthless inside and the world disowns it
for being small minded is bliss on its own

and the marks from the noose are still clear
because their image will always have bruised my view
but my dormant perfection is seen by only one
the winged silhouette that ignored the world
and in turn, my views upon my pathetic reflection
the one that bore the serenity in humanity,
perfection in damnation

nameless..

so i shall call her mine..
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Comments: 21

DreamWake [2006-02-06 02:01:39 +0000 UTC]

Superb, as usual...

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nalster73 In reply to DreamWake [2006-02-06 06:21:00 +0000 UTC]

thanks.. and for the fav too

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Hollowsins [2006-01-11 15:50:31 +0000 UTC]

Nicely done, Ilove the imagery, the mood, structure
It's all very well done,

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nalster73 In reply to Hollowsins [2006-01-11 21:53:45 +0000 UTC]

thanks

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Ryu777 [2006-01-05 13:07:26 +0000 UTC]

written amazingly I love the style great work nals

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nalster73 In reply to Ryu777 [2006-01-05 13:36:29 +0000 UTC]

thanks

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Ryu777 In reply to nalster73 [2006-01-06 12:39:27 +0000 UTC]

you're welcome

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petula-faerie [2006-01-05 04:18:39 +0000 UTC]

sorry it has taken me so incredibly long to comment, but things has been . . . emotional lately, been in no poetry reading frame of mind.

oh man i love all the words you have used, they all work togetehr to creat this image but they sort of contradict one another aswell if you look at them alone. and i like the title, not sure what it means i just like how the word looks and how it feels when i say it out loud...

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nalster73 In reply to petula-faerie [2006-01-05 04:28:05 +0000 UTC]

first off.. never apologise for not reading or commenting on my work.. You arent obligated at all to do that and im not going to mind if you dont at all (let alone later) read my work..

verisimilitude is a word i always wanted to use as a title for a poem since '04.. but i havent found anything that suits it.. It means something that looks authentic or true, something that appears to be real... Which is what i think defines the individual in society..

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petula-faerie In reply to nalster73 [2006-01-05 04:36:51 +0000 UTC]

there you go leanr soemthing new everyday.


and you cant stop me from apologising
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nalster73 In reply to petula-faerie [2006-01-05 07:40:36 +0000 UTC]

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petula-faerie In reply to nalster73 [2006-01-05 07:42:47 +0000 UTC]

lol you are the greatest

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nalster73 In reply to petula-faerie [2006-01-05 09:19:07 +0000 UTC]

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FaintStarsCry [2006-01-03 16:17:59 +0000 UTC]

i really like this style. to me, it seems like i'm looking at your poem like a story. very good job!

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nalster73 In reply to FaintStarsCry [2006-01-03 20:29:49 +0000 UTC]

im gald you do.. thankyou

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sonictempest [2006-01-03 05:06:02 +0000 UTC]

beautiful words, and a nice style, i really like it.

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nalster73 In reply to sonictempest [2006-01-03 09:44:25 +0000 UTC]

thanks

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sonictempest In reply to nalster73 [2006-01-03 10:15:57 +0000 UTC]

welcome.

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sa-chan [2006-01-03 03:06:22 +0000 UTC]

Well, I for one, am speechless. It's beautiful, Nals. I did miss your writing very much while you were gone, and I enjoy this new style as well.

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nalster73 In reply to sa-chan [2006-01-03 11:35:54 +0000 UTC]

thankyou

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sa-chan In reply to nalster73 [2006-01-03 17:31:08 +0000 UTC]

anytime :]

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